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Ophelia, Under The Willow


Betrayal of the betrayed

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Treischel
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I read this through, then through again. Both time my reaction was -WoW! This is a masterpiece, worthy of the Bard himself. The piece was long, endearing, as it flowed light water over torrents of emotion. Then you notes too. Truely marvelous. The laid our your thoughts and process so well. I was delighted!


 Comment Written 18-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
    Hey, good to see you back my good friend...not so much the six stars, but you of all I quote as the master of forms, and I think you should take a class. Take time to see which area you would like to teach, then lead a class here. It would engross you with a fulfilling role as well give emphasis and learning to you as well the pupil. I would be recommending your class to all. Such is you value of knowledge in this circle.

    Thank you so much, my good friend, good to see you back, and I mean that from the bottom of my heart.

    RG
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Roy,

I finally got a chance to absorb in your enchanted world of Shakespeare. More specifically in the soul of Ophelia of Hamlet.

Although Macbeth is my favorite Shakespearean play, I thoroughly enjoyed your poem about Ophelia's character.

Your poem captures Ophelia's essence -- her beauty, her innocence, and her loyalty to family.

Your word choice/language takes the reader to the Elizabethan era, setting the mood and scenes for the time period's literature and flowery poetry language. I felt I was watching scenes from Hamlet on stage as I read your poetry. This poem will make good spark notes to understanding Ophelia's character.

The repetitions in the opening, middle and ending work well. I attempted to find a favorite line or stanza, but it was quite challenging because I love the poem in its entirety. Each line support the previous or subsequent lines.

Also, thank you for the author's note regarding Shakespeare. Although I am aware that Shakespeare often referenced flowers in his works, I never knew he was botanist. You learn something new every day.

Roy, you truly outdone your in this poem. This work of art deserved 100 stars, but sorry, I am only allowed to give 6.

Love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!


 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Stars matter little with this type of write, dear friend, for it commands some kind of feedback in which more giving.
    Thank you so much.
    Have a beautiful day.
    My best wishes.
    RG

reply by Poetic Friend on 01-Nov-2017
    OMG, I apologize. I thought I gave this poem six stars. Now, I can not change it. You are not allowed to change the rating to six stars after issuing an initial rating.

    I am so sorry, Roy.

reply by Poetic Friend on 01-Nov-2017
    Oh by the way, if your time permits, please write a poem about a character from MacBeth.

reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    I Will write another, the first poem after Christmas. I will choose Lady Mcbeth :) as I have already started on my next work, then must write for my yearly Christmas Entry.

reply by Poetic Friend on 01-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Roy. I am looking forward to reading Lady Macbeth poem, but please do not pressure yourself to write it.

    I am also looking forward to reading you Christmas poem. I don't think you can write a bad poem (if there is a such thing as a bad poem) if you tried.

    Enjoy the remainder of your week.

    On by the way, my mother was transferred to a rehabilitation hospital for physical therapy. Please keep her in your prayers.


reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
    My, Pleasure.
    I haden't planned for it, but will be a pleasure as requested by you, what better pleasure then?
    Would you prefer it in free verse or rhyme? Makes my decision easier. :)

reply by the author on 02-Nov-2017
    My strength and love sent to your mother at this stressfull and important period of the next round, dear author, of course in that prayer tonight. As to all of you sisters who share the burden, as to you, for your love and caring for her.

    My best to you all.
    RG
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I found the poem eloquent, yet difficult to read. It was the men in her life that caused her madness as they could not commit to show their love, but simply played games with her heart. Tragedy. Even though we are reading it at school with the kids, I find the ending disturbing as if Shakespeare needed to kill her in weakening the will of womankind, while elevating the men in the story...woman mad..woman dead.
It is beautiful in words and presentation...and seems as if you have a personal connection to the story/poem.
As a woman..I find the story itself depressing/exploiting...but you told it graciously.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Nika. Shakespeare's tragedies....as they go, this was one of the nicer deaths, often misunderstood. His emphasis is more on what seems be is not, as too the tragedy of it. Ophelia's parts were relatively small, in its series. Over the years painters have taken to paint Shakespeare's characters, and of course, Ophelia's image of which there has been many, has that romantic death effect, even more than any painting of Romeo and Juliet. In fact in the othe acts, women ( lady Macbeth)are the most powerful, exploiting the weakness in man "...And take my milk for gall, you murdering ministers," to find courage to kill Banquo and his son. Act 3, Scene 1, Page 6, so more often his aspect lies in tragedies rather than empowering of men...as in Romeo and Juliet. He is much about tragedy. Ophelia's death was one of the nicer deaths. Some of others, deaths of men, suffered horribly.

