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A Mortician's Circus Macabre


A dream inspired poem...

  91 total reviews 
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Aussie
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"Smile tho' your heart is breaking, smile when your awakening. You just smile." Now, what brand of lippy (lipstick) are your clowns wearing? I think I would like some Helena Rubenstein! Jimi and her night-mares, she should take some hay to bed to feed them. Hee, Hee. As per usual, I enjoyed your tales of the macabre. Congrats. on All Time Best. I have been on holidays, just catching up now. Love, K.


 Comment Written 24-Sep-2016


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It's high noon and I'm sitting in a place full of people, yet this poem scared the blank out of me. I love a good thrill when it's told with elegance. The words are juicy and bold, the character's fear is tasty and memorizing. And, I know this is going to sound crazy, but it has the same melody as that fine Christmas poem "Twas the night before Christmas". I don't know why I heard the same beat but I did.

Wow!!!!!


 Comment Written 22-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
    Thanks you, Muffins, I really appreciate you taking the time to read this poem.
    You probably noticed the same beat because I employed the same meter in composing this, anapestic trimeter, at least for the most part.
    I'm very grateful for your outstanding comments and six stars.
    More than anything else, I am really glad that you enjoyed the poem.
    Thanks again!
    ~Dean :}

reply by Muffins on 23-Sep-2016
    Your welcome.
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Hi Dean;
-What a read! My God, what a Read! You're a fascinating writer with wit and ingenious creativity. Thou shall not steal another wedding ring or else all hell will break loose and the dead will come for you.
-Great inner and exterior rhyming and superb rhythm to enhance the enjambment
to flow its undisturbed Flowing with your conceptual theme throughout the writing Without a hiccup.
-And what added visual enhancement of pictures throughout the writing just to give you that extra chill.
-I really enjoy this one being sorry it took so long for me to read it and review it but I am gardening and a major overhaul and I'm just getting around becoming Mr. contest.
-Take care my friend and God bless.
Alex
PS: I made you a call about whether or not you would be interested in Dragon 13. It's a programmable speech recognition program where you speak and it types. It's for free because I've increased mind to Dragon 15. It's just as fast just I have bells and whistles now.


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    I already own Dragon software, Alex.
    I love it, and I've had it for two years now.
    Thanks for thinking of me, however, and for reviewing my poem.
    Take care,
    ~Dean

reply by krys123 on 22-Sep-2016
    And I just upgraded to 15 and it works really well a lot better than 13. I've had for about seven years now and I think it's a great invention besides the invention of toilet paper! Chuckle!.
    Alex

reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
    AND sliced bread, LOL... :)
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This is you for sure. This is your kind of poetic thoughts. You do them so very well. Structured perfectly and the rhythm is spot on. This is an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    Actually, it was Jimi who gave me the idea. I just took her dream and ran with it...with her blessing, of course.
    Thanks for reading.
    ~Dean
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DR DIP
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One of you best..I know because I base it on "The shit myself meter" and thats what this poem has made me do! thanks Deano for another macabre post!!


dipster


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    The "shit meter". Haha, that's funny, Dipster, LOL.
    Hey, thanks for reading this dream inspired poem and responding so favorably.
    Your kind comments and generous six stars are deeply appreciated, as always.
    Take care, cobber.
    Pleasant Screams, heh-heh!
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After such a ghastly poem, why am I smiling and laughing? Delighted is the only word that comes to mind.

This is the kind of poem I would expect of a man wearing a top hat and a spider, not the love poems I've read. I told you that before, and you have proven me right. You have a powerful gift, my friend.

Every word, every rhyme, is utter perfection.

I don't like the clowns, but that is undoubtedly your desired reaction. I do however love the old creepy house. Your title is spectacular. Are there even any words to describe how a genre that I normally don't like could make me feel so thrilled?

I love that Jimi, who is such a talented poet herself, gave you the idea from a dream. You have done that dream justice.

Kelly


 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    Hey, thanks for reading this dream inspired poem and responding so favorably.
    Your kind comments and generous six stars are deeply appreciated, as always.
    Thanks again, and take care Kelly.
    Pleasant Screams, heh-heh!
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What a wonderfully, fun piece you have delivered Dean! The flow tantalizes the tongue as goosebumps ran up and down my arms. I do not care much for clowns, compliments of our own Stephen King.
In case you didn't hear... I LOVED IT!!!!
God bless!
Steve


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    Hey, thanks for reading this dream inspired poem and responding so favorably.
    Your kind comments and generous six stars are deeply appreciated, as always.
    Thanks again, and take care, Steve.
    Pleasant Screams, heh-heh!

reply by Neonewman on 30-Sep-2016
    Ooooh! Pleasant screams! I love it.
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So do you think this might be a little harsh to read to the sunday school kids???? Great story!! creepy!..but awesome story!!!


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Uh, yeah, Susan, it probably is.
    But hey, it might scare them into never wanting to take anything that doesn't belong to them, and that's a good thing.
    Thanks for reading.
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Dean, this is a total masterpiece.

I so enjoyed your poem a la Edgar Poe, with perfect anapestic meter and incredible pictures.

Great artistry here, thumbs up, my friend.

Love, Yelena


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    Hey, thanks for reading this dream inspired poem and responding so favorably, Yelena.
    Your kind comments and generous six stars are deeply appreciated, as always.
    Thanks again, and take care.
    Pleasant Screams!
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Hello Dean,

Message to parents ... if you don't want your kids to ever steal, just read Dean's poem to them as a bedtime story. Guaranteed to do the trick! :)

This was a delightfully devilish, creative write that I thoroughly enjoyed reading. I particularly like that you ended your poem with a warning to be good and not to steal, or else suffer a similar fate. Great imagery created for your reader with your terrific wording. Loved the flow and all of the alliterations used. "Blissful bonny sleep" made me smile. "bonny" ... now there's a word one rarely hears any more!
I love the format that you have used, with excellent internal rhyming on each line. The whole poem is great, but my favourite part is:
"a vapid vapour wrapped my form, the room fell dark, the night grew warm
as hell's hounds brayed from depths below I knew it was my time to go" ... very creepy ... very brilliant!

Connie


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    Hey, thanks for reading this dream inspired poem and responding so favorably.
    Your kind comments and generous six stars are deeply appreciated, as always.
    Thanks again, and take care, Connie.
    Pleasant Screams, heh-heh!
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