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This is a poem for my son, Basil.

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Lu Saluna
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Schizophrenia and a couple of other disorders run very prominently in my family. I was very lucky not to inherit Schizophrenia. Others in my family were not as fortunate.
The pain you must have felt to see your son go to prison for something he had no control over. The fear and anguish he must have felt. I cannot imagine it. There is no words to comfort other than to know he is now working, seeing his family and daughter and hopefully not being haunted by what he cannot control.
An extremely well put together piece. Keeping people informed is important. Mental illness is not something to be hidden but something to be treated and treated with respect like any other illness.
Blessings to you and your family


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A very well-written poem. It was very creatively done, although it was very difficult to read some parts of the poem. I resized as much as possible and managed to follow the message you want to bring across.


 Comment Written 16-Nov-2016


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This is a brilliant presentation of a tragic, true-life story.
The artistic/news article imagery is visually brilliant as well.

Conveying the confusion of a young man's mind, the reader is brought in, to recognize, to feel, the confusion his family endures right along with him.

Stevenson's poem...I had to stop reading, to just follow it, then return and add the news article. The whole presentation evokes memories of innocent childhood, melding them with a horrifying present reality.

It is educational and thought provoking. Society as a whole reacts, as well it should, to fear of unhealthy, potentially violent individuals. At the same time it typically judges parents.

The thought that this mother has the courage to tell the truth of her son's behavior, is inspiring. Many parents are cowed into silence out of the need for self-protection. I applaud you, Pit Viper. You point out hard truths in your article- based address of a difficult subject matter.

Though tragic, this story shouts from the housetops that there is more going on in our children. It speaks for thousands of mentally ill young men who desperately need help to navigate the horrors of their illness.

It gives voice to parents everywhere. May they all find help in their trials!


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Dear Counterpane,

Mental illness is a dreadful thing - for it can cause so much hurt to the individual and to the family. Who envisioned someday that a sweet little boy could become so violent?

Interesting format.

Warm regards,

Winslow


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PV,

This is a creative and ingenious way to show that every man -- whether a great hero or unsung criminal -- is just a frightened boy inside. They are all trying to grow up the best way they can. I think this was very clever. Saying a prayer for him right now. God bless!


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Hi there,

I have chills reading this, especially after reading your author notes. The vehicle you chose to relate this story is nothing short of brilliant.

I think it needs a little bit more about him as a child when he was innocent and sweet, like any little boy, your pride and joy.

I can relate to this story. My son, who is 31, is a lost soul. He lives a high-risk life and when I think about him and where he is now, I remember the little boy he was.
One day I know he will die, and I hope it is not horrific. Who could kill such a sweet, innocent and loving child? That is what he will always be in my mind.

Your poem has brought me to tears. I try to control them, and they are the only thing I can control as far as my son's life is concerned. I'm so glad your son is ok now, and happy. I really am so happy for you, because I know the pain you must have gone through.

kelly



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Strong presentation considering the reasoning behind, as well as the subject matter.
The layout adds to the theme.
Well done.
Wishing you all the best of luck going forward.
Best wishes.
RGstar


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This is an interesting poetic experiment with two pieces of writing a century apart. It strikes me that he was lucky not to have done more serious hurt or damage. Schizophrenia is a frightening condition and can take many forms. I don't think anyone understands how it develops or why. My late brother in law was diagnosed with schizophrenia although with him it never showed a violent side. The symptoms first appeared after a bout of influenza when a young man in his first (and only) job in a gents outfitters.

The balance or imbalance of the two piece here make an interesting contrast.


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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
    Thank you for the kind review, and for sharing your story. Yes, mental illness touches many families. And I agree we are fortunate that he didn't do more serious damage; in fact, he told the police as he was being transported, "I'm a veteran of the war in Afghanistan. If I'd meant to kill you, you'd be dead." His father thinks that this whole episode was an attempt at suicide by cop. I, being a more optimistic person, believe it was a cry for help, which fortunately was answered. During the time he served in state prison, his medication regimen was fine-tuned and his mental illness brought under control, allowing him to come out of prison a much more functional person than he was when he went in. We are very fortunate.

reply by Pantygynt on 16-Nov-2016
    Thank you for these additional comments and wishing you both all the best for the future.
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I forgot about the pleasant land of counterpane. I have the word in one of my #'s as well. It seems to indicate a double meaning the way you use it to signify pain. Of course counterpane is a bed cover and he, your child may have been confined at one time, and under covers.


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The mentally troubled and even some deaf people have died unnecessarily at the hands of the cops. Your son was lucky. Nice to hear that he is using that break
wisely. An unusual post, but very effective.


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