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IndianaIrish
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Best wishes in the contest with this great entry, Theresa. What lover of reading and books cannot identify with your words? You certainly reached into my life...and made me smile
Smiles,
Karyn :-)


 Comment Written 29-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 30-Oct-2017
    Thanks Karyn:)
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Oh, I smiled throughout the whole nonet. It is smooth as butter, and serves humor up as a prize. You are so very talented. Your ideas seem limitless.


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
    Thank you so much :)
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Hilarious. Awkwardly true though, I fall asleep sitting on the couch with laptop on my knees. or sitting up in bed. I don't remember lying completely flat and falling asleep. Love the photo, and again, hilarious.

lulube good luck in the contest


 Comment Written 27-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 27-Oct-2017
    Thanks my friend!

reply by Lulube on 30-Oct-2017
    welcome

    lulube
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LOL - ain't it the truth. . .ain't it the truth!

Love the truth of this - and what a great topic for a nonet!
(I even like the way it dwindles down. . .like falling into sleep :-)

In truth, I'm a little uneasy with the closing three lines - first because
the abbreviation of awake by way of apostrophe feels like a concession
to the syllable count restriction (i.e. - if this were a sentence in a line of
prose or dialog [where I stay, 'wake all night], would it pass muster?

Also, there is something distracting about the use of the word "stay",
I get the 'tricky-ness" (where I lie, awake all night/where all night long I stay
awake) but, unfortunately, I found myself thinking. . .hmm. . .did she use
stay because she's not sure if it is lay or lie? It's a minor thing - but it can
throw a reader out of the poem's momentum. . .at a crucial time.

Perhaps something like:

where I lie,
all night
woke

or

where I stay
woke all
night

might be worth considering.

(Now that I think about it, back to the point I first made about falling
into sleep, if you were to use bold text on jerk and woke . . .you could
add an interesting texture to the piece, reflecting the in and out nature
of said sleep :-)

Still, I like the overall effort well enough to give it a 5, as it definitely
held my attention and felt like both a fresh inspiration and, at the
same time, a universally relatable aphorism. :-)

(In all honesty, with the edit of woke for 'wake), I would change this
to a 6 in a heartbeat)
:-)





 Comment Written 26-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
    Someone gave me a 2 because of 'wake. I'm not sure I like woke either. I'll think about it. It is before the committee now anyway. I ALWAYS appreciate your reviews and suggestions!

reply by Leineco on 26-Oct-2017
    LOL - I know what you mean (about woke). In fact,
    if it weren't for woke's newly acquired place in American
    vernacular I might balk at that too! But the truth is, the
    poem has a playful nature to it - and using slang or
    neologism just seems appropriately waggish ;-)

    By the way. . .I forgot to tell you I absolutely adore the
    artwork attached :-) :-) :-)
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LOL! So true! Sometimes I get so drowsy and have to dose off. You described it perfectly. This is a nice little nonet and I wish you much luck in the contest. Marilyn


 Comment Written 26-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
    Thanks Marilyn:)
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Cat napping is something I try and avoid as it disturbs my night's sleep! But reading a book is the best way to drop off! I could identify with your words, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
    Thank you Dolly:)
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LOL! This is a sweet picture to compliment your work Teresa and oh so true.
That is exactly what I do on a daily basis. I'm working at some other options but this is still often the way it goes.
Very nicely done my friend.

Blessings
Janet


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
    Yep, happens nearly every night:) Thanks Janet for the six stars!! It helps take away the 2 I got on it. lol.

reply by Jmf4119 on 25-Oct-2017
    I hope the 2 was from a newbie who doesn't get this site yet. I always look to see what they have written and quite often it's nothing. But, they are very willing to negatively critique others.

    I think you may have hit a nerve with me. I hate it when low rating occur and especially over lovely poetry like yours. Hope you have a good day Teresa. Thanks for letting me rant.

    Janet

reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
    Nope, she had been on the site since 2011 and has a lot in her portfolio but I am not familiar with her. She didn't like 'wake.
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Hi Tab,

The poem you wrote for the Nonet Poetry Contest was nice to read.
You are always wonderful at writing very nice things.
I like the picture that you have used with your poem.
I have two cats myself. A male and the other a female.

Kat


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
    Thank you Kat:)
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honeytree
 
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The art work is really
great for these words written
I guess it great to be catnapping.
We can wake up with a jerk
then go back to sleep again.

Honey tree



Honey tree


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
    Thank you so much Annie. You are so kind:)
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I am glad that you too entered the Nonet Contest and added the very cute picture to your entry. I enjoyed your self-deprecation and tapping into something that is true for many of us! Best wishes in the competition- Joan


 Comment Written 25-Oct-2017



reply by the author on 25-Oct-2017
    Thank you so much Joan:)
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