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My Hoary Home


Leaving with regrets...

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Comment by
seken58
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Hi Dean,
I can see was this poem was voted poem of the month.
The cadence is smooth and the imagery is rich.
The command of thought and word to produce this work is obvious.
A true master of poetic expression.
:-) Shirley


 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thanks for digging this up from the FanStory graveyard, dusting it off, and giving it a go.
    I appreciate your review, Shirley.
    ~Dean
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Ah, man. To start, your photo looks like the grandfather of a good friend. His name was Pee Dab Ashe from Sylva, NC. When he checked out, and gave up the ghost, he rolled on his side and sighed. A six star poem for the memories and excellent penning. Yours is worthy of the title Poem of the Month.

One minor spag:
Here: My eyes behold bright hues of red tucked [WARM] within this tufted bed.
Edited: My eyes behold bright hues of red tucked [WARMLY] within this tufted bed.

I especially like your closing line and use of the word hoary. Hoary defined is grayish white or old and trite, both of which fit the image you crafted. Well done, sir, well done!

Grasshopper sans-a-coiffure


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thank you for your warm reception of this poem, Michael, as well as the exceptional six star rating.
    There were a great many talented poets in this particular POM competition, and I felt very fortunate to do as well as I did.
    To coin a phrase, 'I got lucky.'
    I've made a slight revision to the offending line you mentioned.
    Hopefully it reads more to your liking now.
    Thanks again, Grasshopper 2.
    I sincerely appreciate the review.
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reply by Grasshopper2 on 17-Feb-2017
    It certainly does, Olly. I forgot to mention your choice of music adds a hauntingly solemn mood to the poem. A nice touch.

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
    Thanks again for your suggestion, Michael.
    I appreciate the help.
    ~Dean :}
Comment by
evesayshi
 
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In my opinion, and one shared by all who read this emotionally sensitive and melancholy work, beautifully and artfully expressed. Well constructed within its rhyming sadness and ultimate acceptance of what is and will be...


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
    Thanks, Eve.
    I sincerely appreciate the complimentary read and review.
    Much obliged for your feedback and the generous six.
    Take care,
    ~Dean

reply by evesayshi on 19-Feb-2017
    You are very welcome. Dean, take care as well, and thank you for the superb read...Eve

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reply by evesayshi on 20-Feb-2017
    I love your emoji, Dean. I may not understand it, but I love it - does it mean you're giving me a hug perhaps? If so, thank you...Eve

reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
    Yes, it does, Eve.
    A big cyber hug. :)
    Thanks again!
    ~Dean

reply by evesayshi on 20-Feb-2017
    And one back to you, Dean - thank you again...Eve
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This is a ten...and so sad Dean. I read it three times. And now tears flow. Death scares me so, I can't stand the thought of it. For any of us. I had to bury a horse the other day that we'd had since 1999. Why is it animals have to suffer? Or people. Your art with this too, astounding. Wonderful work Dean...wow...


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
    Thanks, Susan. This particular poem was written from a very personal perspective.
    I sincerely appreciate your heartfelt review.
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Comment by
BonafidesGMF
 
 
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Wow! It is not difficult to understand why you are so high in the rankings, or why "My Hoary Home" captured first place in the Poem of the Month competition! What a beautifully crafted piece! I love the lyrics, the flow, and the profound message of the poem. The background music certainly enhanced the melancholy tone. It is fair to say I am inspired and terrified after reading this poem. Mission accomplished! Actually, more accurately then reading this poem, I should say I felt this poem, or I experienced this poem. It is a keeper. You have a new fan.

Keep well, Dean.

Gil


 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017


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Congrats on your win, Dean! That poem is suitably depressing and morbid. As always, it is well written. The pictures and color scheme compliment the work. Sorry, no sixers right now. Evi


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
    Thanks, Evi.
    I appreciate your congrats and your kind comments.
    ~Dean
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A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review.


 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017


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rama devi
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Congrats on placing in the POM contest, dear Dean./ This is excellent. So well penned, as usual from you, with a fine presentation too. I enjoyed the rhymes and internal rhymes (well timed0 the fluid flow and flawless meter and the fantastic phrasing phonetics (too many nuances to note but you know I noticed them all and applaud) as well as the strong deep POV and inspired love story--poignant in its impermanence.

I drift along death's dusty road.

Don't we all! And this is so well alliterated!

Great lines:
Do I deserve such bitter fate, whilst hopeless fools now congregate
around a hole dug deep in Earth? Why was I here, what was my worth?


This stanza is utterly outstanding:

Now, light as air, I rise above, my broken dreams, all those I love,
like floating feathers on the wind, that can't control where currents send
them drifting on, 'tis now the day, I'll ne'er return, thus whisked away.
An earthen hollow, deep in loam, will now become my hoary home.


Glad I still have a six!
This is a contender for my vote.

Warmly,
rd


 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read this very personal poem for me, dear rama, and for giving me such in-depth break down in your review.
    There is a lot of "me" in this, possibly more so than any other poem I've written in my four years spent here at FanStory.
    Again, I deeply appreciate your time as well as your positive feedback.
    Thank you too for the six stars, that means a great deal to me coming from you, and especially for this poem.
    I'm truly grateful to you for all.
    Warmest wishes,
    ~Dean

reply by rama devi on 08-Feb-2017
    I am so glad you share this, as it is my favorite of yours thus far, and I also voted for it. Bravo!

    Warmest Smiles,
    rd

reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
    Thanks a bunch!
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reply by rama devi on 08-Feb-2017
    To you too! :-)))
Comment by
His Grayness
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Fantastic work of excellent poetry with extraordinary packaging and presentation! I cannot offer any suggestion to improve this outstanding example of perfect rhyme, meter, CONTENT GRIP, and genuine entertainment! HIS GRAYNESS


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017


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Mariana Frias
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Beautifully mastered about a wonderful man who loved, was loved and kept to his dreams and his promises and although did not accomplish all he would have liked he managed all he could and what he cared for. it was very pretty and I very much enjoyed reading it.

Mariana Frias


 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
    Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem first and foremost, Mariana.
    I deeply appreciate your very kind and thoughtful comments as this poem is very personal to me.
    Thank you as well for your awesome sixth star.
    I truly grateful for your time.
    ~Dean :)
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