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A woman stumbles upon a long-buried secret.

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I found your story very engrossing from the beginning to the end.
I'm glad you didn't change the story for the contest. It's great just
the way it is.


 Comment Written 17-Dec-2019


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I am so glad you keep the story as it originally played out.

Powerful... I am not sure of all the feelings in me that came spewing forth.

So... I will close with ...WOW!


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2019


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I enjoyed it very much. I truly admire you for standing by your convictions and withdrawing it from the contest. Sometimes we have to do what we believe in, or we lose ourselves. Excellent story, very well written, and I found myself racing to get to the end. Rich, intense characters.


 Comment Written 15-Dec-2019


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This is an incredibly riveting tale; very engrossing. I wouldn't want to change it either if it were mine. The characterisation is superb and the dialogue very believable.


 Comment Written 15-Dec-2019


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I wouldn't call this post creepy as you state. Some stories have a mind if their own. Like this one.
I found your writing to be meaningful. And with depth.
Nicely written


 Comment Written 14-Dec-2019


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I'm so glad I had the option of selecting six stars. This is indeed exceptional. It's probably good that you didn't tamper with it to fit the contest criteria; it is perfect just like this. Rich writing. I could see this in a literary journal or New Yorker magazine. Well done.


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2019


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Hi, very enjoyable and thought provoking piece. I had a couple of suggestions but this is very well polished.

of anguished ghosts. Great.

Here I was: - I think this should be a semi colon. Colons usually precede a list of items.

narrowly prescribed? Typo. But I'm in the UK so maybe not. :)

Browned with age (and) curled at the edges, - fragmented clauses otherwise?

Usually italics are NOT used for thoughts if you write 'I thought'. italics are when it's not annotated to make it clear to the reader.

Love the vocabulary choices to describe her mother both when young and old.

The intersexed reveal was deftly handled and the flow of the stories, intermixing memories with now, executed expertly.

The only question that popped into my head - being a mother and grandmother of 7 - was the age. 5 years is quite old to have no memory of 'being different'. Trauma and repressed memory could explain it, but I'm still not sure.

As for the prompt parameters, stories gave a life of their yen and this one feels like a well cut cloth that fits the story to perfection.

Great writing.



 Comment Written 18-Apr-2019


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I must admit, the story is a trifle creepy, but that's my bias not yours. You've managed to write an extremely unusual story, although "gender shifting" is not particularly unusual, children born with one set of outward organs, but internally different are part of us. beautifully written. It was fascinating, with very cold characters, pragmatic and unfeeling, but angry. Well developed plot, an excellent job, well done, blessings, Roy


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2019


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Hi Pit,

Wow! This is a really creative write and an intriguing read. I had all sorts of thought of who dunnit. LOL

Very well written, with nothing to suggest revising.

Thanks for sharing.

Jan

PS - Shame this didn't qualify, as it is very well done.


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2019


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I see you first posted this story a couple of years ago. Have you done much modification to it since then? It is the first time I have come across intersex issue in a story and you have handled it really well. The story itself is imaginative and has mystery and intrigue, making for a riveting read.


 Comment Written 18-Apr-2019


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