This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I liked that you chose to tell a true story rather than fiction as it made the reading that much more enjoyable. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2017
I just had to write this story as it was so sharply etched in my mind. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your kind review.
reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 04-Jan-2017
I still cannot get over the fact that your Dad thought walking amongst wild animals was safer than the risky brakes LOL - thank goodness your Mom was thinking.
I liked reading this childhood memory. Growing up you had great chances to observe wildlife. It is a good thing your dad erred on the side of caution. (LOL)
Happy New Year,
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
Your six star rating is like a late Christmas present! Thank you so very much.
Having lived in Africa for 75 years I have many a story to tell of wild life.
May all your dreams come true in 2017
What a scary time for your family. I don't suppose there is ever a good time to lose your brakes, but a game preserve would not be my choice.
A space is needed between 'of' and 'springbuck'. A period is needed after 'safely' and 'together'.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2016
Heidi, I so appreciate your pointing out those two faulty areas. I have made the corrections. Thank you.
This story has a definitely unique setting and I like how you PUT US THERE, first with the towering giraffe and later with the nimble springbuck. Good use of dialog as Dad took adopted his cautious strategy and Mom chose to stay aboard.
Truly a scary moment.
The father seemed very calm.
I would have been panic stricken.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
I think my father was panic stricken but it wouldn't have helped to get us kids upset. Bear in mind that there were no cell phones in those days so help could not be summoned. Thank you for taking the trouble to read my story and wishing me luck.