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Waiting For The Whisper

free verse faith poem

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honeytree

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Great way how these
words have been written
Jesus with loving way
takes care of us all in a special way.
He loves us all we are his children.

Honey tree

Comment Written 12-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017

Thank you Annie for the wonderful gift of six stars!

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Beautiful the underlined meaning of this. One sense the knowing and the realisation of time and the not knowing of when, but that wish to complete.
Lovely write.
Good luck with this, dear Teresa.
My best wishes.
RGstar

Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017

Thank you RG:)

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Alcreator Litt Dear

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This speaks the waiting for the whisper from Jesus Christ when He will come and speak it is your turn come and the poet will go hand-in-hand with Jesus to the real home Heaven; I liked.

Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017

Thank you so much:)

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I can read two different ways to take this poem. One is the love for Jesus and the anticipation and willing to join him in heaven, for there is no fear of death. Second is a sorrowful soul that through faith, wants to leave this world and go to heaven where they will overcome their sorrow after death.
good penning
good luck in the contest

lulube

Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

It is both ways for me. The love of Jesus and also when I am depressed, I just want to leave this world and go to the next. Thanks so much:)

reply by Lulube on 10-Sep-2017

welcome

lulube

reply by Lulube on 10-Sep-2017

well there you go! you portrayed how you felt in two ways to me anyways.

lulube

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Mrs Happy Poet

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Oh yes my friend this is well written and indeed very beautiful nobody knows when they will be called but I like to think it will be a gentle whisper we'll done regards Jill

Comment Written 09-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Thank you Jill. I'm glad you think too it will be a whisper when we are called:)

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A lovely free verse poem of faith Teresa. I liked the dialogue- very refreshing. A nice uplifting piece for the contest.

Well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet

Comment Written 08-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Thank you Janet. Much appreciated:)

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Irish Rain

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Just lovely Miss Teresa. A whisper we're all waiting for, though He can certainly take His time, on my part, ha ha. Beautiful entry, blessings...

Comment Written 08-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Thank you so much my friend:)

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This seems the speaker wants to die. Wants to be in Heaven and not on Earth. It also shows that the person believes in God and listens to the voice that says it is not time.

Good luck and keep writing

Joan

Comment Written 08-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Thank you Joan:)

reply by dragonpoet on 10-Sep-2017

You're welcome.

Joan

reply by dragonpoet on 10-Sep-2017

You're welcome.

Joan

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rama devi

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Sweet spiritual faith poem. The tone and tenor are sublime. Nice use of dialog. Good flow and style, with lines sculpted by formatting.

A few minor optional suggestions:

Waiting ...
W(w)aiting
for the whisper of Heaven

*Earth should be capped when refereed to as a proper noun:
where e(E)arth ends
and eternity begins

(nice alliteration and consonance of E there)

*

"It's not your time," He said

this speech tag is superfluous, as the reader already knows who speaks. Suggest trimming

Very nice internal rhyme, alliteration of W and A and flow here:

Fly me through the sky
on angel's wings
above the clouds
where Heaven's gate awaits

Nice voicing:

"Follow me always, my child,
walk with me hand-in-hand,
cling to me in sinking sand,
call on me, I am always near,
in time, I'll call your name"

Enjoyed the uplifting overtones!

Love,
rd

Comment Written 07-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Thank you once again for help with my poem. You are truly the best reviewer here.

reply by rama devi on 09-Sep-2017

Aw, shucks! Thanks for your gracious response and ocmments, dear. :-))

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Oh wow yes and a wonderfully free verse which I think is always good for faith poems. Nicley done as God responds...not yet but soon. Love the content

Comment Written 07-Sep-2017

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2017

Thank you my friend:)

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