It seems you've done a good job of this free verse, but don't believe what the free versers feed you, they generally struggle with form anyway, that's why they write free verse, but it's easier for a serial rhymer to write free verse than the other way around, well done, blessings, Roy
In my opinion, double wow for this stunning piece - a remarkable write in its entirety - your gift is undeniable in this write - you can write anything, any style, any subject, and my admiration is endless...
i think there is room for both. Practice is the secret to any form. It comes easier for some to write freely, and struggle with rhyme. Don't give up! It is worth the attempt. This one is very good in my mind's eye.
Great poem. It is a rollicking free verse with some rhyme(intended or not).
It's one of those peoms that has depth but makes one chuckle as well.
I have the other problem, rhyming just feels like Hallmark...geez...thank goodness we can all be ourselves on this site:-)
I don't know why you yearn to write in free verse when you are so accomplished at rhyme schemes. Don't torture yourself as a wannabe poetic picasso. Stick with the role models you admire. I'm sure any free-style versifying of yours would still be a lot better than many, but if you are more comfortable rhyming then so be it.
Beautifully penned and I do like that You would like to become The future poetic Picasso. Maybe You will if You have taken Frost's wrong road because he did take the wrong one... Didn't he?Yes, You are completely right about in selecting the free style or rhyming format structures but often its thematic subject that traps You and it just comes out.Great job.