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Who Was the Dust?


For foxangie123, Dean Kuch, and all others dealing with loss

  24 total reviews 
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Hi Walkerman,

It is wonderful to remember things, but when a person gets to a certain age like I am, close to 80 years old, remembering is slowing leaving. At times I can't even remember all of my grandchildren's names and other simple things. Still I'm happy to be alive.

Kat


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you for your review. You can stave off memory loss by taking a good quality supplement of organic turmeric that includes ginger and bioperine (the latter being a compound found in black pepper). You need the extra ingredients because turmeric (active component is curcumin) is hard to absorb without their aid. Life Extension Foundation has a good kind, and
    it also has Cognitex to support brain function. I take both. That way, I can remember the names of the baby dinosaurs I played with as a kid, until they got too big. :)) -- Mike

reply by MizKat on 18-Oct-2016
    I wish I could remember things. Kat

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2016
    You CAN restore your memory, Kat. The information I just gave you about turmeric, ginger, and bioperine has been proven to work. It is not instant, but gradually does restore many brain functions affected by age, including memory. Vitamin B12 helps too. The best kind is a spray (under your tongue) available at http://www.Mercola.com (search for B12 on his site). This form of B12 is far better absorbed than what you can buy in pills or find in a multi-vitamin capsule. I use it myself. If you don't want to
    order these things over the internet, ask me and I'll give you the phone numbers (free to call). They accept credit or debit cards and are very friendly. -- Mike

reply by MizKat on 19-Oct-2016
    You are so nice Mike and I appreciate all your help. Kat

reply by the author on 19-Oct-2016
    You are welcome, Kat. Do you need the phone numbers? -- Mike

reply by MizKat on 20-Oct-2016
    Not right now, but maybe later. Kat

reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016
    Okay. -- Mike

reply by MizKat on 20-Oct-2016
    Thanks for being such a nice friend. Kat
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Who was the Dust, is a very clever type of poem. Everyone dies, and everyone leaves memories. The good memories last forever. I loved your poem and the style and the rhyme. The questions, asked! Very well done.


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you for your kind review. I had to post this when I saw my friends posting about their family losses. I hope it brings solace to all who know those feelings. I'm glad you liked it. -- Mike
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This is a heartfelt poem about dealing with loss. It shows the questions we ask. How we wonder whether we really knew the person. Memories help us answer these questions and let us cope. Let us laugh after awhile.

Keep writing

dragonpoet



 Comment Written 17-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you for your thoughtful review. When I saw my friends here posting about family losses, I knew I had to respond with this poem I already had. They seem to like it, so I hope it brings solace to others as well. You are right about memories -- we can see the humor too, sooner or later. Thanks again. -- Mike

reply by dragonpoet on 18-Oct-2016
    You're welcome. Writing and reading about loss brings solace and understanding.

    Joan
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Dean Kuch
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Excellent, Mike, and so very true.
The big hair rock 'n' roll group of the late '80s and early '90s, KANSAS, once wrote a song called "Dust in the Wind".
You may have heard of it:


I close my eyes only for a moment,
and the moment's gone
All my dreams
pass before my eyes, a curiosity
Dust in the wind, all they are is dust in the wind
Same old song,
just a drop of water in an endless sea
All we do
crumbles to the ground, though we refuse to see
Dust in the wind,
all we are is dust in the wind
Now, don't hang on,
nothing lasts forever but the earth and sky
It slips away,
and all your money won't another minute buy
Dust in the wind,
all we are is dust in the wind
(All we are is dust in the wind)
Dust in the wind
(everything is dust in the wind)
Everything is dust... in the wind (the wind)


It was the first thing I thought of as I began reading your wonderful piece.
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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Dean, for the kind review, the 1977 song lyrics (yes, I have and still like this song and many old ballads back into the 1940s), and the extra star. All of it means a lot coming from you. I hope my post brought you some solace, Dean. You may show it to your family, if you wish (but please do not give out copies, as my real name as author and copyright holder would not be on them). Take care, my friend. -- Mike
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How beautiful. So true, save the hearts that remember. I always wonder, while walking in cemeteries...who WERE these people? Their lives just as important as mine, at one time....does anyone remember? I loved this. Blessings....


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Bless you. Likely, most who left survivors were remembered. Those who were the last in their families were too, if they had friends. Some may have made a real difference in others' lives, and others just existed. All we can do is try to be in the former group. I think you are.... -- Mike

reply by Irish Rain on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you, you are too sweet!

reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    :))
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OH my this is so touching. I am weeping. You are so special and this is one of the most nicest things every done for me and Dean as well. I'm sending you hugs every second of every day. Hereğ?¤?. Thank youğ???


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you for your heartfelt review and the delightful hugs to go with it. When I repeatedly saw friends posting about family losses, I knew I had to put up this poem I already had. I am most pleased you, Dean, and others like it and find some solace in it. This is what true friends do, whether here or anywhere else -- and, as I said before, you have some real friends here. -- Mike
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This is a beautiful piece in tercets, that I am sure will be appreciated by those for whom it is written. I said that it was written in tercets but one should perhaps view it as a series off couplets with a refrain line, altered in all but the last three stanzas, only to reflect the gender of the departed.

The final three stanzas retain a very similar form while serving as a summing op of the feelings already expressed and comments on the frailty of life as we know it.


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Jim, for your detailed review. As my friends here posted lately about their family losses, I knew I had to put up this poem I already had. Your technical analysis of it is spot on and much appreciated. Thanks again. -- Mike
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This is a perfect poem for those left behind. It is a primer for remembering loved ones. The poem touches one's emotions by gently nudging the reader's remembering of those who have passed from this life. The entire work flows well. The rhyming works. The pic lends itself well to the sentiment. Love, especially, the last three lines.


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you for your kind review. The Irish incorporate this into their Wake tradition, it is part of the Jazz Funeral tradition in New Orleans, and Jews call it "Remembrance unto Life." Those who live honorably earn loving remembrance. Thanks for the extra star, though your words count even more. -- Mike

reply by HarryT on 17-Oct-2016
    You are welcome. Great job.
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This is a very well written poem you have penned. It is so sad but we all have had losses in our life that we remember. So full of great wording and great imagery. hugs, Teri


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Reply to Teri7 on 2016-1017

    Thank you, Teri, for your complimentary review of my poem. When some of my friends here started posting about their family losses, I knew I had to post this, as I already had it. Thanks for the sixth star, too. Hugs back. -- Mike
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Ask the hearts that remember because they won't forget who's in those jars. Nicely done, Thanks for sharing the thoughts and have a wonderful day.


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reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
    Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. Everyone wants to be remembered, preferably fondly. Thanks again. -- Mike
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