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The Espadrille Escape


A cautionary tale.

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Total, perfect entertainment for me to read your stuff. Like your "western" stuff the best, but everything has such a "you" flavor that it's gourmet reading for me. You really have a gift for conversation. We never have to wonder who's talking (even if you don't say. Your characters retain their realness throughout the whole piece, I can't wait to hear who says what next, I know the ending is going to be superb. There is one still out there where the guy escaped jail but an innocent man is going to hang (I think) for his crime. Maybe I'll happen across the sequel to that story. I don't think it can stay where it is because even though your character is a ruffian, he would never let someone else hang for his offense. Since reading and writing is about all I have to do every day (lucky me!) I'll run across it. Otherwise you might know what I'm talking about. OR (heaven forbid) I have it all wrong but that's sort of hard to imagine! Talk later. GoodHearted Woman Marcia


 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
    Thanks so much, Marcia. As you've discovered, dialogue is my favorite aspect of writing--along with metaphors and similes.
    This story is an approximation of a real event.
    I think the Western you mention is Riley and Wine. I posted that story in three parts. I know you've reviewed the first part.
    I'm currently writing another Western. I hope to post the first part next Sunday.

    Anyway, thanks for looking up my work. I'm delighted you enjoy it. Peace, Lee

reply by GoodHearted Woman on 28-Feb-2017
    I finally pressed and pressed hard on my Dr.--"how long?" He said two months. I was gauging everything on how much time is left to write. Laugh.
    I am entering contests with each newly-acquired writing skill. Like you, I love the flash fiction (your surprises are THE BEST!!!) and tried my hand at dialog only--I'm hooked now too. I'm not asking God for more time, because I don't need quantity without quality, but am so happy to have these last days to write and learn more about it. I know my own talent is there, but it has to be 'wrung' out--not easily, but feels so good when I actually see something on paper. I can't tell you what an inspiration you have been. Something in us 'connects' and find our favorite everything, sooner or later. Laugh. I don't really give "luck" credit for much of anything--it's more of a driven feeling, a heated desire to write one more word before they drag you off to the gallows. Laugh again. But it keeps me smiling--and digging--hard, hard digging! Talk to you later, hopefully. Thank you a million times for the lessons you have shared and for being so darned nice about it. Good "luck".
    Marcia
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I did. Enjoy, that is. I don't know if you recall me saying, but I rarely read works of fiction. Yours is one of the exceptions. If I'm going to take my precious time and read a work of fiction, I'm going to choose excellence. And excellence is what this is...but then I didn't expect anything short of.

I was going to sign off on that note and then I said to myself, self, why aren't you sharing what you just said in your head?

You are a master at creating characters, and I mean that in the literal way. And you are gifted when it comes to storytelling.

As always, brilliant work!

Tillom aka # Peace aka Jo


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Jo. And, yes, I know fiction isn't your favorite. But there's nothing fictional about this piece. I know reading and reviewing prose isn't always fun, so I really appreciate your time and patience. I'm honored that you single out my work. Thank you again. Peace, Lee

reply by #Peace on 09-Feb-2017
    Oh, but I love fiction! I write fiction! LOL!

    Really? Not fiction? In that case, what a fascinating experience!

    Jo

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
    It's all true. I prefer fiction, but some contests frown on that. Framing my real stories takes more work than I'm used to. L
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Excellent storytelling. I felt sorry for poor Henry. No wonder he called the realtor and the travel agency. The faster he is out of there the better. Your characters have such personality. The polite gentleman trapped by the assuming and overbearing woman. Run!


 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
    Thank you, w.j. debi. I agree. Run. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Who would notice a missing word-I was as dizzy as Dale, I mean Henry-haha. VERY original and quite crazy-just like I like 'em.


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, frogbook. Crazy like I like 'em, too. Glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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You absolutely nailed Natalie. Literally two sentences into her dialogue and I wanted to stop reading and pull my hair out!! Everyone knows that one super annoying motor mouth, "they're going to force me to kill them if they don't shut up" type. Wonderful writing!


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Matthew. You're right. We all know one like that. Glad you didn't pull your hair out. Peace, Lee
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That was a wild, vivid conversation that I hope I will never be engaged in. WOW, you certainly created a colorful character in Natalie/Francine. I've heard people go on like that, but it takes a lot of creativity to put that conversation together. The ending was fun. Nice job.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Thesis. I'm really glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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Probably my favorite part of this story was: " f regrets won the lottery, Henry expected he'd hit the jackpot." (So much better then the cliched "if wishes were horses then beggars would ride.)

The encounter seems apropos for Brooklyn afternoon while a stranger waits for your neighbor. The dialogue as easy to follow and fit the scene.

Fun read.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you, mvbrooks. I'm glad you enjoyed. Sometimes clichés creep in on the first draft. I always try to create 'new cliches' the second time around. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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I really enjoyed this.
It was just brilliant, I could see this as an old 50's style cartoon with the motor mouth dame bamboozling the poor schmuck.
Very funny and very inventive.
Really well done.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2017


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I did! Enjoy, that is! I smiled all the way through this fun piece, Lee. I don't know where you come up with this stuff, but I'm sure glad you keep shoveling it at us! hahahahahaha This was soooo much FUN!


 Comment Written 03-Jan-2017


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Dude, you're funny! I thoroughly enjoyed this visit from hell. Nicely done! I expect this to be on the next Story of the Month vote.

I'm thinking you're so light in your loafers you wouldn't leave footprints in lime Jell-O."--Great line amongst many.

Take care,
Russell


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