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Leaving with regrets...

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You did it again, my horrific freind, and you know I mean that in the most delightful way. You made death seem so poetic. I love your poems. I still want a novel from you one day, but this will work fine.
Hugs Heidi


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    One day perhaps, Hedi.
    I'm working on it, but in the meantime, I want to remain relevant.
    Thanks for reading.
    ~Dean

reply by bookishfabler on 15-Jan-2017
    smiles and hugs
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Very well written Dean. Great flow and rhyme. Your words brought out great feelings in that I could sense the loneliness of this man as he died without anyone being with him at his end of life. Even though it was so sad, it was still a great piece.


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Hello, Susan, and thanks so much for stopping by to read and comment on this poem.
    It's sort of a comforting sadness though, really. I mean, the man has obviously come to grips with it even though he's lost the love of his life and she's no longer there to comfort him in his final hours.
    Perhaps she just got tired of marriage and simply walked away one day.
    Or, maybe they lived their entire lives together and death has already claimed her.
    I'll leave that up to the imaginative whims of those who care to read this.
    Thanks again for the outstanding comments, and the six as well.
    As always, I really appreciate the time you spend on your reviews.
    Have a wonderful Sunday, my friend.
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Rich poem of introspection
Facing death after years of living
Seeing illness blend with tears
Taking now the tender fears

Memories of love well shared
Now meaningless whispers in the air
What future holds beyond the doors
Soft ground will take to storage form


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Thanks.
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A fate that awaits us all, this is why every minute should be spent in joy and happiness. Those who do this have less regret i think. Love your atmospheric write. I especially like the 'hopeless fools congregate around a hole dug in the earth', chilling and final. Your poem sent has warmth though, comfort in acceptance. Another corker from your camp Dean, love Dolly x


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Thanks so much first and foremost for taking the time to read and comment on this poem in the first place, Dolly.
    I'm glad you felt the warmth in this as I'd hoped after writing and posting this that that would come through above all else.
    Thanks too for your exceptional six star rating. Those I never take for granted.
    I guess it was your turn to make my day with your comment, LOL.
    Thanks so much again.
    Horror Hugs,
    ~Dean :)
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The eternal question: "why was I here? what was my worth?"

"Although I leave here all alone, my heart is full for having known...that you and I loved endlessly."

and so I end here with peaceful, smiling pause...


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Thanks, LaRosa
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This is very well written, your rhyme and meter are bang on. Such a sad tale in a poem. This man is leaving this world to enter the next alone, feeling sad and remorseful but ready to meet his end. Heart wrenching and poignant.
So beautifully written.


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Thanks so much first and foremost for taking the time to read and comment on this poem in the first place, Lu.
    I'm glad you felt the warmth in this as I'd hoped after writing and posting the poem that that would come through above all else.
    Thank you too for your exceptional six star rating. Those I never take fro granted.
    Thanks so much again. I'm very grateful to you for all.
    Horror Hugs,
    ~Dean :)
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MORBID IS RIGHT OU THINK YOU'D SNEAK AWAY THAT EASILY FROM ALL WHO ARE SCARED OF DEATH THEMSELVES RUNNING TO HIDE FROM IT BECOMING A HABIT


 Comment Written 15-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    I tried not too get too morbid here, Country. But I do feel this way quite often and wonder if I am really destined to die alone.
    No one wants to die alone, right?
    Thanks for the six, and the review. I sincerely appreciate both.
    ~Dean :)

reply by country ranch writer on 15-Jan-2017
    I CAN RELATE TO THAT BELIEVE ME. yOU ARE YOUNG YET YOUHAVE A LOT OF LIVING STILL LEFT IN YOU FOR GOD HAS KEPT YOU ON THIS EARTH FOR A PURPOSE.
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I think these are thoughts that a lot of us have as we grow old, even before the death bed. We especially wonder what we gave to life, what was our worth, and then we regret the things we didn't do.

What insight you have of human nature.

This man mourns the love he once had, as many of us do, and he's lived through hard times. Aside from a few regrets, he's ready to pass on. "'tis now the day, I'll ne'er return," a beautiful line.

You do internal rhyme so well. 8-)


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Aw, thanks, Yvonne. You're always so kind and supportive.
    I truly appreciate you as well as your encouraging comments.
    Thanks again for reading, and for the six.
    Have a wonderful week, my friend.
    ~Dean :)

reply by damommy on 15-Jan-2017
    You're very welcome.
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A fine poem reminded me of tending to my father's death bed. You wrote the thoughts and musings of a dying person:

"But death will not depart from me, so now I'll go, regrettably."

The reader follows the person's final thoughts before the grave. Although he helped his wife die, he now faces death alone, but comforted by one thought:

"Although I leave here all alone, my heart is full for having known
that you were once so dear to me--that you and I loved endlessly."

After he dies, you use the metaphor of a drifting feather to describe his soul drifting on while his body rests in "An earthen hollow, deep in loam."

This is fine, evocative writing with an aching regret of the soon-to-be-dead. Your language is rich and your words are smoothly rhymed.

Thank you for sharing.


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Andre. Having to deal with these sorts of feelings myself concerning my own mortality on a daily basis, I can assure you that this one was written straight from the heart.
    I'm very grateful for your kind, understanding comments and six stars.
    Have a great week ahead, my friend.
    ~Dean
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A very nice poem. It's not so macabre as the picture would suggest. I'm glad to see the change. To tell you the truth I was staring to think the horror theme was wearing thin.


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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2017
    To each their own, no more so than the detective theme.
    Thanks.
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