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The Piper


Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The Piper, part 17"

Young Adult Fantasy

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May 1
 
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Haha, I love your description of waking up, it's so fun to read. I understand why he is nervous about Sheba but as she told him already she didn't eat him when she had the chance so he should just relax. :) Ah, Piper sure knows how to start difficult topics at the worst possible time. Finally, some answers are coming, cool.


 Comment Written 01-Feb-2020



reply by the author on 01-Feb-2020
    Hi May 1,
    Thank you for the comments regarding g waking. Yes, Piper is still a bit nervous about Sheba. I guess waking up next to the wolf that didn't eat you in your sleep, but is salivating over the cooking food could be a bit unnerving. Maybe when he's more awake he'll relax. Thanks for the great analysis.
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kathleenspalding
 
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Imaginative, well written, and easy to follow even though this is the first I've read of your book. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Love the wolf, and the way you are introducing the tearing people apart story. Well done!


 Comment Written 19-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing. I am happy to hear you like the wolf.

reply by kathleenspalding on 19-Jun-2017
    You're welcome :-)
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Curly Girly
 
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Piper is impressed with Redd Lief's surprising strength and sharp talons when he skinned a rabbit with bare hands. To be honest, Piper is a little afraid of him too. Redd Lief does not want Sheba to tell too much, perhaps if she did, Piper would become too fearful.
This is well-written chapter presents an interesting story about Faes.
Nicole


 Comment Written 19-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
    Hi Nicole,
    Thank you for the positive review and your analysis of the story. I appreciate you stopping by to read and review. Debi
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Heather Knight
 
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This is very well written and the dialogues are very natural.
I also like the choice of names.
The story is original and the characters intriguing.
Thanks for sharing your work. Keep writing.


 Comment Written 19-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the kind comments and encouragement. I appreciate it.
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F. Wehr3
 
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This is exceptional. Your first two intro paragraphs are absolutely amazing. Thanks for continuing your story. I'm looking forward to more.

From the looks of things you didn't eat much while I was gone. --Suggest a comma after things.

Take care,
Russell


 Comment Written 18-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Hi Russell,
    Thank you for the wonderful six star rating. Thank you for those words every author loves to hear--"I am looking forward to more." I added the comma as suggested. Thank you for the close read. Debi
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Pam (respa)
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-Another good chapter in the saga of Piper.
-You give a lot of good detail about many of
the people and what has happened, Debi.
-I like how you begin with Piper dreaming
about playing his flute.
-I am very glad Rupert is okay and healing well;
it will be nice to have him back in the story.
-Summerstorm is back and gives us the update
and a few other things as he prepares dinner.
-That causes Piper to inquire about what Burkehart
had told him about the Fae; I'm sure Summerstorm
was glad hear that mentioned!
-The ending is good, and leaves Piper and the reader
wondering what more there is to tell.


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Hi Pam,
    Thank you so much for the six stars! Thank you for continuing to follow the story. I've been out of town for a couple weeks so i was delayed in getting this one posted. I appreciate the detailed analysis of the story. Debi

reply by Pam (respa) on 19-Jun-2017
    You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and comments, Debi. I enjoy the story.
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rspoet
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Exceptional
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An excellent beginning to this chapter as we
get a feel for Piper's love of music. Since the story revolves
around Piper's unusual musical gift, this reads very well
Then his sense of smell brings him back to the reality of his situation
The exchange between Redd-Leif, Sheba and Piper is nicely done
as we begin to learn a bit about elves and Redd-Leif in particular
An excellent touch at the end with Piper reaching for his flute
his security, his link to his grandfather, his link to music
and his link to mankind
Very nicely done
RS


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Hi RS,
    I am grateful for the wonderful six star rating, and that you keep coming back to read the next chapter. I've been out of town for two weeks, so it took a while to get this one posted. Thank you for the insightful review. I appreciate the comments about the music and the conversation between the characters. You are so right about Piper and his flute. Debi
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I haven't read any of this before but was immediately struck by the easy conversation between Piper and the Fae, which gives substance to these mythical and mysterious people. Splendid scene of skinning the rabbit to illustrate the power of faerie and a hint at the end that, with greater knowledge, Piper may lose something of his fear and have it replaced by understanding. The telling of tales that tread these borders of fairyland is a noble art. They contain much wisdom, as your profile quote from Einstein suggests.


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Thank you for this wonderful review and your insightful remarks. I appreciate you taking the time to jump into the story to read and review, and give your perspective of the story.
Comment by
Rasmine
 
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I really liked this, except for the skinning of the rabbit -- I fast forwarded my reading. If I had to kill my own meat, think I'd be a vegetarian. LOL!

I found my story, 'Piper', I'll put it in after I finish with 'Southington Stabber.' I'll change the title.

:D


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    I agree, if I had to kill my own meat, I would be vegetarian, too. I am pleased to hear you like the story.
    I look forward to reading your Piper story.
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apky
 
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I also love the sound of rain on my bedroom window when I sleep. No idea what I dream about once I fall asleep to the rhythm.

I'd daresay (dare say - two words) you are starving.

You weaved a great chapter here again.

Best,
Apky


 Comment Written 17-Jun-2017



reply by the author on 18-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the encouragement and the suggestion. I appreciate you stopping in to read and review..
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