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Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "haiku (empty swing)"

A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Oh how beautiful and I can see it and the memories of one more joyous summer having ended. I will always remember those joys. So very well done!


 Comment Written 24-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thamk you, Artemis, for this wonderful review, your generous extra star, and encouraging comments for my autumn haiku. I truly appreciate your kind response.
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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Playgrounds are bare, no laughter and smile there...the wind pushes the swings on a rainy day. It is a very lovely written haiku. I picture those empty swings and children sitting quietly in the classrooms. Autumn leaves dancing in the rain. Well done, my friend. With love, Ella


 Comment Written 22-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Ella, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)

reply by Ella25 on 27-Mar-2017
    You are welcome, Karyn. I have been away from this site for few days. Other things keep me busy. With love, Ella
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Nice Haiku about autumn and the start of school. This poem has nice flow. Like the word choice. Great vision of an empty swing on the schoolyard. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Rlegel, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. Thanks for mentioning the word choice and imagery!
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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You just get better as you ascend to the ranks of the most prolific and talented here on FS! Sorry no 6 packs left, this deserves more stars! Your ability to paint a picture with words is almost uncanny. The haunting picture of the empty swing is relieved by your last line, in which the swing will soon be filled with laughing, boisterous children.
Great work,
irish


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Oh, Irish, you say the nicesest things to warm this girleen's heart. Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughts for my haiku...I truly appreciate your encouraging words and I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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Hi Indiana Irish, this is a good haiku with lines one and two interconnecting as they should and your third line is a really good satori - it reflects on the previous two lines. Well done. Warm regards Dorothy x


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Dorothy, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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This is a wonderful haiku. When I was young I always enjoyed the beginning of the school year, in part because of the playground equipment. Patricia


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Patricia, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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Aww, this is a really good one. The parks do get very empty in autumn, they look so lonely without the kids in them playing.
Great satori, off to school they go.


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Lu, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. I always enjoy hearing from you!
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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Wow, wow, wow! This is an excellent autumn hauki with a concrete image of the empty swing swaying in the autumn breeze because school has begun. I am very thrilled to have read this because you show what could be achieved in so few words. Thank you for sharing your contribution to the book.


 Comment Written 21-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    What a wonderful review for my autumn haiku! Thank you, Sis Cat, for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. Thanks!
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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ahhh - like this one. I can see that swing blowing in the wind. This one is creative with a very good satori. Well done, my friend


 Comment Written 20-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Douglas, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response. Thanks for mentioning the satori!
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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Yep, parks will have many empty swings during term time, a poignant write indeed, September school uniforms all neat and new, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 20-Mar-2017



reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you, Dolly, for taking the time to read and review my autumn haiku. I appreciate your encouraging and kind response.
    Smiles,
    Karyn :-)
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