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An Attic Bouquet


A Free Verse Contest entry

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Pantygynt
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Attics do that, don't they? The memories come flooding in like the dust and every alliterative line here is a memory of the past. I wonder how long the battery on this lap top will last. We have just lost power in a thunderstorm. I think the electricity sub-station has been struck. The idiots sited it on the top of a hill.

Whatever it was, it's back on now so, back to the review. This is a very different piece for you but your use of alliteration is really fine. Attics are amazing places with all sorts of memories tied up in dusty artifacts. This captures the spirit of the attic excellently.


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thank you, 'Gynt.
    I appreciate you taking time out of your own busy schedule to read and review this very personal poem for me.
    Enjoy your weekend.
    ~Dean
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Your words have that rare effect of evocation..... I could smell the musty-mustiness of grandma.... a sense of loneliness and possibility and times past are spread generously throughout this piece.... quite simply.... I like it.... and....


chickens do have lips... but they only come out when they are angry... have you ever seen an angry chicken? Hmmmm?


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Who, me?
    Oh, you bet I have!
    I've got two roosters and 33 laying hens, and the two roosters (one's a Plymouth Rock, the other a HUGE Red Ranger) attack me whenever I go into the coop to collect the eggs!
    They also get whooped upside the head by me when they do, so...
    Thanks very much for taking the time to check this out.
    Your comments, as well as your time, are greatly appreciated.
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Dean, Good luck with your amazing contest entry; this is one of the best poems I have ever read of yours. I can tell you wrote this from memories of your grandma and what life must have been like when she was around when you were growing up. Wonderful writing my friend. XX


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thanks a bunch, Kay. That means a great deal to me, especially coming from you.
    Take care, my friend, and enjoy the upcoming weekend.
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Dean.

This is a beautifully penned poem my friend, the presentation is awesome and I love the artwork. This free verse is simply lovely and has a very smooth flow about it. This was a most enjoyable read. It took me back to the fun, loving and kind memories of my grandmother. Oh, how I miss those days. Outstanding my friend and thanks for sharing. The very best to you in the contest. Blessings....Portia


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thank you very much for your very heartfelt response to this very personal poem for me, Portia.
    I'm very grateful for your glowing review as well as your most generous six-star rating.
    My grandma was a wonderful woman, and though she's with The father, a part of her is still always with me even today.
    Enjoy your weekend, and thanks so much again for reading.
    ~Dean
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"Cocoon of quaint quilts prepared to cloak away snug dreams," a beautiful line, reminds me of things we call home.
You are very fortunate to have know your grandmother. I did not have the pleasure of know mine, they had both passed away before I was born.
You have written a lovely free verse, it sounds the way a grandmother should be.
Blessings,


 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    Thanks for reading, Lu.
    I appreciate your comments.
    ~Dean
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Poetic Friend
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Dean,

I can not tell that you rarely write in free verse, for this poem reads so smoothly, and the line breaks are carefully chosen. I considered entering this contest, but after reading this masterpiece, I realized that I don't stand a chance.

I must say, it was a a pleasure reading a poem in honor of your beloved grandmother, and all of her treasures in that attic.

As usual, your poem is image-filled and sprinkled with alliteration.

Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2016
    Thank you very much for your very heartfelt response to this very personal poem for me, Poetic Fiend.
    I'm very grateful for your glowing review as well as your most generous six-star rating.
    My grandma was a wonderful woman, and though she's with The father, a part of her is still always with me--even today.
    Enjoy your weekend, and thanks so much again for reading.
    ~Dean
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A very well-written free verse poem. Beautiful memories of your grandma. They will always live in our memories no matter how long ago they passed.


 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    Thanks for reading, Sandra.
    ~Dean
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Dean,

God bless grandma and the special memories she left you.
Displayed here in your talented work are her memories and
yours. Wow, I have read some of your fantastic free verse
before, so I would say you are being very humble in your
author notes.

I enjoyed your VERY abundant alliteration, vivid imagery
and loving memories penned here. Very nice music to
accompany this moving piece as well.

I could just as easily read this is regular font,
but your stellar presentation techniques are
appreciated as well.

Linda


 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    Thanks very much for reading, as well as the five stars, Linda.
    I really appreciate the fact that you enjoyed this very personal poem.
    Cheers,
    ~Dean

reply by AnnaLinda on 17-Nov-2016
    ;)
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Memories are precious and important for perspective on life. Quilts? -- Did she (or her own mother) make them? Why must they gather dust? Is there no one -- not even a child -- to cherish one on his or her bed? And you found a toy that brought back a piece of your childhood. Are kids so different today that no child in your family at large could make new joyful memories with it? These comments are not to chide you or suggest altering this fine poem. They are just the thoughts your words prompted as I read. You are fortunate to still have this place of memories to visit. Thank you for sharing such a time with us.


 Comment Written 17-Nov-2016



reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    Thank you for reading.
    ~Dean

reply by WalkerMan on 17-Nov-2016
    You're welcome, my friend. I hope my comments did not offend you. It's just hard for me to imagine leaving hand-made quilts to gather dust in an
    attic. My wife both quilted and embroidered, and sometimes embroidered on her quilts. All are still in use in the family, as she intended. Nothing she did was just for show. When her mother's parents were gone, her mother found many drawers and whole chests full of sheets and other cloth items, yellowed and cracking with age, that had never been used. Some hadbeen
    given to them when they were married at age eighteen over seven decades earlier. What were they saving them for? That's why your poem was somewhat bittersweet to me, while for you it had a happy ending. -- Mike

reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    They were unfinished quilts for the most part, Mike. Some had no batting, others did but swatches of fabric were missing.
    the toys were antiques and have no appeal to the technically advanced kids of today.
    Sad, really...

reply by WalkerMan on 17-Nov-2016
    Yes, sad indeed. I'm glad YOU found some solace in it though. -- Mike

reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    Me too.
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This is a beautiful tribute to your grandma. I know how you feel, I miss mine too. Loved hearing her 'tell it like it is'.


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reply by the author on 17-Nov-2016
    Thanks for reading.
    ~Dean
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