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Angels part2 (Mother)


Not all have wings

  59 total reviews 
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Aiona
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What a lovely poem. Thoughtful attention to rhyme and meter and structure. The subject matter is very sensitive, and delicately represented by the poem itself. I learned a lot from the notes at the bottom too. What a cool name for a sailboat that would be.... "Hvithra."


 Comment Written 12-Mar-2019



reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
    Thank you for going to this. Been away so lets hope I find some motivation. Thank you so much.
    My very best
    RGstar
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Wendy Winter
 
 
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Goose bumps the whole time. Unbelievable. I had to read it several times to get a full grasp and enjoyed each time reading it. Thanks for sharing.


 Comment Written 25-May-2018



reply by the author on 26-May-2018
    Thank you so much Wendy. I appreciate you going back to this.
    Sending you heartfelt wishes. Thank you for the six stars.
    My best.
    RGstar

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    Your Welcome

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    Your Welcome

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    Your Welcome

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    Your Welcome

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    Your Welcome

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    Your welcome
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writeapoem
 
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This is so deserving of the highest rewards and I see that has been afforded to you. This was such a sad but happy description and depiction of the love of descending to heaven as the songwriter penned "no grave is going to hold my body down. "

I'm quite familiar with the June or Jew plum. I spent 22years developing a church and med clinic in the hills of NE Manchester and was introduced to its tasty treat by my Jamaican fellow-labor. I know the angel of the Lord inspired and touched your heart and thanks for imparting such a work so divine unto us all on fan-story.


 Comment Written 16-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 16-Jan-2018
    Thank you, author for going back to this, and I appreciate the support and attention as such a personal matter.

    Yes, can't claim to remember the taste of these plumbs completely, but I there is a lingering since childhood.

    Thank you for the six stars.
    have a great day.
    RGstar

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Hello again, my friend: I had promised myself that I would not read your work until Sunday so that I would have some six star reviews for your work. I feel guilty now that I did not wait. This poem is a son's mother's story told so well that there's an aching feeling in the tone of each perfectly selected word. There is so much deep admiration, love and sorrow expressed that it caused the bleeding of my heart for her, for you. She was a young girl when she became wife and mother and was so undeserving of so much unhappiness and pain.

The below two stanzas gave me such a clear picture of the misery. The reveal of the young age (chosen as a youth for the full control of her and the molding of her) and the dress, sequined, turquoise blue but the rain purple eroding all she knew, saving pennies for carrots, pain for stew. Oooooohhhhhh my, my, my! how touching yet so marvelously explained. Whether it was because there was no money given for fear she would escape as all victims should, or none given or provided as a part of the abuse, I know it all too well. That next stanza I felt and remember watching the clock, counting the tick tocks, fearing the time of his return to home, hoping everything is just right so as to not set him off. False encore -- YES -- that faked happy to see him. Then cancer came - savior - in pity's name. This reminded of the many times that I did not even want to go home, when I was not home. I eagerly awaited a nervous break down or death, anything not to be there anymore with that kind of total unhappiness and loathing. Anything would have been better.

WOW! This poem has left me speechless and so sad for her yet I do know this pain, this life so well. The voice that speaks is that of my oldest boy who saw what you did as a boy. His poetic voice was very strong also and he shared it in his poetry. Sadly though he is no longer with us because of the same horrible man, his so called father. God allowed me to escape that fate. Oh, but I do have the stories to tell.

This poem is remarkable. I cannot wait until you publish.

At sixteen, 'him' wed... her dress, sequined, turquoise blue
But purple fell the rain, eroding all she knew
A land far away, pale, flowered curtains for view
Saving pennies for the carrots... pain for the stew

Tick, tock, ticks the clock, she'd count the seconds to four
"Hi, Ho," fear he brings, she lays his slippers by the door
The lock, slowly, turns, we'd feign greetings-- false encore
The beanstalk, no more for climbing...thoughts sealed once more


 Comment Written 20-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
    You brought a little moissture to my eye, dear T for who more than you could read into the write so well with exact precision, but one who knows the feeling the inuendoes, the act, the smiles, the caution and the pain, for nowhere is there love to find, except pity and hope.
    Please do not put six stars on these, much as you find them giving, for knowing you read fills my heart, and also knowing you read as you might excerpts of a book, gauges the intrest for me of what the book may hold. You honor me, thank you so much, and when I have more time, I will be looking at some of the individual poems you mentioned in your portfolio...not tit for tat, but with genuine interest towards one who has shown interest in my steps forward, so is the interest for hers the same way.
    Thank you my dear friend.
    My best wishes.
    RG
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Crystal Kay
 
 
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Thank you for sharing! So much emotion. So much feeling! You evoke an entire image of the life of the family and its dysfunction before your mother left this earth.


