Take Your Burdens to Jesus
This is a 5-7-5 poetry writing
Pays: One point.
90 member cents
Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

3-6-9 Poem
Deadline: In 4 Days

5-7-5 Poetry Writing
Deadline: Nov 23rd

Share A Story In A Poem
Deadline: Nov 30th

2-4-2 Poetry
Deadline: Dec 2nd

Nonet Poetry Contest
Deadline: Dec 4th


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
A Halloween with Stephen King


A Halloween Poem Contest Entry

  111 total reviews 
Comment by
michaelcahill
Level 1 Pro
rumours and innuendos
rumours of innuendos
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Well, I just can't deny it. This is as clever as hell. LOL

I cracked up at Thanksgiving nodding off after all the Tryptophan from the over indulgence in turkey. HAAAHAHA!

Great depictions of each holiday, spot on I felt. Your rhythm and rhyme have become second nature now and you just spin the stories smooth as glass. I remember when you used to say you weren't a poet. NOW you have me thinking that. LOL mike


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
sunnilicious
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  197
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Well, this is a wonderfully written poem there Dean. Idk about the King inspiration. This is much nicer like a Rockwell Halloween. Anyways, I remember him on a tv interview, a few years back. He was a regular man. A teacher that sits in a home office and writes. Normal home life much adoration for his with wife. And his wife always finishes his novels. I'm not sure if it's last chapter or last page. Still, nice poetic commemoration.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
Poetic Friend
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  179
Review Stars
  Rank:  171
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Dean, Dean, Dean, I expected nothing less than stellar work from your pen, and boy, did you deliver. I was actually looking forward to you Halloween poem because you are the Poetic King of Horror.

I love this story poem and the personification of the holidays and all their glitz and glamour. This poem reminds me of the movie "The Nightmare Before Christmas".

I have not read any of the other entires for this contest, but I think this poem will give the other poets a lot of competition.

Bravo, Dean!



 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
DR DIP
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  552
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
What a fantastic entry in the contest Dean i love the way you have personified those festivities. It reminds me of a joke where there was a meeting with all the organs of the body to discuss who was the most important organ.
The brain , The heart, the lungs, the liver, the pancreas etc all staked their claim and reasons.
Finally the arsehole stood up and said "I'm the most important"
Well all the organs killed themselves laughing with this statement.

So the arsehole was deeply offended and decided to close up and walked away dejected
After a few days the brain went fuzzy, the heart stopped the lungs shut down like all the other organs began to.
SO THE MORAL OF THE STORY?
IT'S VERY IMPORTANT TO BE AN ARSEHOLE!

Now back to your wonderful poem lol

dip


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
jenintorre
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  125 (+1)
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  127
Review Stars
  Rank:  167
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Fantastic poem. I particularly loved the line. "Stephen King watched from his mansion in Bangor". What a fabulously original and clever idea with great illustrations. Obviously a winner in the competition.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
Sandra du Plessis
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  7
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  98
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  3
 

#7 Ranked Poet

#3 Ranked Reviewer
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
A very well-written Halloween poem. Only you and Stephen King can pull Halloween celebrations off and make it fun for everyone Even the scary cats play along. Lol.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
Lucian Carter
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I've seen holiday figures personified. But here, you personify holidays. Easter, not the Easter Bunny, as a character is brilliant.

On top of that, fantastic writing. The words trip off the tongue. The rhymes are sublime and the bells and whistles are gorgeous too. An instant favorite in the contest. This will be hard to top.

Happy Halloween to you too.


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
2017 Poet of the Year
Barb Hensongispsaca
Barb Henson
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  8
Author Rating For Short Works
  Rank:  169
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  24
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  90
 

#8 Ranked Poet
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Oh, you reeled me in with this one and I truly love the light and lively verse, not scary but one for the family. Very nicely done in flow and rhyme as always. This could be a new Halloween favorite.lol


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
rama devi
May All Beings Be Happy
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  52 (+1)
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  112
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
How clever to personify holidays. I don't think I've seen that done before. Well done! The opening drew me in. Poor Halloween, like a bug in a jar! The scansion is forced on that line, but there is not getting around it and it sounds fine read aloud as metrical substitution.
Fantastic rhymes. Well timed phrasing. Good imagery and tone.

NOTES:

Spag:

Valentine(')s crooned, "Please leave her alone.

This is a funny poetic portrait:
Fourth of July soon puffed out his chest
loudly proclaiming that he was the best.







Good G-words:
"Old graveyards and ghouls--gaunt ghosts are your thing.



Witty--and fun rhymes too:

Thanksgiving belched then soon started to snore.
Halloween knew she was being ignored.
"ALL of us matter," she shouted in anger.
Stephen King watched from his Mansion in Bangor.

Stephen King has forced scansion, but he can't help how is name is pronounced.

Scansion force here--not as smoothly--suggest revising:

"Here, put these on," the King of horror ordered.


BTW: cornered and ordered--great slant rhyme!



LOL:
Easter dressed up like a hippie, quite groovy.


Great slant rhymes here too:

Once the holidays had donned their disguises
they went trick -or- treating; joy spread like a virus.
Everyone loved it; "Can we do this again?"
Valentine's asked as chocolate dripped down her chin.

Good closing summation and great rhymes too:L

Now, each Halloween from a Victorian Mansion,
the holidays gather to promote the expansion
of Halloween cheer throughout neighborhood streets.
Should you see them, be kind when they shout--"Trick or Treat!"

As always--fantastic presentation!!!


Happy Halloween (a month early)

Warmly, rd


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


Comment by
Nika2016
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  715
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
Yes...all of the Christians (like the holidays) try to kill Halloween every year in our little town..but it rises from ashes as joy in the hearts of the kids. Those of us who encourage it are the rascals...:) Yours is the best Halloween poem ever...I loved it...


 Comment Written 01-Oct-2017


  Previous Page  7 8 9 10  -11-  12  Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
A tourist in my own backyard
A quest


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy