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Grief cannot be scheduled/everyone has their own time limit

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Sharon Haiste
 
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A good entry for the 'Emotions' writing prompt.
The emotion can be felt in your poem and the picture says it all.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon


 Comment Written 26-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 28-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much, Sharon. It is great to hear from you again and I truly appreciate your review.
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Sad poem, Tier V. King.
But the emotion is there and quite palpable.
Now, you might wonder how I was able to discern that this was your work.
It's elementary, really.
The length is a dead giveaway, along with the loquaciousness and sheer girth of the poem.
I can't imagine losing one of my children to death. Not before I go.
We all grieve in different ways, and it takes some of us much longer to get over it than others.
In fact, some never get over it at all.
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 Comment Written 26-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Dean, you are so amazing. Yes, most people say that they could tell my poetry anywhere, whether I sign it of not. There must be someone on this earth who writes like me. You also have a unique style, my friend. The funny thing about these anonymous contests is that, all one has to do is go to one's profile or portfolio and they would see the poem there. (lol)

    Thank you so much for your kind encouragement.

    loquacious - 1. talking or tending to talk much or freely; talkative; chattering; babbling; garrulous:
    a loquacious dinner guest. 2. characterized by excessive talk; wordy: easily the most loquacious play of the season.

reply by Dean Kuch on 26-Nov-2017
    I use loquacious in the respect that your poetry is always very lengthy, Tier.
    I would love to see what you could do with a 5-7-5 or haiku poem.
    It might just kill you!
    Heh-heh-heh.

reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    I did do a 5-7-7. Please go to my portfolio. I am so curious to see what you think of my very few words. It is called, "When Love is Overflowing"

reply by Dean Kuch on 26-Nov-2017
    I'll do that ASAP... :)
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This was so heartfelt and touching I cannot even begin to feel what you feel at loosing your son. It is just not in the order of the way things should be. I've heard it said that when one's parent dies, its the loss of the past, when a spouse dies it is the loss of the present; when a child dies it is the loss of the future, the present and the past. Please accept my sincerest sympathy.


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reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Thank you, BB: Thank you so much for the six stars. Also, your sympathy is greatly received and I truly appreciate the encouraging words. Yes, it is not the normal way that things are supposed to happen. We should never have to bury our children. They are supposed to live, long happy lives that we helped to prepare for them but life is not kind, in this system of things. I look towards much better days on the earth, in God's promises. Thank you again.
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I would be so sad on my sons birthday, if he wasn't here, I know I would. Blessed birthday to him in Heaven, blessings of comfort to you. A heartbreaking entry.


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Yes, it is very sad because every year each birthday is a heart-wrenching reminder of his absence. Thank you for your encouraging words and thank you so much for your king review.
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Dear Mystery Writer,

First of all, I am sooo sorry for your loss. I can tell - I'm pretty sure, anyway -- that this is real life and not fiction. You seem to express these feelings much too well for it to be fiction. Bless your soul. Peace.


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much, I do appreciate your sympathy and no, this story is not fiction. It is the real deal and yes, this pain never goes away. I think I must have written about ten poems about this because the writing is a healing therapy for me. Thank you again for your kind words of encouragement.
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You have written a very heart felt poem describing your grieving. You have many thoughtful comments of what you are going through. Of course you are right, everyone grieves differently and for various amounts of time. I know this, for sure, as we lost our oldest daughter in a car accident at age 16, so I have thought many of the things you have listed as well. For us its been a long time and you are right, you never forget. I still hesitate when new acquaintances ask how many children I have - I still have to say four because she was with us for a length of time. Our faith was critical in getting us through a very difficult time. I wish you good luck in your life as well as in the contest. Blessings, Carol


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Wow! I really do know exactly what you mean. This is the best part about writing about it, not only is it a healing therapy but I have met so many other parents who have suffered this kind of loss. It helps to speak with others that truly understand what I am going through. This poem was written on my son's thirtieth birthday. February 18, 2015, two years after he passed away. It has now been four years and I cannot get rid of this aching and deep gnawing away inside. I do have three more children and I am enjoying my life with them and my husband but I keep looking to see my oldest son - everywhere. I miss him so much. Even now I am tearing up but I am at work so I better not start crying.

    Thank you so much for your kind encouragement. After this contest, I will reach out to you again. Please have a marvelous day.

reply by clsandau on 26-Nov-2017
    Just keep moving on one day at a time. I think the first several years I still thought about our daughter every day, but we too had 3 more children and you have to move forward for them. It is a hole that is never filled but it does get easier. Have faith. Blessings, Carol
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My goodness that is the most emotional peice of writing I have ever seen. I can't even
Imagine how anyone could ever get over losing a child. God Bless. Jen.


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Thank you, Jen: Yes, it is awful going on day after day, year after year without him. It is just not supposed to be this way, ever. Thank you again for the review, the stars and the very kind words.
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BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN though sad and sorrowful. I am truly sorry for you loss since I looked to see that this poem is biography. PERHAPS, you should be strong and try to find something good to bring you joy. Time is suppose to heal, but birthdays remind us. truly, liberty justice


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Thank you so much for your kind encouragement. Yes, birthdays remind us harshly. It is a constant reminder and it really, really, still hurts. I still do have other children who fill my life with joy and laughter. I have a loving husn]band as well and a large immediate family but I will still always miss my oldest son and my last baby. Life has not been kind but I'm alright.

    Thank you again, for this review and for your kind words.
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No one can ever tell you the time to stop grieving until they wear your shoes.
Trust me. I know from first hand experience, I lost my only child, my son in 08.
this time of year is hard but I make internal adjustments for my own sanity, he was just 17, and left me the last month of the year when he came to me on the eve of a new year.


 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Well, I am so sorry for your loss, also. I guess, we, the parents of loss, are the only ones who could really ever connect to such pain and aching that never goes away. I also have a friend who lost her only son. He was killed by the Police in August 2013. I went to her home to try to console her. The very next month, my son died. It almost killed me when he died but I do have three other children and also, my niece that I adopted. I could not imagine losing my only child. My heart and prayers go out to you.

    Thank you so much for the kind encouragement. I truly appreciate every word you have stated here. You are so right. it never goes away. Much love...

reply by luther maddox on 30-Nov-2017
    thank you very heartfelt
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Your write is heartfelt and real and grief is something that never goes away, you just learn to live with it. I can't imagine what it must be like to lose a child because as parents we expect to die first. I am so sorry for your loss and I understand that the passing of time does not always dull the pain and the constant reminder is always there. I sympathise, love Dolly x

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 Comment Written 25-Nov-2017



reply by the author on 26-Nov-2017
    Thank you for your sympathy and kind words. I do appreciate your review also. Yes, it is a horrible reality to lose a child or two and the pain never goes away.
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