    Anyway, always open to interpretation, and I thank you for following this through.
    My very best, and thank you so much for the six stars'
    best wishes.
    RG

reply by Nika2016 on 31-Oct-2017
    always honored to be able to read your work, especially about the sea...:)
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As always your words are not words but music. I don't have audio that works well so I only read your works but they are their own symphony-no extra needed. A beautiful painting to accompany also.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Thank you for reading. The audio was a piece by Kerri, perfect for the theme.
    Thank you so much for sticking by it.
    I appreciate it.
    Sending you best wishes.
    RGstar
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Ophelia is THe most heart touching chaacters of Shakespeare. hamlet's procrastinations and indecisions affected her badly .Her father's murder by Hamlet (though through a mistaken identity) confused her more and imbalanced her otherwise very tender sensibilities.
I have always thought of writing about her but was not sure I could catch the pathos effectively. You have done it very well.Your poem brings out her tragedy and its associated sorrow very effectively.I particularly liked the way you used her flower dialogue to bring out her 'method' in the madness.it is touching that she set the violets down without giving them to any one.
I also enjoyed the stanza,"perchance ,as now, to sleep ......It has echoes of hamlet's own monologue.

great work.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    What a brilliant review. Not for colour of stars, but the interest, the precision, and eye for the details I wished to put forth...also. the following of the work to a cent. Couldn't have wished for more than you gave. I thank you so much. These are those we think of as reviews.
    My thanks to you, dear author.
    Thank you so much for the six stars.
    Have a beautiful day.
    RGstar
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This was a very interesting take on this piece. I was able to gain a more complete understanding of the Shakespeare writing. I have some of his books that belonged to my grandfather and have been trying to read them. Thank you for your time and explanation at the end of your verse.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Ohh, how I would love those books...especially if they are old and written so.
    Thank you so much. I appreciate you taking time with this one.
    My very best to you.
    Have a great day.
    RGstar
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When anyone mentions Hamlet to me, I am reminded of a brilliant cartoon from many years ago. Emerging from a theatre where the play had been performed, wife says to husband, "I didn't like it. It was too full of cliches".

You have avoided that pitfall in this magnificent poem with only the occasional line being couched in iambic pentamer, and the quotations alluded to rather than stated outright. Despite that, there is a distinctive flavour of Shakespearean values, beliefs, and times in here. Flowers had definite connections with emotions and situations in those days, that were readily understood by all and sundry. There is a beautiful traditional English folksong called "The Seeds of Love", that under a new tune has been "claimed" as being written by Loreena Mckennitt a young lady who makes a habit of this sort of plagiarism on the net. The lyrics she uses were in fact collected by Cecil Sharpe, and the song deals with the language of flowers that you mention.

After the initial introductory line your poem begins by harking back, or rather forward to another palay of the Bard's "Macbeth" ( first performed in 1605, while Hamlet was first performed in 1600).

"For if foul be deemed fair, then let fair be said foul". A forerunner of the witches' opening to "Macbeth", ( "Fair is foul and fouls is fair: Hover through the fog and filthy air."). Though the air may be less filthy here in Elsinore than upon the Scottish blasted heath, the deeds alluded to in the Danish play are just as heinous as those of the Scottish..

You employ devices of your own in this that though they may owe little to Shakespeare, make great poetry like this example of internal rhyme times three. "Where they, on that day, would lead her to betray 'her' love."

This is a masterpiece of a poem.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Hi, Gynty. I was curious as to your review when it would come, and as expected, wise and to the point.
    "Alluded to" rather than said...yes, that is a trademark of my poetry, which I like to think positive, and would like to see more top poets use this as a go to. My own quote and motto in writing poetry is;

    "Something said, without saying it"

    As to something that I find excellent in you, is you find aspects of my write, technique wise, and highlight it. That let me know you take notice and are learned in the classes you teach, so I am not wrong in recommending you at all. For example;

    "Where they, on that day, would lead her to betray 'her' love."

