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This is a great philosophy to live by. It also made for a great poem. It rhymed, it made sense, and it touched me as a reader. It helps when there are no restrictions in lines or syllables.Thanks for sharing.


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this is quite an undertaking, very unusual. it's Ann Landers meets Heloise in rhyme. it really works pretty well, Jaybird1. I like the idea...............meeshu


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I just love this and how it portrays a individual that walks to the beat of his own drum and doesn't fall into the vat of conformity. The ending is wonderful, because it is true that at times don't practice what we preach. This flows well, and is wonderfully written. Good job. Keep writing.


 Comment Written 13-Oct-2018


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I enjoyed your brief musings Jay and each has the potential to be developed into a longer piece.
Very nicer rhyme and good use of alliteration to propel the piece along smoothly.

Well done my friend.

Blessings
Janet


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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    Thank you for your great support-appreciated
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These brief musings are fun and insightful. I love the rocking rhythm of your rhymes and the humor of your verse:

"He writes so pure, so true and sure
and does it with so little fuss.
I only know him from the way
he signs his name-A. Nony Mous."

I found this quite clever.

As you stated in your author's notes, you composed your poem of parts from previously unfinished poems. This has the effect of making your poem appear to be quilted from different parts that do not work together to deliver a whole, focused message, but I do the same thing, too--cannibalize the parts of unfinished poems to create something new. I heard of a poet who never threw away deleted lines of poetry, but kept them filed in her garage for reuse. I do the same on my laptop or notebook.

Thank you for sharing your poem.


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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    Tha k you for your thorough comment. I ennoyed and apprec iated it
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I think you should finish all of these as they all have great potential to be good poems, my friend. They are enjoyable as is as well, but could really be developed further~Debbie


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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    I might get some of them finished yet.Thank you so mjch
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An interesting rhyming poem with a varied metrical pattern. Despite the variations in rhyme scheme meter and lines in stansas this holds together very well, and has a unique flow. It also makes use of alliteration, and an excellent piece of internal rhyme that starts off the penultimate stanza.


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    You have been a great supporter of my efforts and I greatly applpreciate you
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I enjoyed ALL of your brief poetic musings posted here for our reading pleasure, Jay.
But the one I liked best follows:

Quite often on life's crowded way
I let the rumbling herds pass by.
With slackened gait, I search the sky
to find the role that I must play,
'ere curtains fall and death holds sway.
... You know, it's been said that the difference between a stepping stone and a stumbling block depends completely on the perspective of the one walking the path...
Take care, Jay.
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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    Your continhed support is greatly appreciated.Thank you

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'A fullness brewed from thinking', unique words and 'from this broth we should be drinking', yes we should think first and act later, often it is the other way around! A joy to read, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    I really do appreciade your continued support.It does inspire me
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I love your collection of unfinished poems. They are very good. Maybe you'll go back and finish later, but this collection is fine on its own.
I love the one on A. Nony Mous. That was way too cute!
I also like the one about keeping up with the Jones, who owe for half they own. Truth be told, they probably owe on it all. haha.

Great job,
Rhonda


 Comment Written 09-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    Your sup port is greatly appreciated-thank you
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