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He Broke My Heart


Stand in my shoes

  31 total reviews 
Comment by
victortouche
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Exceptional
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My goodness, outstanding.
Can I use "Wow?"

Very articulate.
Very moving.

I would, however,
keep a more positive
opinion of your self.

You have much to offer,
and should do so.

victortouche


 Comment Written 01-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
    Wow! Tell me, to what do I owe this honor? Thank you so much for stopping by. I am moved and honored. It means a great deal to me. Again a huge thank you. Hope you are doing well.

    Jimi
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kiwigirl2821
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Hello Jimi. Absolutely one of the best things I've read today. The write seems more of an observation that allows the reader to take a breath and simply experience it. The ending a sad song to an old story. Well written. Clever, compassionate as opposed to passionate and well deserved of the POM win. Congrats. xoxo Kiwi


 Comment Written 12-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    kiwigirl,
    thank you so very much for such a wonderful review. I am honored and especially since this work paid you nothing to review. I apologize for just responding . jlsavell

reply by kiwigirl2821 on 18-Jun-2017
    Never any need to apologize for any reader to read your work. You are an amazing writer and worth every second this reader gets to read your work. Awesome! xoxo deborah
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A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review.


 Comment Written 05-May-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    thank you!
    jls
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Warren Rodgers
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hi Jimi, Your poem was simply wonderful to read and "feel" tonight. You have written this with empathy and love in your heart painting beautiful images in this readers mind as it weaves layer upon layer of emotions through every well chose word. I love how you describe the way he appeared and even his movements in great detail and the internal struggle a person with compassion in their heart feels when we see homeless veterans scraping through life, dismayed at a government system that uses them then spits them back out to the streets to fend for themselves. "He was so much like me" really struck me as I recalled "there for but the grace of God go I". Beautiful writing, my friend... this reminds me of another poem you once wrote named something like Lovers, Needles & ?
One small nit in spelling, it should be "gait" instead of "gate".
It's good to read you work again, Best of luck in the contest voting and thank you for sharing your work with us.

All the best, Warren :)


 Comment Written 04-May-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Warren, I hope this reply finds you well and truly happy. I apologize for just responding. I vacillate between returning more but life gets busy. Thank you so very much for this exceptional review. I am honored.. jimi
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pharp
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Exceptional
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This very thought provoking read should touch the hearts of all who have given a review. Exceptional job in the penning of this free verse. I have nothing but respect for all men and women in the military, veterans, disabled veterans and especially the homeless vets. I cried as I read this poem for no veteran should be homeless. Thanks for sharing and the very best to you in the contest.....Portia


 Comment Written 03-May-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Portia, first of all, please accept my apologies for just responding. I am rarely on Fanstory nowadays. Life has been busy.

    Thank you so very much for this exceptional review. I am honored and moved by your comments. Again a big thank you.

    Jlsavell
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RGstar
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I missed this write. My late review tell you how much I Ali's the write. Beautiful in all aspects of the word. A glimpse of life and human emotion at moment and time even the least romantic would find endearing. Lovely transition through the stanzas in creating the imagery. Good luck, dear author, so love your work.
My best wishes.
RG


 Comment Written 03-May-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Roy,
    I apologize profusely for just responding. I am rarely on Fanstory anymore. You honor and you humble me greatly. Thank you so very much dear man.
    Your ardent fan always, Jimi
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Mabaker
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Sometimes in the briefest span a life is opened for inspection but never for intrusion. We can take a tiny little peek, but never a large intrusion, that is not permitted. Great writing Jimi as always. Love U Anne.


 Comment Written 23-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    To you dear friend, another belated thank you!!!!
    Jimi
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Poetic Friend
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JIMI! I AM SO GLAD YOU HAVE RETURNED!!! THE SITE IS NOT THE SAME WITHOUT YOUR PRESENCE!!! YOU HAVE MADE MY DAY! YES, I AM SHOUTING, BUT WITH TREMENDOUS JOY!!!!!!!

I saw your post earlier this week, but I was too busy to comment.

Jimi, this poem broke my heart as well. It is always painful to witness a homeless veteran, who have sacrificed so much, for the Country, for Americans. There is much wrong with this picture. Thank God, you communicated with him. There are homeless veterans that believe no one cares.

Although prose/poem bear sadness, it is SO well-written - both technically and emotionally. Of course, it has your unique, poetic signature - enriched/elevated language, stunning imagery, evocative theme, and memorable message. I love it!

Jimi, I know that you are involved in other projects, but if possible, please do not stay away too long. This site needs your presence. We learn from you, my dear.



 Comment Written 22-Apr-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Again sweet Poetic Friend, you honor and humble me. Thank you so very very much for your kindness and your encouraging words. I am always moved by your words. Again a big thank you
    Jimi
Comment by
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Mustang Patty
 
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thank you for sharing your poem about this homeless man. Your descriptive language allowed us to see him in his humble abode - even though your picture didn't post with your presentation.
~patty~


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2017


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Gert sherwood
 
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Exceptional
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jlsavel
You deserve a six rating for your true story of how you met a veteran who ended up homeless of how you describe so well his appearance and this part was wonderfully written

Boring into each other's souls. His eyes averted quickly toward the darkening horizon. He returned with a hesitant smile. Warm and sensitive, though visibly worn and tarnished from a day's pack. Still... he was drawing.

Gert


 Comment Written 21-Apr-2017


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