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I love the way you use rhyme in this, internal as well as external. It works so well because we have the story in the notes to guide us. I wonder if that story, the first part, meeting the psycho, could somehow be incorporated into the poem so that the note would not have to carry the development of the story. It should not need to lengthen the whole thing by more than two lines at the most.

I know I am renowned here for writing copious notes but the explain things in my poetry rather than telling the actual tale. That is the job of the poem.


 Comment Written 24-Oct-2016


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The use of descriptive adjectives to describe the knife, the sky, and others is beautiful and vivid. I felt as if I could actually see what you were seeing. Nice Job!


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Vivid recollection of a harrowing tale, according to your notes.

Halloween can mean many things to many people.

Should make an interesting entry into this contest.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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Wow, glad you's survived this nut case. Nice write on the experience on this. Wish you the best of luck on this. have a wonderful day.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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This is interesting. I wonder, given the author notes if this wouldn't be better received if it were non-fiction thriller.

Nice entry.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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Not only is this a Halloween poem, it's a true story. I hope they caught the guy who assaulted you. Thank God you were all right. This story brings a new meaning to trick or treating at your house. This is very well written. Good luck in the contest. Have a great day and God bless.
mike


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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This has all the elements of a ghoulish poem. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.


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Please considering editing your post. Only the formatting appears in the poem, and not the poem's contents.

Upon completion, please contact me so I reread and review your post. Thank you.


 Comment Written 23-Oct-2016


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