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Hallelujah
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You Don't Really Care For Music, Do You?
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| I had a little trouble following along. I think it is my mental ability, not your writing, though. If I understand this, we have a performer, or someone else who is adored by crowds, a religious figure perhaps? Someone who is loved for their public persona but, in real life, they are a completely different personality? Like so many public figures. Is this what you wanted to convey?
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Comment Written 01-Apr-2017 |
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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2017
No, a freakin' roundworm has glommed onto my tomatoes. I am demanding he honors me for providing his feast. OHHHHH, this is for Hallelujah! So sorry. As to the theme of Hallelujah, I didn't intend it to go to your more astute level. Just a simple performer, albeit blind, who is adored by his fans and he is apt to agree with them if it werent' for the "leveling factor" of his manager ... whispering in his ear that he is mortal.
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reply by Delahay on 02-Apr-2017
Ah, o.k. A lot of people could benefit from having someone around to remind them they are mortal.
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| At the beginning David sounds like a lot of my lecherous football mates in my early man years, but he turns out to be as insecure and depending on the ladies for his security, as do I with my wife and daughters who mother me a lot. I like the defining song "hallelujah", which gives some influence to the dialogue. Well done, you and Lee (humpwhistle) have a "real handle" on dialogue only narratives, mate wonderful entry, good luck, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2017 |
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
Roy, I take this with particular pride since you don't give away sixes lavishly. I'm thrilled about your compliment. I'm honored to be in the same room as Lee! Again, thanks.
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reply by royowen on 09-Mar-2017
You such a great writer, Jay, you're an inspiration, mate
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| Hi, Jay. I really miss you. This is an excellent entry for the dialogue-only contest. How does your garden grow. I am starting a few things in my kitchen where I get good sunlight. Now, I have nowhere to cook, LOL. I guess that's what the grill is for. Take care, my friend and let me know how you are~DEbbie
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2017 |
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
Debbie, you are such a sweetheart. It is good to be missed. Thanks for your kind words about my dialogue only story. It was fun to write. Ah, the garden! My entire backyard has become my canvas. I have an 8 X 8 vegetable garden with 3 varieties of tomatoes, Bell Peppers, spinach, cukes and radishes. Around the perimeter, I have lavender, jasmine, blackberries, boysenberries and a large, fragrant, white blossomed plant (whose name escapes me). I've sawed down four or five truckloads of limbs, and hauled them to the green-dump to be mulched. I have a humongous pile of mulch and a composting bin, the contents of both of which will be gone before summer's end. I'm in process of laying out a kinda rambling cobblestone walkway throughout the back yard, beside which, I'll plant the roses I grew from stem-cuttings. I have a living room full of plastic bins full of stem cuttings (roses, jasmine houseplants, lavender (not doing well, alas!), and recently beautifully blossomed crab apple. Oh, don't tell anyone about the lavender. I don't want it to get back to them and hurt their flagging feelings.
Now... aren't ya glad you asked? Have you seen Selena Stambi's (Sonali's) videos in her profile? That's what I'm holding up as a vision for my backyard. It will be a garden of meditation and prayer. But that won't be for a year or so.
Thanks again, Debbie for your interest. Now, tell me about your garden.
Jay
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reply by dejohnsrld (Debbie) on 07-Mar-2017
Jay, you are awesome. I wish I could come visit your garden--and get some tips with writing too. So far, most of my garden is in the kitchen waiting for consistent warmer weather, however, I have nowhere to cook, LOL. Glad you caught the gardening passion. It is awesome. I would love some pictures, my friend. I'll be posting some as soon as there is something to see~Debbie
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