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The Music of Stillness


reflection after a service

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dragonpoet
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Sounds like a soul of a body buried discussing maybe the lack of crowds at his funeral or the sparse welcoming crew in heaven into eternity.

Keep writing

dp


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    I will. Thank you. And your interpretation is correct.

reply by dragonpoet on 28-Aug-2017
    Glad to here I interpreted it correctly.

    dp
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smileycloud
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beautiful and it is also gently sad
the words are very expressive and say so much in such a little space
perhaps like we would like our life could do
have a smiley day


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    I will now. Thank you.
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There is no escaping death, regardless of who you are or how rich you are. We all die. It's how you perceive death. I like the way you do, it's such a sweet, gentle way. I've thought of death for a while now, and really do not fear it at all. I have too many loved ones waiting on the other side. I loved your poem, it had a softness about it that I enjoyed. :) Sandra x


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    This pretty much explains perfectly how I felt. Thank you.
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YNWA
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Hi Victor
This is such a wonderful read, capturing the image brilliantly, very sublime, almost charmed in its presentation.
Nice echoing of sounds throughout, It's kind of surreal almost, very dreamlike and impressionistic.
The imagery painted just draws the reader in and puts us there.
Absolutely fantastic.
Mitchell


 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    You're far too kind, but I am grateful.
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Not sure that I'd be too worried about pulling a crowd once I was prairie dust, but each to their own.
I contemplate death a LOT but have never looked at it in a serene, peaceful embrace such as this.

LOVED.

I have a new take on death. Many thanks LOL

Some good six for you before you go.

I must go and cry now
For eternity LOL

Your Hangar







 Comment Written 28-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    Awe, if only I were worth it. Thank you.

reply by closetpoetjester on 28-Aug-2017
    Aww honey, don't be like that.

    And you're very welcum X

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2017
    They buried me in my original packaging.
    And I plug in too. And spin around. And vibrate. And my girth is sufficient. Just believe me once. Cum dig me up before I'm reincarnated with less, uh...umph.

reply by closetpoetjester on 28-Aug-2017
    Aha...so you want to be sexhumed? hahaha

    Typical!
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We must be on the same page since I wrote of peace today also. You took in the prairie and I took in the sky. "The wind, as gentle as a rose." Yes. I understand that also and it is just as sweet.


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Thank you.
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I like your poem very much and will share it with a close friend, part Indian, who loves the Indian writer, Sherman Alexie who writes in a similar vein, and is becoming well known.


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Thank you. How very nice of you.
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I like this poem. The images are varied.the crowds, the acorn, the winds, the prairie...the splattering rain...he, himself, observing the things around him. The sentences are short but strong, deep and meaningful.


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Thank you.

reply by dominador G Robles on 27-Aug-2017
    You are welcome.
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Is that a bison Victor? I don't know whether I am reading this poem right but this is my take on things. You are putting yourself as the bison, a male who has done his duty of servicing and now grazes in the wild with not a worry in the world.

dip

Wow my interpretation is so far off its not funny Sorry about that. Now I know the true interpretation I read this in a totally different light. Thanks for sharing


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    I understand that view Dip, but I am being laid in the ground.

reply by DR DIP on 27-Aug-2017
    what threw me was the photograph of the bison

reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    yes, that makes sense. I just thought the one Bison on the plains might represent the aloneness of the grave without saying it.
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A wonderful reflection of a burial as though from the point of view of the one who has passed away. It's a bit melancholy, as would be expected after leaving this world, but a bit expectant as well, if that makes sense.

I really enjoyed your message.
Take care,
Rhonda


 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017



reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017
    Yes, it makes sense. It was sort of like that for me. Thank you.
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