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The Devil's Skin


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Kingsrookviii
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Creepy as ever and the music thing kicked in and I about had to change my drawers! LOL. This is serious and appalling stuff, my friend. I have a quick solution for such sickos. BTW, I saw an article that I didn't dare open about a clown who tried to lure kids into a forest. No way in hell was I even going to read that crap. I hate clowns anyway. Anyway, this is your usual great job. Take care. Bruce.


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thanks for reading and commenting, Bruce.
    It is appreciated.
    ~Dean
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Your work never fails to astonish me. It is always poetically perfect, unimpeachable. And your subject matter makes me glad you live in Ohio, half a country away from me. :)

chris


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    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and respond to my work, Chris.
    It is greatly appreciated.
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It is true that our fantasy monsters are harmless while real monsters roam among us. Pedophilia like antisocial personalities are incurable. That's why we now have a data base that marks them like Cain, but they have to be caught first. What's disturbing is that they are often educated, even ordained, and place themselves into jobs like teachers, ministers, youth leaders, coaches, scout leaders, policemen, judges and I know two that were doctors. We have to teach our children that not every adult should be obeyed. I like the double rhymed in the lines of this poem.


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    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and respond to my work, seaglass.
    It is greatly appreciated.
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This starts out humrous but ends on a very dark note. Yes, human monsters are much scarier than make believe ones. No child or anyone else should fall victim to such evil.

You have smooth meter and strong aabb rhymes. Maybe you can mix romance with your favorite horror posts by writing about a romance in Hell. Though that is an oxymoron.

Keep writing

Joan


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    They did something very similar in the Ridley Scott directed film, Legend, Joan, starring Tom Cruise.
    Satan loved a pure innocent girl named Lilly, and set out to make her evil as well as his bride.
    But good always triumphs over evil, and he failed.
    Too bad it doesn't work that way in the "real world."
    Thanks for reading.
    ~Dean

reply by dragonpoet on 29-Aug-2016
    You're welcome. I haven't seen that Tom Cruise movie. I may just check it out. I agree that with your last statement.

    Joan
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Dean, as the grandmother of a girl who was sexually abused for 4 years, this poem makes me want to cry. Why, oh why, do abusers feel they must hurt a child? Like the scripture says it would be better for the abusers to have a millstone tied around their necks and dropped into the sea.
BTW my granddaughters abuser was sentenced to 125 years with no parole.
Patricia


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    Thank goodness he was, Patricia.I hope he never gets out.
    To me, there is no crime more reprehensible than to hurt and abuse an innocent child.
    A very good friend of mine was abused by his father for many years, and the mother divorced him once she found out what was going on.
    The damage had already been done, however, and despite therapy, he became what's known as a "cutter."
    Near his seventeenth birthday, and despite numerous efforts by his doctors and his mom to prevent his fascination with cutting himself, he went a bit too far and ended his life.
    Such a waste.
    I pray for your granddaughter, Patricia. I hope that whatever damage the monster did to her can be rectified, and she can enjoy a fulfilling and happy life.
    As you and I both know, with God, all things are possible.
    Thanks for reading--I realize it is a very touchy topic, and I appreciate you doing so despite that.
    The spirit moved me to write this, so I did, come what may.
    I very much appreciate your six stars as well. I realize we have so few to go around.
    Thanks again, Patricia.
    God bless.
    ~Dean

reply by patcelaw on 29-Aug-2016
    My granddaughter is all grown up, happily married to a terrific guy and has a pretty 3 year old daughter. She had good counselling to recover and the Lord help her as well.

reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    That's great to hear, Patricia.
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Amen to your author notes--those are just the ones who get caught. So many more go unreported and unpunished, especially when it is a family member. Very well written poem, my friend~Debbie


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    Thanks for reading, Debbie.
    ~Dean
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Hi Dean:) It's not the ugly monsters of Grim's world that lurk under beds or bridges and exist only in the imagination or nightmares of children. These entertain me. Its the monsters that live in human skin and wait for innocent victims that scare and bother me.

Well portrayed in this great poem.

Roger


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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
    Thank you for the thoughtful comments, Roger, and for taking the time to read and comment.
    I appreciate your generous feed back and rating very much.
    Take care, and thanks again.
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Dean,

Your poem is awesome for so many reasons. The artwork is perfect although the young girl is so sad to see. Your color scheme is perfect too. The internal & ending rhymes are superb. I believe rhyme is important to carry readers along. Yours did just that for me. The rhymes are not obtrusive, but add another layer to the poem.

I find it interesting that you made this into two parts, but they work together well. I like your reasoning in the first 3 verses. It is fun to read about you. But the change in the last 3 verses really makes a statement about your feelings & the sad state of society with the child abuse issue. Thank you for speaking up for the innocent victims that are too often lost in the whole issue that has developed around these horrific crimes. I don't believe these offenders should be released unless the devil takes possession and escorts them to Hell. Our tax dollars need to go to the innocent victims not to supporting these criminals in hospitals & jails etc. with 3 meals, medical care, & college education. Then they release many & the whole thing starts over for many of them.

What I like about this poem is how it showcases your talent but gives readers such insight into you as a person. Well done. Jan



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    Thank you for the thoughtful comments, Jan, and for taking the time to read and comment.
    I appreciate your generous feed back and six star rating very much.
    Take care, my friend, and thanks again.
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Child abusers should be given a punishment right out of the middle ages. This is very well written with a vivid flow of words, making for a very good read.


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    I agree, Charlie.
    Thank you very much for your comments.
    ~Dean
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Give me vampires and zombies any day of the week. If sex offenders have an illness they should be put where they cannot do any harm. This poem says a lot of what I think about them as well. Thank you for sharing.


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    Thank you for the thoughtful comments, dmt, and for taking the time to read and comment.
    I appreciate your generous feed back and six star rating very much.
    Take care, my friend, and thanks again.
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