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Endless Stew


A loose metaphor for life.

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I guess life goes on like endless stew. We just keep adding to it, flavorin' it with what ever comes along.
I enjoyed Sophia's perspective. Another great character, Lee.
:) ellen


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Ellen. It's funny. I hadn't thought through all the philosophical points ahead of time. They sort of revealed themselves to me as I wrote. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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I loved this Lee, about a quirky old lady, who's more afraid to accept help than be blown into the next county, but with the severity of the incumbent storm, is eventually forced to move, otherwise she might have been swamped, a pet skunk in tow. Excellent, it was a classic, worth a read in anyone's circle, great philosophical tie-in between endless stew and eternal life, why not, we need to cling to some constants, whether real or not! Blessings Lee, Roy


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Roy. It's funny. My philosophical thought about this were pretty when I started. But like stew, the philosophy thickened as it simmered. One of the many rewards of writing. Thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by royowen on 24-Oct-2016
    Well done, Lee, I know the feeling, well done,
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Once more, you have managed to crawl inside the head of your MC (a female, no less!) and spout all kinds of gems.
For example: 'drug all my sparse whatnots out onto the glade' Yep, I can hear her saying/thinking that.
Great alliteration here: 'various vice, varmints, an' vermin'
I also like the evidence portraying a sheriff who truly cared about people, even the homeless. (Or what we consider homeless; I doubt Sophia considers herself homeless.)
I also like the symbolism of Endless Stew. To me, it represented her faith and that no matter how things turned out, it would be ok. Not every pot of stew turns out the same; not every day turns out the same; not every life turns out the same. And it's all okay.
Thanks for an entertaining read.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, Heidi. I think you're right about the stew representing her faith. Honestly, I didn't realize that when I started writing. But like stew, the representation thickened as it simmered. Thanks for a great review. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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This morning I had thirty new posts in my message box. I saved yours until last. It made reading the others easier knowing that at the end I would come to yours.
You're my favorite author. You write the best stories on the site.


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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, Thomas. Your comments and kind words mean a lot to me. Again, thank you. Peace, Lee
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That was brilliant! I really did love this one, and it gave me such a giggle! You are a real story teller of the highest order, Lee, and that's the truth of it! I liked Sophia, what a wonderful character she is, and the dear sheriff and his wife, loved them to bits too. Especially when she sent him to the garage to hose down, LOL, love it! Well done, it was brilliant! Did I say that already? Yep, I sure did! :) Sandra xxxd


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, Sandra. This was one of those 'gift' stories that turn out meaning more that I expected when I began writing. Sophia and the Sheriff seemed to control the story, and me, right from the start. From a writer's point of view, it doesn't get any better. I'm really glad you like it. It confirms my hopes. Thanks again. Peace, Lee

reply by sandramitchell on 24-Oct-2016
    They were such strong characters, Lee, you had no choice but to go with it. It often happens with you, you're a lucky begger at times, lol! xxx
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I enjoyed this story, Lee :) I think you'll need to write an update on this one. I love the characters, the dialect, and the caring connection between the Sherrif's family and Sophia. I'm not a coconut fan, so next storm can they make peanut butter cookies instead?


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Doreen. Peanut butter it is, next time. I think Lucy wanted to treat Sophia to something exotic. Odd, my sister doesn't like coconut or pineapple, but she'll drink Pina Colada's all day! I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by Joy Graham on 23-Oct-2016
    The only time I can handle coconut is in the no-bake macaroon cookies. Anywhere else it gives me the shivers and makes my hair stand on end.
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Katrina, I suppose, or the one that followed her and the evacuations nearly killed everybody. The stewpot sounds like the chili cooker in the pool room, never was let get empty. Yeah, this is a fine story, Lee.


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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Red. I had no particular storm in mind. This one might not have earned a name. But every story needs a little fury. Thanks, my friend. Peace, Lee
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NO need to apologize for the length...your stories are entertaining to read!

How fun to read a first person female protagonist from your pen. Superb diction, as always, and characterization and dialog. Fine pacing, as usual.


