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I Saw You Dance the Tango


Love Poem Contest

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awsome123
 
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What a great list of instruments, all with the right sounds doing it's part as the band plays on and on as the sound of the music makes your fandao a pleasant and memorable occasion for you and your partner



 Comment Written 01-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 01-Nov-2017
    Thanks for the kind words.

    Steve
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OMG I chortled all through this!!! Do you ever perform your own pieces, Steve? (On stage?) You CERTAINLY SHOULD!! OR I SHOULD!!! or WE should!!! I'd forgotten how much I missed your wit and uniquely devious rhyme & rhythm skills!!! :):):)Sharyn


 Comment Written 22-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
    Thanks - I thought you'd enjoy this.

    I'm afraid to say I'm a terrible 'performer'. I can see possibilities for some of my stuff as performance pieces, but...

    Steve
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High Stevey

Love the lightheartedness and musical mayhem that brought back
memories of Danny key and his
and the Obo then made love to the Trombone.
And it is also a great depiction of what goes on on Strictly come dancing
the tv show in England. :-))Z.


 Comment Written 18-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
    Thanks, Zelick.

    Musical mayhem it is. In fact my wife was not a dancer when I met her, but a clarinettist! Before that I wouldn't have know an oboe from a walking stick! The forty-year fandango is true, though!

    Stve

reply by strandregs on 19-Oct-2017
    If you don't know the
    Village stompers
    Listen to them on youtube
    Moscow square will fill you with
    Paradise lost.:-))Z.
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Irish Rain
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Just wonderful! The entire poem! My favorite line...'which tickled so the piccolo she tinkled then departed'...rare to have a love poem with such delightful humor! Bravo! Blessings...


 Comment Written 17-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 18-Oct-2017
    Thnks, IR. This was a lot of fun to write, as you can probably tell.

    Steve
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What can I say? I just loved your poem "I Saw you Dance the Tango. " I have had connections with bands most of my life. - said I would not marry a man who could not dance.- so he learnt. We danced the Tango on the streets of Venice to a top orchorastra outside a very posh restaurant (where the waiters were dressed in tails) to the enjoyment of our fellow coach travellers. We also are now a little stiff of joint after40 years.
All the best
Marybell1.


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
    Sounds like I could have written this just for you and your hubby! And now, how dare I confess that we don't dance?! The poem is true in a sense, but the tango is really just a metaphor for the attraction. It would have been more appropriate to make the clarinettist the object of my affections, for that is what my wife was very talented at when I met her all those years ago.

    In any case, I am so glad that this struck a chord (much better than that orchestra!)

    Thanks for the lovely review.

    Steve

reply by marybell1 on 17-Oct-2017

    Thank YOU. You brought back many happy memories, though the waltz and slow foxtrot are our pace nowadays.
    All the best.
    Marybell1.
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Pam (respa)
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-The image is good.
-Quite a poem about love
and the very confused orchestra!
-Excellent meter, rhyme, and imagery all
add to the creativity of this poem.
-It all started when
"The maestro twirled his baton in a subtle misdirection"
-Through all of the musical chaos, you met her and it's
been over 40 years, all because of the tango!
-Your poem is deserving of a win, Steve.
-Congratulations on 40 years together.



 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
    Thanks, Pam. This was a fun poem with a few grains of truth in the story, even though neither of us has ever danced the tango! 45 years now since we met...

    Steve

reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Oct-2017
    You are quite welcome, Steve. The beauty of poetry is it doesn't have to be all true. You did a great job, and congratulations again on 45 years.
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A performance even a gobbledegook could enjoy
Jubilant and most ebullient
A love song-poem-dance symphony
twanged, tickled and twirled
as only a maestro could
The gazelle may be stiff, but he can still leap
and perform a fine fandango
Masterly done
Good luck in the contest
RS


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
    Thank you for the fine review.

    This was a fun poem to write and has evoked some wonderful reviews. Even the Gobbledegooks may have been outshone!

    Steve
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It painted a really good description of the scenario you described, it has a really good flow. I really enjoyed reading this poem.
Best of luck in the contest
With best wishes
Allyzeé


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
    Hi and welcome to FanStory. I look forward to reading some of your work.

    Thanks for the review.

    Steve
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Steve, this funny story of love at first sight (and dance) had me laughing out loud. What your orchestra lacked in performance your protagonist made up in enthusiasm. Fabulous! :) Nancy


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
    Thanks, Nancy - it was a lot of fun to write.

    My test audience reacted favorably, though she's never danced a tango in her life. She did play pretty mean clarinet though!

    Steve
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What a unique and heartwarming way to describe how seeing her dance the tango, and becoming her partner, became your forty-plus-year fandango with the love of your life. Apparently, once you were dancing together, and despite your physical discomforts since, nothing else ever mattered. Superb, and aptly illustrated.


 Comment Written 16-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
    Thanks so much for the great review and the six stars. The tango and the chaotic orchestra are both metaphors, but the love part is true

    Steve

reply by WalkerMan on 16-Oct-2017
    You are most welcome, Steve. Yes, I considered that possibility; but it really does not matter to the heartwarming nature of the story and the lifelong joy you successfully conveyed through your poem.
    -- Mike
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