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Broken Flowers

Seldom mend ( Last stanza audio, by the author )
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Yes!
"She is mother to us all, and all is she
And whenever she falls, as such... do we"
This is one of the strongest poems I have read on the deleterious impact of misogyny, abuse, and domination of women. Your central metaphor is broken flower:
"Our broken flowers seldom heal
As pride they bear, scars conceal"
You then graphically and violently portray through poetry the many scars that misogyny causes:
"Her genitalia cut, so no pleasure gain
Then you hail his name as she mops the stain
And when the dowry low you burn her bed
As the young girl dies, again you wed"
You rally mothers, sisters, and daughters to achieve their full potential regardless of how much the masculine world view may try to hold them back:
"Rise, oh, mothers --adorn your wings
Pride now, sisters, the mockingbird sings
Hush, dear daughters, for heaven's awake
Bloom as before, n'er more to break."
You end your poem with a new definition of courage and an appreciation of the mothers who birthed us:
"So, remember well who gave you life
Her crime, henceforth, a woman... a wife"
This is an extremely strong and powerful poem that needed to be said, RG. Thank you for sharing and for caring.
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2017 |
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
Thank you for your detailed breakdown of what you see, and it is pleasing.
Thanks for taking the time.
Wishing you a pleasant evening.
RG
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