Great line (original):
The sun shone brighter than a fresh penny from a careless banker's pocket.

Good original metaphor: Almighty Broom of The Eternal Read-'em-an'-Weep!


CLEVER:
"I can eat all the rice I want. Thing is, I don't want no rice. Lucy says that's what makes it a good diet. She's cagey, that one. But by her measure, I may as well go on the Cow Pie Diet--I don't want to eat none of that, neither."

LOL:

Seems to me rice and maggots got similar parentage.

* Lucy's garden went all Chernobyl this year(,) and we can't eat it all. S

* Ain't nothin' sweetens a stew like fresh carrots,(not a necessary comma) or gives it more spunk than starchy spuds."

Good simile--true to life for the setting:
The sky shone clearer than a fresh washed Mason jar.



Another good simile:
By sundown, the sky was low as a banker's heart, and nearly as black.

SUPERB PERSONIFICATION AND SIMILE:

The wind chased itself to torment the trees one way, then the next. My tent roof bulged one moment, sagged the next. Thunder rolled an' rumbled like a chorus of giant, throaty Rottweilers.

Nice Dylan references--what a medley! He's one of the best.


ASSUME this is a intentional slang not a typo, but just in case:
ten dollarses back.

*Also not sure I like the caps on Endless Stew. Seems self-conscious and melodramatic...but perhaps that is satirically intended?



* I pulled a Hefty Bag poncho over my head, ventured outside.

Hefty should be capped, but not Bag, I think.


NICE PERSONIFICATION: but the wind still whipped a furious jig.

HERE TOO: And the agitated water rose to lick the spittin' clouds.

AND HERE:

The wind swore nasty. My tent complained like popcorn in hot oil.


LOL: I'm arresting you and ridin' you down this muddy Armageddon like a surfboard."



*Noticed a few spacing typos here and there...you might want to scan through. Here's one spot:

But you don't never waste a drop . Never. The pot comes, or I don't."


Love the closing note of affection and care...Glad stripe didn't get blown away, and how nice she got two new socks!


Fine closing note with what the kerfuffle...


Good job. I was right there, ridin' the storm - literally!


Warmly, rd


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016



reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
    What a terrific review, rd. For the stars, but also for proving that people really read this stuff. Not to mention your editing expertise.

    I've given the story another scrub. Made most of the changes you recommend, and caught about half a dozen spacing problems. Thanks for the kind kick in the pants.

    Yes, 'ten dollarses' is intentional. In my mind, Sophia sees each ten dollars in an individual way.

    As for Endless Stew, I don't know. I tried it in lower case, and it doesn't quite work for me. To Sophia, Endless Stew is unique and proprietary. In a way, it represents her faith. Still, you have a point. So, how does this sound? I'll reduce the number of references to 'Endless' stew--resorting to (ordinary) stew. And, maybe, only Sophia will refer to it as Endless.

    Again, rd, I really appreciate that you get specific with what you like. The lines that move or amuse you. Those are the lines that define the characters. Those are the decorations on the cake.

    Thank you so much.

    Peace, Lee


reply by rama devi on 23-Oct-2016
    Hi Lee - I think some readers will love that Endless Stew is capped and also will love the playfulness of dollarses!

    I like your idea, too, of making the capped version special to when Sophia refers to it. That serves to further distinguish and enhance characterization.

    :-)))

    Thanks for your gracious response, Lee.

    Best, rd
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All I really have to say is ahhhhhh, I enjoyed reading every word of this post. It is NOT to long it's perfect. Great characters!!


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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
    Thanks so much, Barbara. 'Enjoyment' is the ultimate goal. I'm glad we connected. And thanks for the galaxy. Peace, Lee
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Yes, long but very entertaining. You have a gift of gab and make the reader feel what is happening. Great use of words, a very good tale!


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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2016
    Thank you, Daryn. Yes, I do have the 'gift of gab', and I love to put it to use via dialogue. I'm delighted you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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