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Grief cannot be scheduled/everyone has their own time limit

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Lucian Carter
 
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This makes sense. I won't feed you any platitudes, I'll just review your poem.

If the prompt was to write something emotional you hit this out of the park. I know it's true and I don't want to push your feelings aside with mere technical praise; still, I think you wrote a great poem from the depths of your heart. Very admirable.

Stay strong, ok?


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
    Wow! Thank you Lucian. I truly appreciate this strong compliment coming from you. I am honored by your words. Much love...
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Mustang Patty
 
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Hi, Tier;
No, the pain will never decrease nor go away. And yes, people can be so insensitive. I see you posted this on November 25th, and I had never read it before.

You are always in my prayers, my friend,

~patty~


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
    Good morning, Patty: Yes, but I know that you have been so busy and besides this poem was entered into an anonymous contest so the author name was not shown and the notifications did not go to the message boxes. I am happy that you found this poem though and thank you so much for your loyal support.
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Alcreator Litt Dear
 
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This speaks true feeling, true experience of losing is unforgettable, if man could forget ever, memory is still sweet and sour, nothing is still permanent we know, one loser feels the volume or value of loss; nicely expressed; DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 24-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much, Alcreator Litt Dear: I truly appreciate that you loyally read my work. Much love and hugs...
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I love, love, love your poem. I lost my brother at 29 and it is terrible to lose someone so young. My mom used to ask if she should be over it - what could I say? You are probably never over it, just like I never am with my brother. I can't imagine losing one of my children, and how much deeper that pain must go. So sorry for your pain. Your poem reads very well and I can understand all of it, unlike some poems. All the best.


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 24-Dec-2017
    Oh yes, so you can totally understand what it is like for my children. They did not start to grieve until they felt better about me. I was in so much pain for the first year after his death that most of the time I looked like I just wanted to die. My children waited until I seemed better and then they started to grieve. It is a terrible loss and no most mothers and fathers NEVER get over it and the pain never, never goes away...
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Wow Tier that is the second emotional heartfelt poem I have read of yours tonight I so feel your pain and hurt and anger and bewilderment your torment your questions of why and why me your unending grief that only heightens on his birthday. It must be so hard for you so let it out in your wonderful heartfelt words.
Thank you for sharing
dip


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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    Thank you again, DIP: Yes, you know whenever there is a contest on feeling or emotions I will enter. Remember I wrote a whole book of these kinds of poems. (lol) So I have much more to post. I know that you will follow me so thank you again.
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Tier
the one think I can do is to in reply to you with part of a prayer (that I wrote)

I pray
Tier's, grief will stray
In it own time ~
and her love will stay
her grief decay
and I say,
with kind prayer
God will help you share.
Your Grief
Amen
Gert



 Comment Written 30-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 02-Dec-2017
    I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE the poem, Gert. How wonderful of you to write me a poem in a review of this one. You are so marvelous. Thank you for the encouragement and the review. Oh, and I just posted one of my prayers. Talk with you soon.

reply by Gert sherwood on 02-Dec-2017
    Smiles to you Tier and pleased you like the prayer. Thank you very much.
    Gert
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Poetic Friend
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Tier,

I think this is one of your best poems, indeed. I am glad you directed me to it, otherwise I would have missed it given notifications are not given for contest entries.

I can feel your loss and continued pain. You described it so well in your words, especially in these stanzas

And last night,
on the way to the train,
I kinda wished it would rain
to hide the tears I so needed
to stream down my face,
if only to erase the disgrace
that I feel for this day - without him,
on this day, this very day called today.

Because I keep seeing...actual human beings
that look just like him, walk like him, talk like him,
and you know, they smile just like him.

Those stanzas, in particular, had me feeling some kind of way.

I agree with you, losing a child is void that never seems to fill. I am not a mother, but I lost my brother (my mother's son), to lung cancer in 2015. My mother is still grieving, his death, and most likely, would continue to grieve his death the rest of her life. I understand, my friend.

No one should tell you when and long you should grieve. These people simply don't understand the loss.

Hopefully, your poem would provide some insight.

Again, my condolence on your great loss....


 Comment Written 28-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Poetic: You are always so understanding and supportive. I definitely feel so deeply for your loss and I totally wish your mother well. Please give her my condolences because I know the suffering of losing a son, losing any child. She, of course will need your continued patience and support but I could tell that you could never be anything less of that to her. You are a terrific friend and no doubt the best daughter any mother could ask for.

    I really appreciate the six stars for this piece. Yes, I was so at my limit with the way some people act about this whole thing. I hope the poem does provide some insight. Thank you again, my friend. I am happy that you have read this poem.
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Barb Hensongispsaca
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What a heartfelt free verse with occasional rhyme. Very well done and don't the memories sneak up on yu when you least expect them?


 Comment Written 27-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Barbara. I truly appreciate that you took the time to read this poem. Thank you so much for this review and your regular support of my work.
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Oh my dear friend, I am still so sorry for your loss. Of course I agree with you 100% about grieving time. I would have talked to you that day if I'd known. But 2nd place was a chink of sun in your sadness, and no conscience about how you got there.! Your Poem I loved it was a good time to share your feelings, and beautifully expressed.
Hugs and more hugs
Trisha


 Comment Written 27-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
    Thank you again, Trisha for your great review and for the six stars. I truly appreciate your loyal support of my work. Much lovexxx
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Hello T. I read this but did not review it however I did vote it and I'm glad to see you placed second. I understand so much better these days as I face my own issues how dreadfully painful such loss is. No it doesn't get better! No you never will stop missing part of your body and heart! I feel so helpless to offer anything these days so I've been silent. I am doing my best to come out of myself as I feel as though I've been living with the pain of possibilities for too long. I suppose we could say, we either have faith or we do not! love you and felt this piece deeply. xoxo deborah


 Comment Written 27-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 27-Nov-2017
    Yes, after I read your poem and I realized that you were now going through this kind of suffering, I decided to post it. I knew that you would recognize my style of writing. I also knew that you would realize that I was sending you an extremely large comforting hug with unmeasurable crying , tears that filled buckets. I do know what you are going through, my friend and just know that my heart goes out to your and my aching is not only for my son. It is for all others mothers who are going through any kind of pain about their children.

    But especially, my heart aches for you because I have come to care for you so very much. I am very depressed these days. There was just so much loss and it keeps coming back so I will reach out to you later. Much love, my friend, much love.
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