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Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello, my friend,

Wow, this is an amazing free verse. You are so good with this form. I like the metaphor of the grapes. It's sad... about a lover or wife dying of cancer...I think. Nicely done.


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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much Gypsy, I appreciate your kind comments and overwhelming rating
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Mitchell. Jesus. My words are lost. Vanished within the sorrow of those final stanzas, those three tender, excruciating billows of grief that roll over me - you can't possibly be as ageless as your verse exudes...

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 Comment Written 16-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Dawn, thank you so much for a lovely review

reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 16-Jul-2017
    You are most welcome.
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YNWA,
The more I read your work, the more I appreciate the true art of poetry. You, to me, remind me of A.E. Houseman. The emotional and physiological part of your being deals with such a subject as death and its observation in a most earthing way. The enigma and ambiguity of an assured expectation is a wrestling for all poets to express its process in concrete visions. You are quite exceptional.

Your fan
Jimi


 Comment Written 16-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    My goodness, I am flattered, before I joined FS 7 months ago, no one had ever seen anything I had written, let alone family and friends, I just enjoyed writing and didn't think it was worthy of a bigger audience than myself, I joined to read other people's writing....my word, let me tell you, the standards are incredible here and it took me a couple of months to get the courage to post anything, just so I could gage what people thought and help me improve.
    To have you say something like this overwhelms me, thank you so much Jimi.

reply by jlsavell on 16-Jul-2017
    I have been here since 2008 and there are many great talents but few exceptional ones. You are one of the exceptional. Truly. I have Poet envy!!!
    All poetry are subjects which have gone before, so often it becomes trite and dull, but still executed beautifully, yours is quite different. It gives a fresh unique spin to life and all its facets. Keep writing, I will keep reading.

    Jimi
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Hello my dear friend, wow! I found this to be absolutely worthy of a 6 star rating. I love the way that you paint this picture it is engraved my mind very vividly. You use excellent adjectives and verbs to really describe a clear setting. Great alliteration throughout. Thank you for sharing this.With love, Lala


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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much Lala, what a wonderful review and overwhelming rating
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Hey Mitchell, Possibly one of the best I've read of you so far. This has so many interpretations I shudder to stop shivering from the images blasted into my imagination as I read the words. THIS is what poetry is all about for me. A blinding blast of words incorporated into steadfast visions of a moment in your mind. True word art at the very least. You get my six cause I got the pleasure of reading something that felt read and satisfying for this reader! xoxo deborah


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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Deborah, this is the reason I write, if one person can feel how I did when I wrote it, it is all worthwhile, thank you so much, you have made my day.
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Very picturesque, your words. Flowing and going in between consciousness and someplace else. Your mind wonders wonderfully - as expressed through this poem. It feels like it is in between - which it is. Nice work of art!

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 Comment Written 16-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much for a great review
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Asyraf N. Jamsari
 
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This is a very nicely written poem. First of all the picture is really pretty and complements the writing. Well constructed and well expressed. I really like the last stanza, it really got me pondering. Nice choice of words. Keep up the good work.


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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much for a wonderful review and humbling rating
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YNWA, this is a lovely poem, but I am confused about the subject matter. I think this could be up for personal interpretation. Very well written and I like the image and imagery. Thanks and if you have time, advise on subject matter. Thanks, and I would recommend this. Theresa.


 Comment Written 16-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much Theresa, for a wonderful review and humbling rating.
    It is about a lady who is dying and her partner at her hospital bedside, he is watching her die as he remembers the lovely time they had together, before she got sick.

reply by thonnigford09 on 16-Jul-2017
    I wanted to make sure!! I love this. Thanks!!! Theresa.
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I like your love poem and see that there is some relating it to the ancient story of Eve in the Garden. Aside for that, I appreciate the lines grinding neurons lesions, breath lowing furrows.


 Comment Written 16-Jul-2017



reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Thank you so much for a wonderful review and fantastic rating
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Tier V. King
 
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Oh my my my my! Mitchell, I just do not understand how you so consistently do this. You make this extraordinary excellence, this brilliance, this genius of your seem so effortlessly easy. Does it all always just fall out onto the page or do you ever have to think about it and edit for a while? I wonder because each and every time I read your work I am so amazed. It does not fall together for me this way. When at first i prayed for the ability to write poetry for my healing those poems simply fell out as if given to me. Sure I have written some new poetry but it take real effort on my part these days.

You have a true gift, Mitchell. You must publish a book. I am telling you I will be one of the first ones to buy it. This poem is perfect, like all of the others, a gem...


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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2017
    Tier, believe me, it does not fall onto the page, that is why I can't produce writing every day, sometimes more than one a day like some of the fantastic writers on this site.
    You always have at a loss for words with your unbelievable reviews, I'm lucky to have you as a FS friend.
    Thank you so much

reply by Tier V. King on 16-Jul-2017
    You are amazing!
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