and yet you've never left said heart, despite the interim,
for fondness has no limits, and delights in requiem,
as poems as lovely as the smell the sea to sailors sends
leak from you across the cosmos to your distant friend
for though bold sunshine overpowers all it faces in battle
the war is often by the shadow.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2016
Oh wow. Aaron. I thought that I had lost you. PM me or email me and tell me where you are at with your poetry. I think about you and Lisa and the ever growing tornadoes often. I hit 71 on August 15. Still a ways to go before before the hundred. Workin' on it. I miss your words. Determined to hang in. We have a date in Arizona :-) You have put a big smile on my face. Love to you and yours - DJ xx
What a lovely poem Sax...superb internals and no I won't forget your hair-brained aspirations LOL
You rhyme like no other and who could make such joy from a single raindrop on a leaf as you?
When you talk about this person I feel the tenderness and compassion in your voice.
Perfect closer and the love that is described throughout resonates and trails off into the warm fuzzies
Sixer for you
Comment Written 05-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2016
Thanks Strawbs. Far too generous I reckon but I gotta love that gold cross :-) I actually revisited and did a minor edit. What's the old 'turnip'? Hiding behind every cynic is a hopeless romantic. Guilty as charged.
A reflective and melancholy seeking of something in the loss of a dearly loved partner.
There's a wonderful line to start:Take the time to take the time and have a look around ... The repetition hints of how hard it is to recover from loss, how hard it is to look beyond the grief and start again.
Sure there's joy in the beauty of a raindrop, but that's only the beginning of the journey back. Too many tears to go yet.
vs 2 exults what the relationship meant, but closes with regret at loss and reconnection to the notion of starting again. That you say she chose to join God because of his will, shows that she may have been a believer and the voice of the poem might have some reservation or cynicism about the great beyond.
It's just one of those unanswerable conflicts of human belief and the need to understand.
Great versification. Good metre and rhyme allowing the words and natural imagery to find a place in the reader's mind.
A sensitive, fine work.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2016
Thanks mark. My wife passed many years ago now and i have moved on, but just occasionally I miss her dreadfully. I am very lucky in my beautiful daughter and my friends, who taught me how to laugh again :-) I guess that both my wife and myself DID believe in God. we just didn't get along with him very well. Thanks again, my friend - DJ
When one leaves another enters, but we're still left with the remembrance of all that went before. We grieve some more than others and some we don't really grieve at all. It's just one of those things. Good rhyming and word choices in this interesting poem. Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2016
Thank you Marilyn. one of my sentimental moments. Cheers - DJ