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Hello again, my friend: I had promised myself that I would not read your work until Sunday so that I would have some six star reviews for your work. I feel guilty now that I did not wait. This poem is a son's mother's story told so well that there's an aching feeling in the tone of each perfectly selected word. There is so much deep admiration, love and sorrow expressed that it caused the bleeding of my heart for her, for you. She was a young girl when she became wife and mother and was so undeserving of so much unhappiness and pain.
The below two stanzas gave me such a clear picture of the misery. The reveal of the young age (chosen as a youth for the full control of her and the molding of her) and the dress, sequined, turquoise blue but the rain purple eroding all she knew, saving pennies for carrots, pain for stew. Oooooohhhhhh my, my, my! how touching yet so marvelously explained. Whether it was because there was no money given for fear she would escape as all victims should, or none given or provided as a part of the abuse, I know it all too well. That next stanza I felt and remember watching the clock, counting the tick tocks, fearing the time of his return to home, hoping everything is just right so as to not set him off. False encore -- YES -- that faked happy to see him. Then cancer came - savior - in pity's name. This reminded of the many times that I did not even want to go home, when I was not home. I eagerly awaited a nervous break down or death, anything not to be there anymore with that kind of total unhappiness and loathing. Anything would have been better.
WOW! This poem has left me speechless and so sad for her yet I do know this pain, this life so well. The voice that speaks is that of my oldest boy who saw what you did as a boy. His poetic voice was very strong also and he shared it in his poetry. Sadly though he is no longer with us because of the same horrible man, his so called father. God allowed me to escape that fate. Oh, but I do have the stories to tell.
This poem is remarkable. I cannot wait until you publish.
At sixteen, 'him' wed... her dress, sequined, turquoise blue
But purple fell the rain, eroding all she knew
A land far away, pale, flowered curtains for view
Saving pennies for the carrots... pain for the stew
Tick, tock, ticks the clock, she'd count the seconds to four
"Hi, Ho," fear he brings, she lays his slippers by the door
The lock, slowly, turns, we'd feign greetings-- false encore
The beanstalk, no more for climbing...thoughts sealed once more
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2017 |
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2017
You brought a little moissture to my eye, dear T for who more than you could read into the write so well with exact precision, but one who knows the feeling the inuendoes, the act, the smiles, the caution and the pain, for nowhere is there love to find, except pity and hope.
Please do not put six stars on these, much as you find them giving, for knowing you read fills my heart, and also knowing you read as you might excerpts of a book, gauges the intrest for me of what the book may hold. You honor me, thank you so much, and when I have more time, I will be looking at some of the individual poems you mentioned in your portfolio...not tit for tat, but with genuine interest towards one who has shown interest in my steps forward, so is the interest for hers the same way.
Thank you my dear friend.
My best wishes.
RG
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Hello there, RD
Long time no see :)
Back now I hope for a while.
Oh boy, what a read! I admire your ability to write with such beauty.
It's such a terribly sad set of circumstance for both your dear mother and for you, of course, RD.
Interestingly, your mother had gone through so very much and must have been a saint, not to have been vengeful and full of hate. What amazing strength she had.
And to think that you too, come across as such a mild mannered well-balanced human being.
I'm so sorry your dear mum has since passed away, RD.
Thinking of you, my dear friend.
A sure winning entry I feel :)
Much love to you
tracey xxx
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
My dearest, Trimple, can't say how happy I am to se you here and posting again. Sorry for the delay, not sure if really back but will ease in and see how I feel. Goosd to see you writing, dear friend. My very best.
RG x
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reply by trimple on 28-Aug-2017
Hello there, RG
This writing bug has a habit of behaving like a cicada, by burying itself at times. :)
I hope I'm back, but more so, hope that you too will continue to delight and inspire all of us here on FS.
Much love to you
tracey
hugs xxx
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
You always inspire me dear friend.
Have a great day
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reply by trimple on 28-Aug-2017
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Roy,
Beautiful soul, poet and friend. I apologize for being neglectful in reviewing this past year. I hope all is well with you. As true to your signature style you create such incredible beauty and emotions with your art. I am always moved as I know many others are. Your talent far exceeds the majority of us here, but in your modest and humble way you would say thank you but recognize we all have a voice inside us, some are just more articulate. This work is so very emotive. What adoration, what sadness. I am moved. Best wishes with the contest. It is Friday, I have naught a six. Best wishes with the contest. Please stay safe and well
Much respect
Jimi
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Comment Written 07-Jul-2017 |
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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
Hey, Jimi. Thank you. Been gone a while, hence the tardy reply. Not sure if fully back, but hope the motivation is strong.
Always good to hear from you, dearest friend.
have a great day.
RG
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