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Whaddaya gonna do?

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kiwigirl2821
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You know I believe I've driven or ridden every mile of that Route 66 highway. I don't ever remember seeing this cafe ... lol. What I really liked was the ending and how the Chief and Sheriff end up in a compromise. This was a wonderful read for me tonight Lee. Thank you. xoxo Kiwi


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It's a great little story, Lee. But I feel like all the setting about what went on in Rusty's could have been condensed. I'm glad for Billy Ray Two Feather's loyalty to Rusty's but I find myself more interested in the story of how the Pole became an Apache.

Favorite line here:
"The desert sunrise orange'd the horizon. " (But is the the apostrophe necessary?)


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017


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This author has once again demonstrated his seemingly endless power in delivering writing that grips beyond GORRILLA GLUE and pulls more smiles than Christmas morning! His imagination, creative dialog and character creation is simply world class. HIS GRAYNESS


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017


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This is a fun piece- a trip down memory "route". It was easy for me to relate. Structurally, the story line pick up earlier. The events steadily build to the point when the sheriff joins the old Indian up on the sign. Here the reader needs more. Is the top of the build: "next comes after now"? or "what do I tell my ivy-league girl"? The fact the Indian is Polish is funny, but leaves the reader hanging... or did I miss a Polish joke?
The piece is a fun read and best of all a great trip into the not so past ... past. Thanks.


 Comment Written 21-Aug-2017


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It's all in the reading, Lee. Each can only see the ear or the leg or the trunk. Back when everyone wasn't bound to everything by smartphones and flatscreen TVs
we could all be different, be ourselves. A semitic Indian chief from Warsaw? Why not?
Excellent read


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
    Don't care about smartphones and flatscreens, Red. We're still just as blind. Thanks. Peace, Lee
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Being in the middle is a good place to start your life can go either way like the chief says. Always improvise like the chief did if things don't go ones way.


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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
    Thanks a lot, CRW. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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The middle is a good description of your story. I had the feeling that Billy Ray Two Feathers had one foot in the past and on in the present. This is a very well told story.


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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
    Thank you, Thomas. Whenever I drift right or left, I try to keep the middle within arm's reach. Too easy to get lost out on the fringes. So says Coyote. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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I do believe you just created a metaphor--you wily dog, you.
Shit, now I have to go back and read all your ramblings to see what I missed.
Thanks for everything
Gene


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reply by the author on 21-Aug-2017
    Thanks so much, Gene. But Coyote warned you to read from the beginning. I hope the beginning does not disappoint. Thanks again. Peace, Lee
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I think you should have started this second part where the Sheriff went to get Two Feathers. The first part was too long and this part too short. That is just my opinion for what it's worth. It's a good story about how we really do not like changes in our lives, but prefer things remain the same for our convenience. Good Job. Nancy


 Comment Written 20-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
    Thanks again, Nancy. I agonized over where to bisect this story. You may be right. But I opted for a less balanced story on purpose. Part 1 is about the past. Part 2 is about the present. We all have much more past.

    Thanks again. Peace, Lee

reply by nancy_e_davis on 20-Aug-2017
    That is logical, but the first part led up to the entrance of Two Feathers as well.

reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
    Good point. It was a difficult decision. Perhaps I felt 'symmetry' would be too convenient . . . too expected.
    Truth is, after its run on FS, the story will be restored to a single entity. L
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No errors that I could see. I liked the symbolism; triple symbolism, actually.

This story did bring back memories. I probably haven't driven on route 66, though other roads changed in the same manner. Even with my first few used cars, I remember driving from state to state over one and a half and two lane state routes. I'd have to weave through the main streets of small and large towns while trying not to become lost as route signs twisted one way, then another.

There were state routes in Virginia and West Virginia, sometimes one and a half lanes with a mountain on one side and long drop-offs on the other - no rails or even markings at the edges.

For meals, I'd see almost nothing but small diners - watching for the ones truck drivers used. They were thought to be the best. Right now there is only one such diner in my home town.

Inside, I'd order a hamburger dinner. The hamburger would be shaped by hand and thrown on a real grill. French fries were hand cut and crisp along with freshly cooked green beans and homemade rolls mixed by hand. No pre-shaped or frozen foods were used. Even the chili was homemade. Shopping centers and super-stores were things of the future. The same with gas stations, usually two or three pumps, max, without stores attached - though there was often a small store nearby. Motels were mostly small and family owned, not franchised.

Yes, Lee, a lot of memories.
Charlie


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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2017
    Thank you, Charlie. You can't beat homemade chili, or home fries. I often use diners as settings for my stories. The people speak plain, the food is recognizable, and there's always something good on the juke box.
    I'm glad you feel the same.

    Peace, Lee
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