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A Mortician's Circus Macabre


A dream inspired poem...

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Delahay
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This line seemed odd to me, perhaps the repeated "I".
"I thus inclined inside I'd go." Should the first one be left off? This does tell quite the cautionary tale does it not?


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my macabre offering, Delahay.
    Take care,
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Mary Wakeford
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I am speechless, which is going to be a bitch trying to write a review on this masterpiece. I will likely get bonked by FS saying my review was inadequate and then will lose what I had already written!

All kidding aside, you are the master of spook, and of presentation. This is utterly remarkable in consideration of both. The storyline is priceless and I'm certain stealing from the dead happens more often than we'd like to think.

This is being bookcased by m;wa!


 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this poem, Mary.
    I apologize for my delay in responding.
    Don't think for one moment that it's not because I don't appreciate it--I do! It's just been really crazy around here of late.
    I can't take all of the credit for this one, with the exception of writing it. Our own Jimi (jlsavell) provided me with the inspiration for it by sharing her dream with me. I changed it around quite a bit, but she still gave me the idea.
    So, having said all of that, thanks so much again for your thoughtful comments and very generous six stars.
    I deeply appreciate it!
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Another terrifying grisly tale from your quill dear boy. Well told and illustrated as always. BUT, there is a hook I perceive tucked away amid the frightening images and cold handed corpses. Was it intentional? or were you just being your usual quaint self? The last verse , 1st line "If I don't tell I'd be remiss" Now what does this line signify? To me it says"Don't leave others to indulge in foolish , dangerous behavior if you know what it will lead to. Warn them , tell them what the consequences may be if they continue." The sneaky theft of a wedding ring , the abuse of a position of trust. They will have their payment in the fullness of time. That's what this poem is about . Nemesis awaits . cheers Cass


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this poem, Cass.
    I apologize for my rather lengthy delay in responding.
    Don't think for one moment that it's not because I don't appreciate it--I do! It's just been really crazy around here of late.
    I can't take all of the credit for this one, with the exception of writing it. Our own Jimi (jlsavell) provided me with the inspiration for this by sharing her dream with me. I changed it around quite a bit, of course, but she still gave me the idea.
    So, having said all of that, thanks so much again for your thoughtful comments and very generous six stars.
    I deeply appreciate it!
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Dean My friend,
I wonder after reading this will I have a nightmare, and the clowns especially the first clown almost scared me out of my socks. Dean you are so good at what you do and I really enjoyed every word penned. I love the moral to this most haunting read, DO NOT STEAL and to stay away from clowns that look like the ones in the amazing read. Thanks for sharing....................Portia


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this poem, Portia.
    I apologize for my rather lengthy delay in responding.
    Don't think for one moment that it's not because I don't appreciate it--I do! It's just been really crazy around here of late.
    I can't take all of the credit for this one, with the exception of writing it. Our own Jimi (jlsavell) provided me with the inspiration for this by sharing her dream with me. I changed it around quite a bit, of course, but she still gave me the idea.
    So, having said all of that, thanks so much again for your thoughtful comments and very generous six stars.
    I deeply appreciate it!
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Dude! This is one of your very best. If I didn't know you better, I'd say you better stop smoking that shit or your dick will fall off. LOL. this is really good stuff though, DeanO

""whose wedding band you stole from here? She wants it back, she's very near.
If I were you, I'd run, my dear." Just then, one clown-like corpse advanced.
It held me spell-bound in its glance, I could not break its horrid trance."

