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Comment by | Premier Author | | Premier Reader | | Poet Rating     Rank: 71 | Author Rating For Short Works     Rank: 32 | Author Rating For Novels      | Script Rating      | Review Stars    Rank: 74 | | |
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Wow! Dean, this is a terrific poem, one of your very best. I enjoyed it the whole way through. And I wouldn't dare touch it with suggestions, though suggestions are my delight. I love the inner rhyme of almost every line. You nail child molesters to walls of Hades. And I agree, that's exactly where they belong.
So many great lines, but here are my favorites of each verse:
"Oh, how I long to thrill the throngs with poetic flights of fancy." ... double the alliteration, bravo!
"Romance is not the thing for me, it doesn't make me quiver." ...and so many posts in here are about love and romance, it nearly makes me sick.
"It's darker, deeper eerie creeps that cause me perspiration." ...love the assonance here.
"Near schoolhouse yards, they play their cards with careful calculation" ...you present quite an image here, Dean, and some perfect alliteration with "c" too.
"Foul fiendish freaks, sad twisted geeks, whose mental masturbation" ... inner rhymes of "freaks/geeks", the alliteration of "foul fiendish freaks" and "mental masturbation". "mental masturbation" is a brilliant phrase, the best in the poem.
"Yet they're the worst, the very first, to don the devils skin." ... what a great way to end the poem! It's sad to think that even Satan would pick on a child. But he is the source of evil. Molesters don his skin, as you so aptly put it.
I like your style, Dean. You're #1 in my books!
Have a great day!
cheers
Kimbob
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2016 |
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Comment by | Premier Author | | Premier Reader | | Poet Rating      | Author Rating For Short Works      | Author Rating For Novels     Rank: 2 | Script Rating      | Review Stars          Rank: 12 | | |
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I read this without that horrid music, and then everything, I felt was OK with me being able then to concentrate on your poem, which is written in a way, I felt are yes, they're monsters, and they are here. And they do prey on children and seem to wear the skin of the devil, and really in every walk of life..so many out there... and even teachers who abuse sexually even their own students... I really believe, besides, the wearer of the devil's skin, their cursed and I would think half of these people were abused themselves as children by those they trusted...though no excuse. And children abused in this manner should be given some adequate mental help intervention immediately and maybe schools could set up where kids are encouraged to speak up about this if they are Offenders of more than even a few crimes as this... should be locked up forever more, as they are habitual ...without it would seem any recourse. Though be analyzed and maybe best be send to an outcast place to live forever and do constructive labor, as making license plates, etc..And to be making a wage to pay for their living that way...entirely.... as our current prisons are overflowing, and tax payers are forever paying out to keep the bad guys locked away with the murderers.....Really I believe most prisoners who commit crimes are mentally ill.
World-wide, be it in Indonesia or other foreign places, it is so unreal how children are mistreated in this manner....And really a lot is a generational sin overseas, and more behind closed door here, though it is here in the US...Yes, this mortal sin is everywhere and rabid, unfortunately.
Thanks for sharing, though I think it would of been a lot better without any audio..Caressa_08
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Comment Written 28-Aug-2016 |
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2016
Thanks very much for taking the time to read and comment, Caressa.
I appreciate it as always.
~Dean
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