 Comment Written 08-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    Thank you, dear Crystal. I have been away, not known if back but try to ease in and see how I feel. Thank you so very much fro the support and six stars.
    Have a beautiful week.
    My best, RGstar
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Hello there, RD

Long time no see :)

Back now I hope for a while.

Oh boy, what a read! I admire your ability to write with such beauty.

It's such a terribly sad set of circumstance for both your dear mother and for you, of course, RD.

Interestingly, your mother had gone through so very much and must have been a saint, not to have been vengeful and full of hate. What amazing strength she had.

And to think that you too, come across as such a mild mannered well-balanced human being.

I'm so sorry your dear mum has since passed away, RD.

Thinking of you, my dear friend.


A sure winning entry I feel :)

Much love to you

tracey xxx



 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    My dearest, Trimple, can't say how happy I am to se you here and posting again. Sorry for the delay, not sure if really back but will ease in and see how I feel. Goosd to see you writing, dear friend. My very best.
    RG x

reply by trimple on 28-Aug-2017
    Hello there, RG

    This writing bug has a habit of behaving like a cicada, by burying itself at times. :)

    I hope I'm back, but more so, hope that you too will continue to delight and inspire all of us here on FS.

    Much love to you

    tracey

    hugs xxx

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    You always inspire me dear friend.
    Have a great day

reply by trimple on 28-Aug-2017
    :) <--- smiley face
Comment by
alphonsus murgatroyd
 
 
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This is a truly heartfelt and wonderful piece. Sometimes the emotion felt by the poet does not translate well into a poem that is accessible to other readers, but this one succeeds beautifully for me as reader. The anguish felt by the 'I' voice, the one who watches helplessly as the mother endures relentless violence, is palpable. The mother who was little more than a child herself when her own child is born, lives only to love and protect that child. Then when illness claims her and releases her from her suffering, the child can find some peace in knowing that all pain has now ceased for the mother. I particularly like two images - 'the clipped rose' and 'An Angel worn thin'. These convey so clearly the idea that a life which should have been fulfilled and joyful is instead wracked with terror and pain. I also like your explanation of 'wuthering', extending it from the familiarity of the title 'Wuthering Heights'. I had always thought that 'wuthering' simply meant 'windswept'.

I have given this poem six stars because I have seldom read anything that combines powerful anguish and beautiful expression quite so eloquently.


 Comment Written 09-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    Thank you s much. Sorry the tardy response but been off a while, still not clear if fully back, but hope to be motivated.
    Thank you so much for the six stars and great review.
    Have a great day.
    RGstar
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Roy,
Beautiful soul, poet and friend. I apologize for being neglectful in reviewing this past year. I hope all is well with you. As true to your signature style you create such incredible beauty and emotions with your art. I am always moved as I know many others are. Your talent far exceeds the majority of us here, but in your modest and humble way you would say thank you but recognize we all have a voice inside us, some are just more articulate. This work is so very emotive. What adoration, what sadness. I am moved. Best wishes with the contest. It is Friday, I have naught a six. Best wishes with the contest. Please stay safe and well

Much respect
Jimi


 Comment Written 07-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    Hey, Jimi. Thank you. Been gone a while, hence the tardy reply. Not sure if fully back, but hope the motivation is strong.
    Always good to hear from you, dearest friend.
    have a great day.
    RG
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Hello RGstar,
Nice piece of Biographical Poetry beautifully depicting its theme!
Wording is impressive, and perfectly matching the theme.
Smooth and musical flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The last two lines, picture and sound effects are particularly noteworthy.


 Comment Written 15-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
    Thank you, RP. Wishing you the best as life goes forward.
    My best wishes, and thank you, for all.
    RGstar

reply by RPSaxena on 19-Jun-2017
    RGstar, Most Welcome!
    ~RP
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Hello RG,

I like how respectful you are with your mother. You have a gift and talent to rhyme. I think you pay attention to details. I don't like to write rhyming poetry but it fits you well the rhymes fit the cadence like a sweet dance. Well done, my friend.


 Comment Written 15-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 17-Jun-2017
    Thank you, Gypsy, keep up the good work. My best to you going forward.
    RG
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