Bravo! Bob


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this poem, Bob, my old friend.
    I apologize for my rather lengthy delay in responding.
    Don't think for one moment that it's not because I don't appreciate it--I do! It's just been really crazy around here of late.
    I can't take all of the credit for this one, with the exception of writing it. Our own Jimi (jlsavell) provided me with the inspiration for this by sharing her dream with me. I changed it around quite a bit, of course, but she still gave me the idea.
    So, having said all of that, thanks so much again for your thoughtful comments and very generous six stars.
    I deeply appreciate it!
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reply by Mastery on 21-Sep-2016
    Start watching Kelly 2 works. Really good stuff. Bob

reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    I've read a few of hers already, and I completely agree. :)

reply by Mastery on 21-Sep-2016
    Good.
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Hi Dean,

I always like reading your poetry although much of the time I don't exactly know what they're all about, still they're very interesting for this old lady to read. Also I like the money I can make from it.

MizKat


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Oh, gee. Thanks.
    Why don't you try reading the author's notes once in a while? Maybe that would help you understand.
    It ain't rocket science.
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I love it!!! 'Hell's clown menagerie!!!! And his grandma..."remember Mrs. Glickman dear?'...too much, I would have run like hell too, alas, too late!!! Love your darling moral....do not steal. Adore all the spooky pictures!!!! Blessings....


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this poem, Judy.
    I apologize for my rather lengthy delay in responding.
    Don't think for one moment that it's not because I don't appreciate it--I do! It's just been really crazy around here of late.
    I can't take all of the credit for this one, with the exception of writing it. Our own Jimi (jlsavell) provided me with the inspiration for this by sharing her dream with me. I changed it around quite a bit, of course, but she still gave me the idea.
    So, having said all of that, thanks so much again for your thoughtful comments and very generous six stars.
    I deeply appreciate it!
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reply by Irish Rain on 21-Sep-2016
    Never, never, never worry about replies!!! No one has the time to write the poem, write reviews, and write replies....not a problem!

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Well a FS member's dream... with her perception and your own recollection, I do think as now entertains us here with a remarkable story ...a bit of humor displayed of possible horror, especially scary about those clowns, and the current news of the day...hunting the main persona down maybe all the way to the ground.

Your poem sets very well with me, and just to think...the profession of being a mortician....every day and every night it seems would stay with one to perform such tasks, and so hard to grasp.

This poem also shows us a good lesson about stealing, and too, of other sins that we should not keep before it's time for our final resting place... though for a lot of us... we really never know when that will be.

Thanks for sharing...Caressa


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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review this poem, Caressa.
    I apologize for my rather lengthy delay in responding.
    Don't think for one moment that it's not because I don't appreciate it--I do! It's just been really crazy around here of late.
    I can't take all of the credit for this one, with the exception of writing it. Our own Jimi (jlsavell) provided me with the inspiration for this by sharing her dream with me. I changed it around quite a bit, of course, but she still gave me the idea.
    So, having said all of that, thanks so much again for your thoughtful comments and very generous six stars.
    I deeply appreciate it!
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reply by Caressa_08 on 22-Sep-2016
    You are very welcome, Dean Kuch.. And I'm not one who will hold you, or any author here.. at tooth or nail, to reply, even to a six star review, as there is only so many minutes in a day...And truly understand, if you couldn't of gotten around to it.

    Caressa_08 .
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His Grayness
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I do hope no creature of remorse and revenge shall visit upon my Fanstory presence or wing some evil raven of consequence upon me for laying down my shameful five stars upon this work deserving ten or more. For here I sit with trembling fingers, tearing eyes, and total disgrace for having not the courage to ignore this fine work whilst knowing I would not have the minimal sixth star to pay for my (certain to be) overwhelming delight. Ah! here I must ask forgiveness yet offer sincere gratitude for such a remarkably brilliant presentation of imagination, in every possible and Impossible way...delivered with deep gratitude! HIS GRAYNESS Vance


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my macabre offering, Vance.
    Take care,
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I for one found this rather disturbing and i looked forward to it from the king of macabre.
Excellent double rhyme as only you can do and still bring chills to the undead.
Very welll told and very well interpreted from a dream.
Id hate to see what you do with my nightmares.lol


 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016



reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
    Yes, I'm sure you would, Barb.
    Thanks for reading.
    ~Dean
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