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Short story - 290 words

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Comment by

Brett Matthew West

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Quite an army (of rats) you conquered in this well written story. Fifteen of them in all.

Story is well told and throws in a touch of humor along the way for good measure.

Should make an interesting entry into this contest.

Comment Written 27-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Thank you Brett:)

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Mrs Happy Poet

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Hello my friend I think I would have been joining you and your daughter screaming on the couch I don't like mice either glad you got your husband to put down the traps it is the least he could do after causing the problem I enjoyed good luck regards Jill

Comment Written 26-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Thank you Jill:)

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Sandra du Plessis

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A very well-written story. They can become a unwanted army in the house. We have trouble with them in the roof. It sounds like racing horses running up and down overhead at times.

Comment Written 26-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

In the roof? What kind of roof do you have? Thanks for the review:)

reply by Sandra du Plessis on 28-Aug-2017

Just a ceiling between the tile roof and the rooms.

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Oh yes. They used to get in our walls and we could hear them - yuck.

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Irish Rain

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Fifteen!!! Oh my goodness!! I hate killing the little critters, but even one, and next thing you know, you have a colony!!! This is a great story, awesome entry....and I LOVE that fireplace!!! Blessings....

Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Thank you Irish:)

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robyn corum

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ARE YOU SERIOUS???!!

I would have moved. hahahaha! I despise those little creatures! (Though, I admit, I hate snakes even worse...) This was a super true story and a fun one. Thanks and good luck!

Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

I hate snakes too - they scare the bejesus out of me - lol. Thanks Robyn:)

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Rasmine

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Hello,
The poor mice! Maybe you could have caught them and put them way outside? One time my cat hunted in my apartment and caught a baby mouse. I struggled with it and finally got it out of my cat's jowls. She didn't want to give it up. Now, I know they are natural hunters. It wasn't that -- the lady above me had arsenic put down behind her stove -- I didn't want that poison inside my cat. (I put the baby mouse outside for the feral cats; hope it wasn't poisonous!)
Hey, TC, I'm not a member right now for another month but I'll still review prose -- not poetry so much unless it's spooky. :P

Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Thanks so much:)

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BeasPeas

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I love animals, but it's ideal if the outside animals stay outside and not inside. One mouse is one thing, but a bunch of mice must be pretty scary. Good job and I wish you much luck in the contest. Marilyn

Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017

Thank you Marilyn:)

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MizKat

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The story you wrote about the mice was very interesting. I could just feel a mouse jumping on me. I know if that really happened I would have probably fainted. Just thinking of them bothers me.

Kat

Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017

Thank you Kat. I hate mice. They are nasty.

reply by MizKat on 24-Aug-2017

I don't like them either. Just thinking about them bothers me. Kat

Comment by

honeytree

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Very interesting to read
We feel for the mouse
I guess as well but
they can't roam around the house
for health reasons and they could harm someone.
They get into the food and that's not good, they carry germs.

Honey tree

Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017

They are nasty little critters - can't stand them. Thanks so much for the review:)

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giraffmang

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Hi there,

Nothing like a pest or vermin invasion to spoil a nice evening. My mum has this problem at the moment... nasty little buggers peeing over everything. Urgh.

Well written little piece.
All the best
G

Comment Written 24-Aug-2017

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017

They are nasty little buggers. I hope your Mum gets rid of them soon. Thanks for the review:)

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