If there's no God...
A poem.
Pays: 8 points.
1.08 member dollars
Contact Us | En español    
         Join today or login

Status

New Here?
Sign Up
Fast! Three Questions.

Already a member?
Login

Contests

Faith Poetry Contest
Deadline: Today!

3 Line Poetry Contest
Deadline: Jan 28th

Horror Writing Contest
Deadline: Jan 31st

Dialogue Only Writing Contest
Deadline: Feb 2nd

Tanka Poetry Contest
Deadline: Feb 3rd


Writing Classes

0 classes available. Click here locate a class and to learn more.

Rank

Poet: None
Author: None
Novel: None
Reviewer:None
Votes: None






Reviews from
I Miss You, My Son


A poem for my son, the truck driver

  35 total reviews 
Comment by
artemis53
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
What a beautiful, visual and emotional write. You've put down what all of us have inside who yearn for ones who have gone on before us blazing a path to our own destiny.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much Arte. You have given me a great review and I sincerely appreciate it. MM
Comment by
mermaids
Premier Author
Premier Reader
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
 
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
Your words show a life time of memories of your son. Poetry is so wonderful, we can relive the good times from the past. You have an excellent use of words that describes your feelings for your son and how you remember him at various stages in his life. I hope you can see him for the holidays.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017
    Thank you for your kind and understanding review. I wish I could look forward to seeing my son this Christmas, but unfortunately I don't think it will happen. :"( MM
Comment by
Badger_29
Darren L Gandy
Brother Badger
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  272
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This one earned six stars because of its content the clever wording and I like all of the memories you brought back. I'll just love the smell of popcorn, the shrieks of the children , and The Toasted marshmallows .all
It evoked
Deep and emotional memories in my mind, and I'm sure that all the people who read this can identify with it. I love the tribute which was brightened by the background color and font.
You did a really good job on this.

Blessings,
Darren


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much Darren! I'm sorry it has taken so long to get back to FanStory, but I've had no internet much of the last few weeks. Still trying to solve my problem. Anyway, I appreciated your wonderful review so much and thank you for adding the extra star too. You are generous!

reply by Badger_29 on 13-Dec-2017
    Hugs and kisses, and an open invitation to visit!
Comment by
2019 Script Writer of the Year
Bill Schott
 
Poet Rating
  Rank:  38
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  13
Script Rating
  Rank:  1
Review Stars
  Rank:  18
 

#1 Ranked Script Writer!
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
This poem, I Miss You, My Son, touches the minds and hearts of we who have sent those bright, shiny children out the door to find their way. They find it and we just want to have them find their way back, every once in awhile. Your poem captures some great slices of good times.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017
    Thank you Bill. I know exactly what you mean. We want them to grow up and take their place in the world but the memories of their childhood linger and make us smile often. I appreciate this review so much. MM
Comment by
Ben Colder
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Script Rating
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  87
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
I was thinking about my son who died a few months before the wife. Yes, I see and hear things that remind me of his moments as our family. My best to you dear poet.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Ben, I'm SO sorry! I didn't realize you'd also lost a son so recently. You have had so much to deal with lately. I'm glad you have the Lord to sustain you. Thank you for your generous gift of stars and kind words. Thank you for reading my poem. MM

reply by Ben Colder on 04-Dec-2017
    Thanks for a great poem. Yes, our Lord is my strength. Merry Christmas.
Comment by
sandramitchell
Level 1 Pro
Sandra S Mitchell
S Stoner-Mitchell
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
  Rank:  1
Review Stars
  Rank:  57
 

#1 Ranked Novelist!
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I understand your feeling, Miss Merri, I miss my sons in the same way. Now grown up and tending their own children as I once tended them. I love your poem, it describes a mother's feeling perfectly. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much Sandra. Mothers miss the children they can't see. I see two of my four children frequently. The other two, very rarely. Thanks so much for this understanding review. I appreciate it very much. MM
Comment by
Joy Graham
I think in ink
Write on!
 
Review Stars
  Rank:  91
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This is so sad. You have filled the readers heads with so many visuals that remind you of your son. I'm sorry for your loss. Today is the anniversary of my brother's death from terminal cancer. I felt almost everything you mentioned in this poem.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Thank you for your kind review and the golden star too. I'm SO sorry you lost your brother to cancer. It is very hard to grow accustomed to not seeing a loved one any more, to not having them in our lives. You have my deepest sympathy. MM
Comment by
Nika2016
Premier Author
Nika2016 has an MS in administration of criminal justice and BS political science/sociology
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Review Stars
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
This poem brings tears..such a sense of both joy and loss in your words about your children...
We are there in each part of his life with you and only a mother could remember so clearly each simple, yet poignant moment. They must remember, too.


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Thank you so much Nika. I sincerely appreciate this empathetic review and thank you for including the extra star too. You have never told me about your family, but obviously you must be a mother. Please tell me more. MM

reply by Nika2016 on 04-Dec-2017
    I have two sons...one who manages a federal-state health care system for St. Louis..the other in computer software...
    but I have been caring for the kids of family members since age 16 and have had two for four years now, so I know how it feels when they leave, physically or spiritually...It is a loss...
    Thank you for asking. I wish the best for you.
Comment by
Joan E.
Premier Author
 
Poet Rating
 
Author Rating For Short Works
 
Author Rating For Novels
 
Review Stars
  
 Rank:  20
 
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted
I admired all the nostalgia in this free verse. I have an only child--a forty-one-year-old, bachelor son, who fortunately lives less than an hour away and whom we see regularly. And I too have many similar memories of his childhood. Smiles- Joan


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Thanks for this lovely review Joan. I know you know what it feels like to remember the little boy who has become an independent man. We have such great memories of out children as little ones. I cherish those. MM
Comment by
Just2Write
 
Review Stars
 
 
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level
The open road is a lonely place, and no one knows that better than long-haul truckers. I wrote a free verse called, A Trucker's Life as a tribute to all the drivers that have what my husband calls 'white line fever.'

Your poem is more though. It is a mother's sorrow laid bare. Her son, now grown, is no longer at home and is somewhere on the open road, and headed to wherever the next load takes him.

Often, Truckers don't come home for months.

The poem takes us to the heady days of youth, when campfires and waterskiing and family bonding is at it's height.

You have created a beautiful free verse here with some nice internal rhymes
'clap their hands
and raise their deeper voices
in reprimand'

and a nice use of diphthong in the ow and ou sounds of
snowy coat,
and I'm reminded of you,
running through the snow,

Lovely alliteration with: a blur of bubbly boy

The poem creates a feeling of warmth and love, wrapped in a blanket of sorrow.

Heather Rose.

zipped into a jacket of down


 Comment Written 04-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 04-Dec-2017
    Heather Rose, you have truly made my morning with this beautifully written and touching review. I know you truly understand my feelings, and that means so much to me. Thank you for every beautiful word and for the array of stars as well. Hugs, MM
  Previous Page  1  -2-  3 4  Next Page 


Market your book.
Advertising options.
St. Louis Chapter 21 part 1
Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?


Share or Bookmark
  Contact Us | En español | Advertise With Us

© 2015 FanStory.com, Inc. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy