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An Attic Bouquet


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Jannypan (Jan)
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Dean,

Your poem is awesome. I love the alliteration--especially 'limp, lonely, . . .' & 'quaint quilts' .

Each verse paints its own picture for readers. Then, taken together, the image is clearly evident to them. I know many readers will be able to identify with your words, but they will 'see' their grandma. That is a true measure of how your words connect with readers to draw them into your poem for just a while.

Grandmas have a way of making everything right no matter what age they are or the age of the grandkids.

I could see my Grandmother & feel the longing for her touch & smile 23 years later. This poem is a bit sad for what is lost. But it is also a reminder that our Grandmothers still live in our hearts. Just the sight, sound, or smell of something can rekindle those loving memories.

Beautiful job. Jan


 Comment Written 19-Nov-2016


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Awww....this is so beautiful. Your grandmother would love it. How I wish I had six stars for you! Don't know what phrase I loved more, 'cobwebs carelessly cling', 'bewitching bouquet of bewilderment' (love that!) but, I think...'cocoon of quaint quilts'...charming. I think you have a winner!!! Blessings...


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016


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" a bewitched bouquet of bewilderment. " Oh what a line, what a sweet loving homage to a grandmother! You are blessed to have her belongings. Love them, an extension of who she was. Blessings to your heart for composing such beautiful lines. Me, a grandma, too.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thanks so much, amada. I really appreciate your thoughtful comments.
    Have yourself a wonderful weekend.
    ~Dean :}
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There are so many things here to comment on. *smile*

My own great grandma had an attic that we used to climb up to and it was a wondrous place above all else. Just to visit the attic was a joy! Much less the rest of the house or to get a hug from the woman herself! *smile*

great images here:
--> the cobwebs lovers
--> I love those empty quilts that are ready to hug and comfort
--> writing in the dust
--> young again, missing grandma

Lovely poem, D. Great job. Thanks for sharing this one! Good luck


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Robyn.
    I appreciate you going out of your way to read and review this.
    Yes, a lot of old memories still remain there in grandma Cook's attic. She's my father's mom, and we were there to sell her house as dad is the executor of her will.
    My Aunt Judy has been living there since grandma passed away, but she's since had to go to a nursing home due to kidney problems that require round the clock care.
    I was told I could go into the attic and take anything I wanted.
    I came away with two photos of my grandparents taken on the day they were married.
    That was enough for me. We have a HUMONGOUS family, but there should be plenty for all of my cousins, aunts, and uncles, as well as their families, to go around.
    It was a sad day as the house was ultimately sold.
    I hope the new family fills it with as much love as my grandparents did.
    I wrote the poem on a small spiral notebook I keep in my back pocket on the ride back home.
    Have a great weekend, Robyn.
    Thanks again
    ~Dean

reply by robyn corum on 18-Nov-2016
    That's so sad, Dean. I agree. I hope another family begin the process all over again and fill the house up to the rafters with new love and laughter! Hugs!

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This is a bit unusual for you. Not surprised that it shows your too infrequently expressed soft and sensitive side. This took me back to memories of my grandmothers. Well done, my friend. And thank you for bringing up my memories


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review this, Doug.
    I sincerely appreciate your kind and thoughtful comments.
    Have yourself a wonderful weekend, my friend.
    ~Dean :}
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While I love your poems of the macabre, I also love it when you take a detour from the usual. I love the idea of looking (and smelling, in this case) at a scene and imaging the life behind it. The use of personification in the image of the quilts that still lie ready to "cloak snug dreams" is so poignant - it reminds me of something from "Toy Story". The whole thing is made even more poignant by your author's notes. And the ending...no words other than beautiful.

As always, you use alliteration to great effect here. Write on!


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thanks so much for such a wonderful review, Mark. I sincerely appreciate that coming from an author of your caliber.
    My father and I were there at my grandmother's home to show it for selling. It was sold that day, so I was told to go into the attic and take anything I wanted there to remind me of my grandparents.
    I took two old photos of my grandma and grandpa on the day they were married.
    WWII had not even begun yet!
    I keep them in my Bible, right next to my bed.
    Thanks again, and I appreciate the six stars as well.
    Have a wonderful weekend, my friend.
    ~Dean :}
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Any small thing can bring those memories back; a drifting scent, a song, or even an unusual word or expression. Spending time in your Grandma's attic is bound to bring the memories flooding back. I'm pleased that it inspired you to write this eloquent poem, with its elegant alliteration and whimsical wanderings.

The penultimate verse is beautiful. There's something very particular about the word alabaster.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    I agree, Jane, I absolutely adore that word...along with most of the English language, in general.
    Thanks so much for your sincere and heartfelt response to this.
    I deeply appreciate your comments.
    Have a wonderful weekend.
    ~Dean

reply by sanejane on 18-Nov-2016
    You would be unlikely to write the way you do if you weren't locked in a love affair with words.
    You too, Dean, have a great weekend.
    Jane
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Wonderfully nostalgic and beautifully written in form and word. Loved the artwork and the idea. This month is 30 years since my husband died. We were only in our 30's so it's always a nostalgic time and this was comforting and warm especially the part about being young again...Ahhhhhhh, I sometimes wish.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Me too, JoAnn.
    Thank you very much for your thoughtful review.
    Have a nice weekend.
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A very sweet and unique style of poem about the things that belonged to grandma. The essence of love seems to cling to the items loved ones owned. Memories intermingled with things that they touched. I loved your poem. A very nice tribute to your grandmother. She would have loved your poem.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    I like to think she knows about it still, RoostyNester, even though she's been gone these many years.
    Thank you for your heartfelt and thoughtful response to this, as well as the very generous six-star rating.
    How on earth do you manage to hold on to your meager allotment of six 6's so late in the week, especially with the wealth of talented writers we have here?
    Have a wonderful weekend, and thanks so much again.
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There is no one as special as our grandmothers, Dean, I miss mine too, and hopefully, mine might miss me a little bit when the time comes. Grandparents are far more patient than parents, only because they've done their bit with their own, and now they can enjoy their grandchildren. This was a lovely tribute to your Grandma, I'm sure she has read it. It was lovely. :) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thank you, Sandra.
    I appreciate you taking time out of your own busy schedule to read and review this very personal poem for me.
    Enjoy your weekend.
    ~Dean
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