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Endless Stew


A loose metaphor for life.

  34 total reviews 
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frierajac
 
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Is the bonus meat - the Mouse, of the 1st paragraph, or something more substantial like opossum? this reminds me of an Australian tale, and I can't see
the word Chernoble here, although I get the drift.. that is the drift of radiation
causing certain developments, freakish. Mostly quite good, although I begin in
1890 and end in 1960, this is OK


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Thanks you. The Chernoble comment was simply an expression. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Cumbrianlass
 
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A real treat, James. The length did nae bother me one iota. I love Sophia. You write her well, you being a fella and her being not a fella.

of a ol' hag - no, it has to a 'an'. One simply cannot say a ol' at all.

Seems to me rice and maggots got similar parentage. - Right. Thanks for that. My friend, Hu Flung Dung, will miss seeing me at his eating establishment from now on. One cannot help, also, but think of weddings. Hurling maggots at the bride.

a raucous case of the sleepin' toots. - Hilarious. SBD's

And the agitated water rose on its hind legs to lick the spittin' clouds. - superb.

Simply spiffy and jolly good.

Love moi.

xx


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, MoneyPenny. Actually, I can say 'a ol'', but I've taken years of lessons.
    Sorry to have ruined rice for you. You'll have to eat your Kung Pao Shrimp over mashed potatoes from now on--nothing wrong with that.

    I'm glad you like this one, Av. Means a lot.

    Peace, Lee
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I don't know what to say. How can I make you understand how wonderful I think your story is, wonderful in so many ways.

Bless Sophie, she's making it on her own, asking for nothing and expecting less. Roy LaPointe wanting to help, but she won't let him. Then Lucy sends him back to help and Sophia ends up at the house. Lucy, being a lovely woman, make Sophia feel welcome.

Back on the hill with her stewpot and Stripe, Sophia is safe again, thanks to the La Pointe's.

I didn't mean to synopsize your story, but couldn't stop once I started. It's is a great story in so many ways. 8-)


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much for these very kind and encouraging comments. I don't mind synopses at all. They help me understand how the story is perceived. For me, that's a treat. So thank you again. And for the galaxy, too.
    Peace, Lee

reply by damommy on 25-Oct-2016
    You're welcome. 8-)
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So, I need to ask my friend, Where in the heck did you come up with this. LOL. I had to wonder if you had an inspiration for this piece. I just wrote a story for the contest, 'Would this be of interest to you dear'-but I got disqualified because I put 'any' interest by mistake. Anyway-I had a plethora of sayings in it, but could never beat your originals. Another great and I'm glad u didn't split it up.


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, frogbook. I never outline stories. I just start with a character or two and a situation. When I'm on my game, one sentence just leads to the next. The 'neo-adages' I like to throw in are the pleasurable aspect of writing. They are my antidote to clichés.

    I'm sorry your story was disqualified. You made me curious. I'll look it up. Maybe I can steal some neo-adages from you!

    Thank again. Peace. Lee
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I enjoyed your work and the metaphor is clever. As life goes on, we do tend to just add things to the mix. It's what makes us who we are and builds our lives. Sophia is a delightful character. This is well written.


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Thanks very much, ScarBundy. I enjoy playing around in home-spun philosophy. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Peace, Lee
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Craigitar
 
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Great writin' again, HW! I like this a lot--it's touching, uplifting and hopeful, contrasting wildly with all the crap seen on TV. This is the way things should be-- folks watching out for each other.

Craig


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, Craig. And you make a good point. The world seems to be 'on the brink'--several brinks--if you let the media tell it. And maybe we are. But life and stew carry on. Thanks again, my friend. Peace, Lee
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Absolute perfection, Lee. Sophia is a wonderful character, and she has firm friends in Roy and Lucy. Kindness and respect. The perfect foundation to simmer a metaphorical endless stew. :) Nancy


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2016
    Aw, shucks! Thank you, Nancy. In my dotterage, I'll look back at all my characters and I expect Sophia will stand out. Not necessarily alone, but in rarified company. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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Sis Cat
 
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Lee, strong opening line and visuals made me squirm and read more: "I reached into an open bag of soggy potato chip crumbs only to pull out a handful of scrigglin' scruffy mouse."

After that, I noticed your strong imagination. You took on the character of the homeless Sophia Lundquist and invited the reader to see the world through her eyes. As a storyteller, you are a chameleon.

I next noticed your relationships. You take two different characters (here, Sheriff Roy LaPointe and Sophia Lundquist) and put them together in an odd situation. They run with it, creating the dialogue and action that feels organic, natural, and true to character. Furthermore, I noticed the strong although at times contentious relationship between the two. The Endless Stew is a metaphor for the endless bonds we make with one another. Sophia states, "Eternal life an' Endless Stew is the same, Roy. You take a little out, other folks put a little in. But you don't never waste a drop. Never." That Endless Stew is as important as the eternal flame over JFK's tomb. The stew builds community and fellowship. Sophia comes off as a wise woman who stuck to her principles to teach us all a lesson.

The nod to Nobel laureate Bob Dylan is an added humorous bonus.

Thank you again, Lee, for sharing your entertaining and thought provoking writing.



 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thanks for this splendid review, Andre. Among your several fine comments, you mention my penchant for plopping a couple of characters into an odd situation. You've nailed my favorite MO. These are my basic ingredients--not all the time--but often.
    Again, you're right--the characters usually run with it. As the characterization develops, so does the story. I never outline my stories. I plop the characters where I want them, and let the fun begin. If you write good characters, the story will surprise you.

    Anyway, Andre, thanks for paying attention--and all the kind words.

    Peace, Lee
Comment by
foxangie123
 
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At times I agree that length doesn't matter when it makes zero sense or takes away from the story splitting it up. I think it needs minor revamping. The implications of BD take away from the read kind of.

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
    Thank you. What is BD? And what does 'kind of' mean?

    Peace, Lee
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Lu Saluna
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That was a really fantastic story. Homeless people are everywhere and disrespected frequently and it makes me angry. They have a story, it is their life, most of them lead their lives and leave everyone else alone in peace. It was a pleasure to read a story that showed a homeless woman respect, care, dignity and help.
Thank you for doing that in such an eloquent and poignantly written story.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thank you so much, lufoster. I'm delighted you enjoyed. I agree with you, concerning the plight of the homeless. Peace, Lee
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