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Telemarketer meets his match

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Hi there,

Congratulations on the win for this one. I can picture the whole thing very vividly. I have a friend who keeps cold callers on the line for ages and then after an hour or so simply says 'Nah' and hangs up...

Not that it matters but I did spot this-

"Heaven's sake! Don't wish that on me. You're talking hearing aids, hair loss, wheel chair, arthritis so bad you can't even cut Jello, eventually a nursing home. - needs closing speech marks here.

that would attract a "boy toy." - toy boy?

All the best
G


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
    You're right. I check it out on the net. It is toyboy and it's all one word capitalized. Thanks for catching this and the closing quotation.
    A friend sounds cool -- or maybe cruel for getting up hopes. :-)
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The Do Not Call bit took care of most of my junk calls. I kinda miss giving a derisive
"Humph!" and slamming the phone down. Winner, huh? Fine by me. Well-crafted chat.


 Comment Written 09-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2017
    Thanks, LIJ. I now have an unlisted number and no problems at all.
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


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    A lovely surprise. :-)
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Loved this old lady. My only complaint is she didn't elaborate more in the second half switch. She deserves to live to a hundred and four, and you deserve all the best in the competition.


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    Thanks for the six, and I appreciated your valid comment. :-)
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This is exactly what they deserve. Make them want to hang up on you. I've given this considerable thought on how to do it but do not want to take the time. This was hilarious. Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2017
    Thanks, Dallas. What a horrible way to make a living.

reply by DALLAS01 on 10-Aug-2017
    I can really relate. During a low period my life , after a divorce, I was forced to take on a second job. By day I was a supervisor for a collection agency and in the evenings and weekends, I did telemarketing in the same office. I was selling $400. magazine contracts to people I knew couldn't afford it. Talk about compromising yourself. It was a nightmare.
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HA! YOu got my vote on this contest. You played the player, good for you. I enjoyed how you baited the caller and toyed with him the whole time. Good fun and a good read. Good luck in the contest!


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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
    Thank you, Thesis, for your enthusiastic review. := )
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This exchange would be a lot of fun and make having to suffer through one of those telemarketing calls a bit more bearable. My son sometimes gets them going.


 Comment Written 03-Aug-2017


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    Good for him. Bad for the salesman who hopes to make a commission. Sigh...
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This was fun. There was a post I saw that said when a telemarketer calls I'm going to hand the phone over to my three year old and tell him it's Santa. lol. It's great. My brother was a telemarketer for a long time. You couldn't pay me enough.


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
    Thanks for the six, Meghan. I wonder how a telemarketer would react to acting as Santa? LOL
    Love the story.
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Haha, good stuff. I wanna do something like this one day. Just talk someone's ears off after they've called and woken me up.

Very creative entry. Good luck.


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
    To some extent this is based on truth. Except I waxed philosophical about my metaphysical POV. He wouldn't give up and I tired of the game. But it sort of made my day.
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Nice, Shari! I enjoyed this piece. Oh, what I wouldn't give to turn the tables on a telemarketer. It's not as bad as it used to be with the do not call lists, but this brought back memories.

Maybe, but I have a wife and six children."--Just need opening speech mark.

Good luck!
Russell


 Comment Written 02-Aug-2017


reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
    Thanks for the sixer and correction, Russell. I've heard that the marketers have a fixed speech and if you interrupt it, they get lost. LOL
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