The Seasons of Our Journey
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Sally & Poe


A writer's story turned against her.

  38 total reviews 
Comment by
CMWilliams39
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Riveting story that kept me until the end. I love the intensity of Sally changing the story in order to survive her injuries or she would die by her own characters.


 Comment Written 09-Nov-2018



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
    Oh my goodness! Thank you for the super review! I appreciate the six stars as well. I have to ask you how you came to look through my portfolio and read Sally & Poe. Due to health problems, I haven't been on FS in a very long time. I haven't posted anything in over a year. I've been away so long that I can't think anyone remembers me! Again, thanks for the super review and all those stars. I really appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this piece.
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Dan-C
 
 
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Congratulations on your contest win! Your story is better than mine. I love the back story and Poem the dog. Its a great story again congratulations.
Dan


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
    Thank you for the review, and the congrats on the win! I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this piece.
    Suzanne
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
    What a rush! Thank you.
    Suzanne
Comment by
Muffins
 
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This story breaks new ground in the scope of the theme of getting bringing life to your character! It drove me crazy with suspense, especially about Poe, as the web of psychological and mystical tension climbed higher and higher. Fantastic story.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thank you for the fantastic review! I like those six stars, too. I am so glad you liked this piece. I love all the wonderful things you said about this story. It thrilled me that you said it drove you crazy with suspense. I might print this review and frame it. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this.
    Suzanne
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barkingdog
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
What a wonderful story for the contest. I think you have an excellent chance of winning.
When a writer actually brings her antagonist to life and has to rewrite her story in order to survive, you have a real thriller.
Thank goodness for Poe's waking her. Excellent casting of a canine companion. Loved the wash cloth that kept on licking. haha
The interweaving of the story with her novel worked perfectly. I saw no problem with the way you presented both parts. Smooth transitions.
I especially liked this description: ' All her weight pushed against her shoulder and turned the liquid fire to jagged bolts of excruciating white lightning. '
And you make very good use of descriptive verbs.

Totally enjoyed reading this unique plot.
Again, good luck in the contest. Fingers crossed.

:) ellen xx




 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thank you for the wonderful review, and the six stars, Ellen. I value your comments, as you are an excellent writer, and can see what works and what doesn't. I was tired of the 'same old, same old' blood and guts horror, so I tried something different. I had a lot of fun writing this. I liked the wash cloth that kept on licking, too! :o) I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this. Thanks for the good wishes in the contest.
    Suzanne
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That was really scary, I'm glad I don't write horror stories, only body hopping time travel ... which would be fun! This was a great story for the horror contest, and original, Well written, keeping the reading wanting to find out what it was in the room. I'm glad Poe was alright in the end. Well done and good luck. :) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thank you for the super review, Sandra. That would be quite interesting to have something from a horror story show up in your time travel story, wouldn't it? A new genre - Horror Sci-fi! :o) I am pleased this held your interest, and you wanted to know what was in the room. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this piece. Thanks for the good wishes in the contest.
    Suzanne
Comment by
Rasmine
 
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HelloI Good story. This is a good contest entry, and I wish you luck in it.
My favorite paragraph was the second one that starts right under your illustration.
Nice to meet you.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Rasmine,
    Thank you for the nice review. I'm glad you liked the story. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this piece. Thank you for the good wishes in the contest. Nice to meet you, too.
    Suzanne
Comment by
Dave Benneman
 
 
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This story is inventive and exciting. The characters, all three, are interesting and have that touch of reality that draws the reader in. Good pacing, slowly ratcheting up the tension until I knew where it would go, but at that point it didn't matter.

Loved it. Good luck in the contest.

Dave


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
    Thank you for this great review. I'm glad you liked this story. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this piece. Thank you for the good wishes in the contest.
    Suzanne
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Such a unique story, which drew me in right away - your vivid descriptions took me there - a superb piece of writing, Suzanne

Albeit a horror story, I was glad of a happy ending - Sally was safe, and, of course, being a dog-lover, that Poe was safe too.

Very entertaining. Good luck with the contest.

Blessings,
Margaret


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
    Margaret, thank you very much for the fantastic review. I appreciate the wonderful things you said about my story! Yes, I agree, a horror story isn't expected to have a happy ending, but what can I say? It was a twist, right? I can't kill off my characters - they are like my children! Maybe in the next one I write, I'll have horrid creatures that I won't mind doing in! LOL I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this piece. Thank you for the good wishes in the contest. We'll see if the judges like a horror story with warm fuzzies! LOL
    Suzanne
Comment by
estory
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Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
I thought this idea of the writer's story coming to life was original and imaginative, so I gave it six stars. It was quite interesting, and you told the story with lots of vivid images, great descriptions of the thing in the mist, with its strange powers, and the violence as it attacks her. Nice vivid horror and suspense writing. it has a happy ending, which I don't know if the purists would want, i'm not sure if i'm altogether satisfied with it. Some part of us wants this to stay dark. but it is your story. Nice job with this estory


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
    Thank you for the great review, and the six stars! I'm glad you liked this story. I get what you're saying about a horror story needs to stay dark. I guess it did have a happy ending, but I just couldn't kill off the dog - I'm a sucker for dogs. Maybe Sally should have died. But, to be honest, I never even considered killing her off, because I'm toying with the idea of bringing these two back for other visits, facing different problems. Thank you for all the nice things you said about this piece. I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this.
    Suzanne

reply by estory on 15-Feb-2017
    Well, I look forward to more in the series then. Just don't give in to the temptation to over do it. the premise is very original, and it works very well. try to come up with another one estory
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