    You see, I this is the way I write, in general, without Shakespeare in mind. It just comes to mind naturally, and I promise you, this sentence was never in thought of the Bards words, just my brain in tune with the era, that somehow I have , for some unknown reason, a connection to. As I said to one author, I might have to start believing in reincarnation.

    Also something that you have hit on before. 'Iambic pentameter.'

    Unless sonnet, I never really put my head down to write in this form, that I often do is because I write this way. Perhaps a good sign for it is probably what the Baird found smoothest in portraying what should be said. I am happy that this falls into place, even without knowledge, for it tells me, something is right. Than you for its mention.

    Once again. I admire your analytical qualities , favorable or unfavorable, there is always a point.
    I say thank you for an excellent review...and for you to call this a masterpiece, which is not an easy thing coming from you, I take it with honour.
    Thank you.
    I would love to write more of these, but I think one a year or every six months will suffice.

    Thank you very much author. I appreciate it.
    Thank you for the six stars, that look very small in comparison to the might of review.

    My best wishes.
    RGstar

reply by Pantygynt on 31-Oct-2017
    It is always a pleasure to review your work, and thank you for this gracious reply.
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Old style romantic poetry done in grand style. This poem is full of vibrant imagery and emotion that reaches out to the reader. It evokes visions of fair Ophelia and her tragic loves, life, and losses. Very well done.


 Comment Written 31-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Thank you so much. I happened out of curiosity or spur of the moment to want to see who you were, having not seen you at my work before, and what a pleasurable surprise. A brilliant talent and piece of work I found, so I say to all who read this, please check out this author's work, "INTERLUDE AT THE FOUNTAIN"
    Brilliant.

    Thank you so much. So pleasurable to read yours too.

    Have a great day author...you truly are one.

    My best wishes, ands thank you for the six stars.
    RGstar
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Dear Roy, you have excelled yourself with this beautiful poem. I loved it, and also your author notes. Every line is a gem. I pondered over so many lines and marvelled how well you wrote it and the way wrote it. I particularly loved -

Rosemary and Pansies, to her loving brother gives,
in mind of memory and thoughts.
Fennel and Columbines, the "thankless flower"as now fit for a Queen--
a rebuke of her faithlessness, false flattery and ingratitude.
Daisies to King, in irony of innocence and purity,
as well to him, Rue...a symbol of regret and sorrow.
Violets would he also have received...a mark of early death.
Yet, she had none, long dried in sleep with own father.

A very lovely piece of writing and surely a winner. Good Luck, Dorothy x


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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Thank you, Dorothy. Always good to see you. I really do not hold my breath in those kinds of competitions, my winning is always here with the likes of you, though it is fun to be with an author led once in a while, something I really do, for personal reasons.

    OI wish you a lovely day,my friend. Thank you once again for combing this piece. I could quite easily have written a book about her. Glad you braved the time.
    Thank you for the six stars.
    My best wishes.
    Have a lovely day.

    RG
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hello my friend. I read every word of this and all of your author's notes ... Even not understanding or knowing much of Shakespeare, I found myself falling under the spell of these words and how they moved down the page. I could hear your voice reciting this piece with all the dramatic pauses and hesitations. The voice would move through a range of textural sounds. As if in symphony my friend. That's how strong this write is. It tells it's story the way it should and your reader can't help but to be moved and taken on a journey. Whether that reader understands completely or not does not matter, cause if you give this piece the respect it deserves, you will go with it as it spirals you into a thrilling participation that you go so willingly and eagerly is just the bonus.

It is a piece that can be read a few times and each time your heart discovers something else. Thank you so much for the pleasure of your heart felt, strong and beautiful work of art! xoxo deborah


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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2017
    Hi, my dear friend. Thank you. Thank you for the great comments and support.
    Those who would read over only cement my wish and honor as well acceptance that makes me humble.
    Thank you so much.
    Wishing you a brighter day.
    My best.
    RG
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