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Cornell can't find his keys

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Marge Setzer
 
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I've hunted you down so I could read some of your work. This is a story I can relate to. AAA knows my name by now. I've had to call them several times for locking my car with the keys still inside. The most memorable time was when I not only left the keys in the ignition, but never turned the ignition off. I wish I had written about it as you did. I still laugh about it. As for your story, it made me laugh and I could make a connection, which to me is the ultimate compliment. The only suggestion is that you avoid repetition- find them, finding them, found, and hour-long and half-hour. Substitute a more interesting verb for "went" (line two). I loved the choice of Gumbell which rhymes with Dumbell (on purpose?) Marge


 Comment Written 23-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
    Thanks so much, Marge. LOL Glad yuou can relate. :) Bob
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Hey, didn't know you were back. I'm not too formiliar with this contest, but you know I like whatever you write. Sorry, you didn't win. I shouldn't be reading; I can only use one eye. Surgery next month. I only read this one because it's so short. Glad you're back. Really missed you.


 Comment Written 23-Apr-2018



reply by the author on 23-Apr-2018
    Harriett!!!! I am so glad to hear from you, my friend. Yeah, I was away with health issues for about six months or more. I am so glad to be back. I hope your surgery goes well. I am anxious to see your writing again too. If you are reading short things and are up to it read some of my poetry from years ago. I actually won a few contests with it. LOL..Bless you, my dear friend. Bob

reply by amahra on 25-Apr-2018
    Ok, I'll select the shortest ones and read a few. LOL!

    Again, Welcome back. Oh, btw, I wasn't satisfied with the ending to Dark Covenant and added ten chapters which is not on this site. And the ending is better.

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2018
    Yes, and if you lookat it hree months from now you may wan to edit it again. It's just the nature of he beas, Harriet. :) Bob
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Hi, Bob,

Sorry I've been away for so long and missed your posts.

I admire the skills of a talented prose writer. You're one of them for sure. I've only become aware of drabble flash fiction and am not quite sure how it differs from flash fiction. Perhaps it's the length of the piece?

You've penned a good one and something to which many of us can relate. Lost keys only to find them in the car. Your leading character is lucky his car was still there idling. lol. A great turn at the end.

Well done, my friend.
Ray


 Comment Written 26-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
    Thanks so much, Ray. I did not win though. LOL...Bob
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Benny Beeharry
 
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Hi good friend, this write does make me laugh. I really enjoyed it.i have had this experience a time or two. He left the car on. But I switched off and did not left the key in the ignition.
Old age, for sure.
A brilliant idea.

Take care

Danny Jock


 Comment Written 13-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 13-Apr-2017
    Thank you, Danny. I sincerely appreciate your review and I think I know this guy, cornell. LOL. Bob
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have to show this to my friend. It may fiction to you but she really did that. Or should I say we did that. We got out of the car, went into our local diner to eat breakfast and when we came out the car was running. Thank goodness the car was still there. This made me laugh.


 Comment Written 12-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 12-Apr-2017
    Thanks so much, Dmb. I am glad you enjoyed this short one. Blessings, Bob ps. I think we all know a Cornell. LOL.
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Fun piece, Bob.
I'd say Cornell needs a spare set of keys in his gym locker, or if he has early onset Alzheimers, he needs to take a taxi to the gym.

Excellent story telling. Complete and concise.

Best of luck in the contest, my friend.

:) e xx


 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
    Thanks so much, Ellen. I appreciate this very much. How are you doing? I trust you are still well. Bless you, my dear friend. Bob

reply by barkingdog on 10-Apr-2017
    You're welcome.
    I must be fine. I'm writing again. Head is clear. Nothing heals like confronting a difficult situation with the truth.

    Blessing,
    :) e

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
    :) Take care, Ell. Bob
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Hi Bob I enjoyed this little work but thought that the title and image gave away the ending. My understanding is that the end should be a surprise.

I had to laugh at the idea of a man of his years doing an hours work out in the gym. It would kill me for sure

hugs

Freda


 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
    Thank you, Freda. Wow! You are the first that mentioned anything like that for the contest??? At any rate, are you sure it is so bad it only deserves four stars? LOL. Bob
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This is a good story but if it were me I'd take out 'keys.' The first one is good but you have informed the reader he has lost his keys so there is no point repeating the word. In my opinion, it makes the story jumpy. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
    Thank you, Bob
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SeanFox16
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This resonates with me at this point in time because I lost my car keys, along with all my grocery store swipe cards, locker keys, house keys...etc just last week. But unfortunately, my story didn't have a happy ending like Cornells. I'm sure they will show up some day, jammed in some obscure corner by one of two little girls. Thank you for sharing your delightful little tale about me, sorry, I mean Cornell. :-)


 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
    Thanks so much, Sean. I hope they turn up someday. LOL...Bob
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Hi

Well done. I could visualize the situation easily. And I can relate to leaving keys in the ignition. Cute idea!
Just correct the spelling of 'idiling' to 'idling'.

All the best!

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 Comment Written 10-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 10-Apr-2017
    Thank you for the review, Samantha. I appreciate your time and clue on idling. I see you are new aboard the site. Welcome aboard. May I suggest you learn the importance of giving stars to your reviews. I cannot for the life of me see how this only rates three stars. I have never ever gotten three stars for anything in my 14 years on this site. Just food for thought if you want to become a family member on the site. Blessings, Bob (ps...they can me changed if you ever wan tto do that for any reason and yes.......my feelings are hurt. :) Bob

reply by Samantha B on 11-Apr-2017
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reply by Samantha B on 11-Apr-2017
    Hi

    Thank you for sharing your opinion.

    All the best!
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