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Saying Goodbye First Day of School


a poem dedicated to all parents

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This is excellent! We protective parents are often the ones that have more separation anxiety than the children! Great way to use that last line to bring the surprise on whose wet cheek it was.


 Comment Written 21-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    You have stated the "problem" very well as "separation anxiety." I know few parents who do not have it when they send their child off to school. So pleased you liked my senyru. Rod
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This senryu, Saying Goodbye First Day of School, captures the words and emotions that are at play on one of these milestone moments. Wet cheeks and reassuring five-year-olds. Nice.


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    "A milestone moment" is a very fitting description of what happened here. Thanks so much for sharing, Rill, and your thoughtful comments. Rod
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What a great Senryu with much emotion. It reminded me of when I had to say goodbye to my child the first day of school.
Congratulations!


 Comment Written 20-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    Thank you for sharing my senyru, moonsunrise. I am delighted you can so easily relate to it. Rod
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It's really hard watching your kids grow up.
They seem to do so awfully fast these days.
It certainly beats the alternative, however.
Nicely written senryu.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Dean, for sharing my senyru and your very thoughtful comments. Yes, children do grow up so fast, yet we remember that ONE day forever. Rod

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Feb-2017
    My pleasure, Rod.
    You're very welcome.
    ~Dean
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Lots and lots of emotion and memory in this little senryu. Anyone with children whom they love can certainly relate and appreciate both the enthusiasm of the well raised, confident child and the teary eyed mom. Perfect form and presentation.
Thanks for sharing...best wishes in the contest.
Smiles


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    Thank you so much,Roberta, for your kind praise of my senyru. Rod
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It's always so hard to say goodbye to our children. How will they
be treated? Are there bullies? Will they have fun? Good entry.
You have a compassionate child. flylikeaneagle


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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    I am delighted you enjoyed and could so easily relate to my senyru. Rod
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kids tend to take the first day getting on the bus better than their parents...that first week is a hard one...LOL...very well written...and I love your picture...xxoo


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    I agree that many kids seem to take that first day of school better than their parents. My kids and granddaughter sure did. Thanks for sharing. Rod

reply by l.raven on 21-Feb-2017
    yes they do...they are stronger than we think...and you are so welcome...good to see you my sweet friend...love xxoo
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Yes this is well written and has a lovely feeling enclosed in the poem I enjoyed my friend well done good luck in the contest regards Jill


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Jill, for sharing my senyru and your kind praise. Rod
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Well-written senryu poem. Nice and subtle with mom's emotion and the reassurement of the child that everything is alright. I like this one! Sounds very real to me. Good luck in the contest!


 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017



reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Doc. I am so pleased this one sounds real to you. Indeed, it was based on personal experience as both a parent and grandparent. Rod

reply by Doc Holiday on 21-Feb-2017
    Glad you one! I knew I picked a winner!
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Rod , your Senryu must have hit a bullseye with most parents, (especially weepy moms). I really liked the reversal of the 'strong' one. That is so true. Dads feel the same I think, men are taught not to cry easily.
I really do not find anything to be improved, good luck, Trisha


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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
    Trisha, you must have been my good luck omen in this contest with your premonition. I am so pleased that many readers out there could relate to this senyru so easily. Thanks so much for your wonderful praise and encouraging comments. Rod

reply by Bucketlist on 21-Feb-2017
    Good ! I See you have many six star ratings and reviewers too
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