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bertranclan
 
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Love the spot-on rhyme and meter; I love the message, too. My favorite line is--"when wise words waft, our passions burn." Great alliteration, too, as I noticed another reader noted. This is the kind of poetry I am most familiar with, as I tend to write this way myself. Occasionally I stray from it, but I always go back to it . I hope to read many more of your ingenious poetry.


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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
    Hello, bertanclan.
    Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing Fanstoria
    As always your comments are very much appreciated.
    ~Dean
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Hi Dean, I agree with you. FanStory has changed a lot in the two years I have been here. However, I still think it's a great place to learn and expose one's writing. We'll see how it goes. As usual a very powerful poem you've composed. All the best. Ulla:))


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
    Hello, Ulla.
    Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing Fanstoria
    As always your comments are very much appreciated.
    ~Dean
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Your "morbid Musings" are spot on, DeanO. As you say much has changed in the last 4 years. I have been here 12 and witnessed many more than most. I don't think it's the site either. People have changed in so many ways. In our day simple little signs of kindness meant something...now not so uch as you say.

I liked this stanza in particular, my friend:
"The people cringed, all cowered in fear,
when everything they'd held as dear
was thus reduced to smoke and ash
as fiery fingers singed and slashed."

Good job and thanks for your insights. Bob


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Joy Graham
 
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Hi Dean,

Since joining this site I have had to learn how to receive and give reviews. I tend to be timid and reserved, and have tried many approaches. It always amazes me when replies to my heartfelt suggestions are received with nasty replies and even revenge reviews. For the most part I have wonderfully supportive reviewers. However, there are a few that have no filter. I wonder if I'm that offensive and then vow to improve my people skills. I guess I'm a life-long learner in that department.

To sum up, I am still trying to find that fine line between reviewing and being a gracious non-expert.

I think you did a fine job of taking fanstory issues and turning them into a Dean Special :) There's plenty of material right here for you to create many horror stories lol!

I still love this site and continue to poke my head in to see what's going on. I have learned everything I now know about poetry right here with the wonderful guidance of Brooke's classes. I have much to be thankful for.

Keep writing Dean. I hope I don't recognize myself as one of your evil characters in future lol! ?


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Let's start with the poem which I thought was outstanding. The message was clear and the elements of Fantasy I especially enjoyed. The alliteration was captivating: when wise words waft, our passions burn.

They mock with mediocrity, as they are yet too blind to see."--This is a brilliant line, loved it!

As for Fanstory as a whole, I just celebrated my first year here a couple of weeks ago. My experience has had its ups and downs, but overall, I think my experience has been positive. I feel I've been lucky to have a group, albeit a small group, of supportive and talented people.

I understand where you're coming from and the frustrations that comes from over-inflated egos and mean-spirited people. Everyone believes their own work is the best, and they tend to point the finger at someone else, usually the winner.

I like the idea that we can make a difference. We are Fanstory. We are the majority. Keep your head up and remember that there are good people here, willing to help and possibly inspire. All the best to you!

Take care,
Russell


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As always, you craft an important message of kindness hidden behind your wildish imagination. Altho I very much enjoy your storytelling approach & gradual build-up, I am most drawn to your last stanza. This is where you strip away your usual flair & just give it to us straightforward & true (my personal preference). Your point is applicable for all types of social media, as courtesy & understanding have waned EVERYWHERE in the past year. I believe that being "politically correct" (i.e. "civil") has gotten a bad rap lately. Thanks for the reminder.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
    Hello, Margie.
    Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing Fanstoria
    As always your comments are very much appreciated.
    ~Dean
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Dean, a very insightful and just short of scary tale.

When I was last on FanStory, rumblings such as this could be heard. I guess the site goes through this every few years? Open-mindedness wins the day when allowed to flourish. Judgment without compassion is cold as ice. Each post made here as a piece of poetry, purpose, book or script is personal to the author.

I've been led to my old profile by Tom, and I'm looking forward to resurrecting some old favorites. . The poem that I recently wrote about Mickey was sufficient, I suppose. I found the membership of the site to be extremely welcoming and accepting. I'm sure that out of all the people who read my sestina there was at least one person who didn't like it . Whoever they are, they kept quiet or gracefully gave me suggestions for change. I submit, that, as an old member coming back renewed, I find the membership aura to be one that fosters acceptance, growth and love for each other in our attempts to relate through creativity.


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Being new to the sight I can only speak to the now as I have no past here. This sight has been and continues be a combination of school, support group, and word gallery. I've had s couple f nasty reviews and one strange experience but other than that I have found nothing but good here. I have heard others speak as you have but just to let you know from a newbys' point of view.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016



reply by the author on 05-Dec-2016
    Hello, Sandy.
    Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing Fanstoria
    As always your comments are very much appreciated.
    ~Dean
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robina1978
 
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Lovely artwork that complements your poem perfectly. I can relate to what you wrote over the changes in the reviews, and not always for the better. I hope this might at least give some improvement.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016


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Dean,
Your poem is poignant and timely and well written. Even if it was garbage, I would rate you six stars for the message in your notes.

I don't know how many of you feel, but to me, FanStory has changed a LOT in the four years since I joined. A lot of the changes Tom and his staff have implemented to improve the site are good ones.

Some...e-h-h-h...not so much.

The staff's not the problem, however.

The BIG problem lies with us--you, me, your fellow Fanstorians--the people we interact with here on a daily basis. In the past, even if someone didn't particularly care for your style of writing, presentation, or the kinds of things you wrote, there was a basic modicum of respect there, always prevalent in the review.

Now...not so much.

This poem is my vision of a once fairytale site gone horribly South. Could it happen here?
Your answer, unfortunately, is yes. We shall see how Fanstorians evolve. Well done.

Michael

Michael


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