God Teaches Us Life!
A 24 Line Fiction; God takes our tests, teaches us life
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Haiku about my son Basil

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This heart rending Haiku had a big impact on me. Schizophrenia is a soul wrenching, hope -dashing , possible suicidal condition not to mention the legal prospective. I wish you and your son the best. Thank you
What needs work - medical help, understanding.
Your Haiku NOTHING


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Cook slowly over an open fire. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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Those three short lines are very moving. The hopes we have for our children when it all boils down to just stay alive.

I went through years of dealing with an alcoholic son. So many times, I despaired, but God brought us both through it.

Your poem is heart-rending. In a good way. 8-)


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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Wow, oh wow, this is poignant and unforgettable! I never expected such a twist in that last line. In its brevity, this poem tells a story, yet leaves much to reader's imagination. The reader is left pondering after reading the poem. Very few poems move me as yours.

Good luck in the contest.


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Oh, Lord, your poem immediately brought tears to my heart and eyes!
I too have a son with schizophrenia and in just 16 words, 3 short lines, you have said all I try to say in pages.
What more can you ask of a poem?
Beautiful!


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