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Nature's Healing


Complexity of life

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Comment by
YNWA
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Really enjoyed Natures healing....beautifully structured with some wonderful lines....of the wind, pine needles spinning tales of yore....wonderful.

Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 21-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
    Thank you for your kind words. Do stop by again
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Dean Kuch
 
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Hello, Catherine.
Best-selling author Stephen King once wrote: The road to Hell is paved with adverbs." Furthermore, if explanatory matter can be omitted without changing the general meaning of the sentence, it should be set off with commas. If the explanatory matter is essential to the meaning of the sentence, do not set it off with commas. As commas represent a pause, it is good practice to read your writing out loud and listen to where you make natural pauses as you read it. More often than not, you will indicate where a comma should be placed by a natural pause.

Every sentence should include at least a capital letter at the start, and a full stop, exclamation mark or question mark at the end. This basic system indicates that the sentence is complete.
While I enjoyed the backstory, I found myself feeling like a fish floundering out of water as I read this.
I needed to be able to pause, to take a breath, and to gather my thoughts as to what was transpiring in your poetic tale.
With a few natural breaks placed in the proper places, this would be a much better read in my opinion.
Thanks for sharing.
~Dean



 Comment Written 20-Jan-2017



reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
    Thank you for constructive words! I appreciate you taking the time to read the work.

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Jan-2017
    My pleasure, Catherin.
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