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Who Was the Dust?


For foxangie123, Dean Kuch, and all others dealing with loss

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karenina
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What a movng honorarium to all souls now passed. They live on, in earnest, in the memories treasured, the hearts that love them still and through eternity!

Karenina


 Comment Written 07-May-2018



reply by the author on 07-May-2018
    Thank you, K, for your understanding review of this old post. -- Mike
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This must be my day for compassion. This poem also reminds me of one of my own. Please don't ask me to "type" it, since I have no knowledge of poetry styles, he-he.

A lone flat stone I found in Nevada.
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A common rock that lies alone,
a faded script upon the stone
I wash it off, intent to peruse
its secrets of a bygone age to amuse
an otherwise empty day.
Now open to my anxious probe.

I see it marked a grave, alas now gone,
from 1863, a year for death, long foregone.
Its bones, consigned to dust, can ill accuse
this wandering traveler of rough abuse,
Where do they now lie on this globe?

I hope poor Phoebe Ja _ _ d_ _e didn't die alone
On these, then empty, windswept plains without anyone
to hold her cold, cold hands, or worse, refuse
her solace in her choice of God or Gods to choose.
Sleep well my dear, please forgive this, my errant sob.

Charlie


 Comment Written 11-May-2017



reply by the author on 11-May-2017
    Thank you, Charlie, for again providing a poem of your own in response to one of mine. You clearly conveyed your compassion for that woman who died over 150 years ago, whose only memorial is that loose headstone. I won't critique your poem for punctuation (unless you ask). Nor will I categorize its poetic form (type), as I never write to established poetic
    form myself. I let the words naturally flowing to me create the form, rhyme scheme, and meter. I like this poem of yours, and find it moving. Thanks again. -- Mike
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No wonder this poem was selected as poem of the month. It was so well written to that dust that remains
So many hearts do remember.


 Comment Written 13-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Richard, for your kind and complimentary review of this poem. Actually, it was nominated but did not win. No matter, as it has real meaning for me -- my wife, both my parents and hers, her younger brother, all my aunts and uncles, some of my many cousins, and some of my friends gone over the years; yet they all live on in memory. Thanks again. -- Mike
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This is a touching poem. Anyone can identify with your well
written words. As long as the heart remembers, the living will
remember those who are gone. Nicely done. Marilyn


 Comment Written 06-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 06-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Marilyn. We all go through both sides of this eventually -- the loss of one we cared about, and concern over whether we, ourselves, will be remembered. I originally wrote this three years ago, but posted it here to comfort FS friends who recently experienced family losses. Thanks again. -- Mike
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Mike, this is beautiful. Hearts always remember...and those we love are tucked down deep inside...waiting for the day we can be together again.


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Susan. The Irish have a Wake; in New Orleans, the tradition in many faiths now includes a Jazz Funeral; and the Jews have "Remembrance unto Life" -- which is unending. I acknowledge my parents' dates of passing; but I celebrate their lives on their birthdays, and think of the many blessings I received through their love every day.

    Thanks again, and I appreciate the extra star too. -- Mike
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Life what a powerful word
it can be we are alive or
we are not alive.
Living on earth
can have its ups and downs
when we die we turn to dust.

Honey tree

I have no six left



 Comment Written 19-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
    Thank you for your poetic reply to my post. I'm glad you liked it, and I do appreciate the Virtual Six. Thanks again. -- Mike
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A very well-written poem. We all lose someone close to us one or other time and this poem will comfort anyone that suffer such a loss. At the end all that remains are the memories.


 Comment Written 19-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Sandra, for your kind review. When my friends here started posting recently about their family losses, I had to put this poem up because I already had it. I'm glad if it brings some solace. -- Mike
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Very well put with how oncw we pass on, only those still living might think of us dead ones. Like an old grave stone from 100 years ago...who cares? Sorry to be so tuff on the dead. Boyd


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Boyd, for your comments. The extent to which the living care depends a lot on the nature of the memories. Those who made a positive difference in others' lives will be remembered better and longer. Those who have posted here about lost family members clearly recall them fondly. -- Mike
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Barb Hensongispsaca
Barb Henson
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Oh my goodness what a wonderful piece on loss.
This is one that i would have honored and loved coming from someone that definitly cares when my sons died.
You are a very wonderful caring person and this is excellently done from the heart


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Barb. I am so glad you find solace in this poem. When I saw my friends here posting about family losses, I had to put this one up, as I already had it. No one is entirely gone while anyone remains to remember. Thanks for the Six as well, but your words matter more. -- Mike
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My mother and father loved each other very much. My father's predeceased my my mother by 6 years. Their ashes were combined at her death and both distributed to the sea joined together forever in their fate. You have created a beautiful poem joined by fateful words that all family and friends remember.


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Alan, for sharing your remembrance of loving parents. I posted this poem for you and all others here who have such remembrances, no matter when our family members or friends may have left us. -- Mike
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