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The Library and the ugly truth


How both can save you

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I recently got into taking writing seriously when I discovered maybe I had a hint of talent and was asked to provide more short stories about my life from all the online poker forums I joined over the years. I am by no means a literary or writing expert and I don't read much myself. When I write, I just pick a story or subject I want to talk about, then I start hammering on the keyboard and I finish most my stuff in just one take and a few edits a hour after I go back and read it again. Anyway, what I wanted to tell you, was that I am probably a bad or unqualified reviewer, but I been looking through some stories and stuff on this site for a while, kind of leaned back in my chair, and your story was the first that gripped me and made me sit up, straighten my back, and pay attention to every word. I could tell you wrote this straight from the bone underneath your skin and even though I think its sort of an uppity, "Ha Ha Ha those dumb niggers who used to pick on me" type piece, I just wanted to write that I respect it's brutal honesty. I gave it a four starts instead of six because like I said, I do not read a lot. I wanted to leave room to rate something higher if I find it.

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 Comment Written 15-Jun-2017


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I really enjoyed reading this piece. I could definitely relate. Growing up in Brooklyn, my sister and twin brother and myself used to come home from school, put our books down, change clothes, and head out to the only library in our neighborhood. We crossed abandoned lots, and climbed a fence to get there. Once inside, we were in literary heaven. My favorite books at the time were written by Donald Goins, and Richard Wright. I love to this day biographies and autobiographies. I am sure that my reading skills landed me in AP English and also enhanced my writing skills.

Your piece also reminded me of my mom who cleaned house for a living. It also reminded me of one lady who I worked for in the middle of the ghetto, who was responsible for getting me into college. To this day, I help youth get from HS to college, because I was helped in that way. It only takes one person to help to change a young person's life.

I thought about your questions about having ever heard of anyone being killed or mugged in the library. I believe you are right.


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017


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I had to give this six stars, its jaw-droppingly good.I was moved and motivated to read on and on.I could picture your descriptions so clearly.A tough topic but you put a hard hitting message across in fine words and flowing poetic style,with realistic dialogue and some amazing messages.I will be bookmarking this its deservedly an all time best.


 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017



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That was really good. I think you did well taking advantage of opportunities that came your way. White kids are the same, born into poverty, if they would only read. Reading really is the best way to learn about anything. We all should grab hold of opportunities whenever and however we can. There is only one winner if you do, and only one loser if you don't ... you! I really enjoyed your story, and I am so pleased you told it. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017



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This piece well and truly deserves a six, mate, for it's information content alone.
I thought that it was interesting, well thought out and diplomatic.
To be honest, I didn't think that it was racist for colored people to call other colored people "niggas", but I'm an Aussie. The race relations in America are a bit of a mystery to me.


 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017



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Interesting story from start to finish. The start--with suggesting one could feel numb when reading about 700 deaths seemed rather distant. The analogy of the murder rate being almost accepted with the affair being ignored was very effective.

A thought -- " I call that quote sort of racist" -- the word "nigga" in a quote is not "sort of" racist -- it is fully racist. And I have seen many people of color both in libraries and reading.

I also teach high school reading and it is ALL races that are reluctant readers because technology has made reading boring.

I think this could have been a much stronger, effective piece if the focus were on juvenile criminals rather than juvenile criminals of a specific race. I gave it a 5 for the writing style and overall logic. To fully get your message across -- that there's a correlation between non-reading and criminals -- it would be beneficial to remove the racist slant.

Editing note:
"being mostly a single mother, without a high school diploma and five kids,"
--this actually says she is "without" five kids -- need to change to:
without a high school diploma and with five kids


 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017



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First, this is the kind of writing I aspire to. It's clean, visual, thought provoking and entertaining. I could almost hear a voice narrating it to me. I find it hard to write non-fiction, so I was especially thankful that you made it seem so easy.

I have no issues with this piece, but I am a little puzzled. In the beginning, you mention you scan the articles looking for truth, but I'm not sure what truth you mean. And since truth is often subjective, whose truth?

Lastly, I too find solace in libraries. My parents owned one in the country where I was born, and I spent the first 13 years of my life among it's shelves. The peace others find in churches, I find in libraries.

Happy New Year.


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016



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This story deserves a six I don't happen to have. It held me enthralled throughout the entire story. As a teacher, I am touched by this story. I have often worked with many races, and have always encouraged kids to change their situations by rising above it. That was all I could offer them-- a way out of the ghetto by enriching their minds. Many, like you, have done so.

Thank you for sharing this story,
Rhonda


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016



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I enjoy my local library but never thought about how safe it is. Your story brings up a great point. I have never heard of violence taking place in a library, it is a place of wonder and I am surprised more people do not use libraries. Your story is inspiring and gives the reader much to think about.


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016



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I absolutely love your essays, you do know how to put a lot of feeling and emotions into your work. Hate and violence seems to run rampant in our lives and world today. I too have found peace, comfort, solace in books and in becoming a writer. Well done Sir.


 Comment Written 31-Dec-2016



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