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An Elfin Christmas


Life on a Christmas tree farm.

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A touching and heartwarming story that brings back the true meaning of love, friendship and loyalty. It also showcases the spirit of Christmas with Klaus putting other people first and not being greedy with his profit or "second wave." I also like the family atmosphere and the give and take exchanges between family members which highlights good relationships between family members.

A worthy story.
Ellie


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
    Thank you, Ellie, for your lovely and generous review. So glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee

reply by Ellie707 on 07-Jan-2018
    A WONDERFUL STORY! THANKS FOR SHARiNG IT WITH US!
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Congratulations on your win! That is such a wonderful touching story, very well written. I enjoyed it very much and was sorry when I came to the end. Your win was well deserved. Evi


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018
    Thanks so much, evilynne. I'm so glad you enjoyed my elfin story. Peace, Lee
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Hi, Lee;
It is so easy to see why this won the contest. It had all the elements of a great Christmas story, and you wrote it in your great style. Congratulations!

~patty~


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
    Thank you, Patty. Every Christmas I try to take off my 'cynic' hat and write something Frank Capra-ish. I'm glad you enjoyed. Peace, Lee
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A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
    Thank you, Committee. I'm humbled. L
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Lee, I don't know what to say. I remember your award winning Christmas pizza story from two years ago and I do say that you have worked a miracle in storytelling again. You make the impossible possible filled with love, craft and depth. Your story about a boy called Elf was hypnotic. I also ache to read about the people who harvest the Christmas trees.

Threading this with Mac's account of the land was genius: "This land, all around us. In ancient times? It used to belong to the Abenaki, Penobscot, Passamaquoddy, M'ikmaq. So, in a way, your trees have always been our trees, too. Klaus respects that. He shares his fruit."

There are so many good things going on in your story--characters, dialogue, plot . . . Each twist and turn was like opening another gift beneath a Christmas tree, leaving me constantly surprised by things I never knew were around the bend.

Even little things such as character-building descriptions riveting my imagination: Papa palmed the cold ashes from his pipe, rubbed them into the fabric of his work overalls.

Your tale about the onslaught of artificial trees was ominous: That year, there was no second wave. Deep into December, perfectly-shaped Christmas firs, balsams, and spruce stood in perfectly-spaced rows. Uncut. Unsold. Unwanted.

But you tied everything together with an ending that rivals A Christmas Carol and It's a Wonderful Life, because it shows the good nature of the human spirit. You also added the aspect of different cultural traditions: Our neighbors bought all our extra trees, zhen decorated zhem according to zheir own traditions." He winked at me. "You see, Elf? Trees can be artificial. But Christmas is real."

I am not going to find a finer Christmas story this year. Your story fills me with hope that we can all do better. Alf carrying on his family traditions of Christmas tree selling made me think of the generations of families who sell trees in my area, too.

Thank you for sharing. I wish you much success in the contest and a Merry Christmas.


 Comment Written 25-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 27-Dec-2017
    Thank you, Andre, for this special Christmas present. Most of the year, I tilt toward the cynical. But I take off my chain mail to write a Christmas story every year. I'm so glad you enjoyed the details. My grandfather used to rub his pipe ashes into the fabric of his overalls. Don't know why. But it seems like a sacred rite to me.

    I think the Eastern Native Americans are largely forgotten. John Wayne never fought them. I liked the idea of writing a small Eastern American story from an 'elf's' viewpoint. A Christmas tree farm in Maine seemed like an ideal setting.

    Thank you again for the gift, my friend.

    Peace, Lee

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I always look forward to your Christmas stories, hw, and your Elfin Tale this year is outstanding. The dialect is easy to read, the characters are lovable and o es I'd like to 'now, and the story is moving, tender, with your bits of wonderful humor to wrap it up as a long-awaited gift. Exceptional story...and it wasn't long at all.
Smiles,
Indy :-)


 Comment Written 23-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 01-Jan-2018
    Thank you, Indy. I look forward to the Christmas contest. It let's me be a little less cynical, a bit more whimsical.
    I hope the new year will be quiet and smooth for you and yours.

    Peace, Lee
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Golden. Exceptional. Great story. Not many can pull off accents in stories. This is a tutorial. Thanks for sharing. Merry Christmas to you and your family. This entry should bear gifts.


 Comment Written 22-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much, Dan. I rely heavily on dialogue in most stories, so I like to play around with accents, dialects, patois, and slang. They seem to add color to a story--and helps differentiate characters from one another.
    I'm so glad you enjoyed. Thanks again for the golden review.

    Happy holidays.

    Peace, Lee
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Good story, Lee! I enjoyed this little jaunt with Elf. Good tender moments without being overly boo-hoo. The dialogue was good, but I had a pause on one word of Klaus' dialogue. Mit didn't seem to fit. Maybe you could try vit. I didn't mean to rhyme.

See you next time, (I did it again)
Russell


 Comment Written 22-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 22-Dec-2017
    Thank you, Russell. It's hard to be sentimental without delving into treacle. I'm glad you think I walked the line.

    Mit is proper German for 'with'. Just as und is German for 'and'. I let Klaus's natural German poke through in these too cases because they sounded more natural to me. As you say, vit and mit rhyme. I thought it was caricature-ish for a German speaker to change every 'W' into a 'V'--especially when, read in context, the German 'mit' is clearly understood. Same for 'und'. I think accents and dialects work best when they include understandable inconsistencies--zhey zound less cartoonish, ja?

    Again, I'm glad you enjoyed. Best wishes for your holidays.

    Peace, Lee
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They call me Alf now. Three hundred pounds out-stretches all 'elf' parameters. Mama and Papa are gone. So is Mac, and so many others. But I still grow real Christmas trees. And I still nurture real and lasting friendships.
My wife is Mi'kmaq. My kids are elves. We still have a dog named Lazy Rudolph.'
This is enchanting and utterly whimsical, which I adore. I think this is a smashing write with charm and I read with interest. A fabulous work as ever kindest regards and seasons greeting Meia x



 Comment Written 21-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
    Thank you, Meia. I'm not much of a Christmas person, but I always look forward to this contest. It's sort of a license to get whimsical. Maybe I'm not a Grinch after all. Best wished for the holidays.

    Peace, Lee
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This story captures the true spirit Christmas in every sense. Such a delight to read with characters so easy to connect with. I found myself smiling throughout and a warmth covering my heart.
Very entertaining!
Michael


 Comment Written 21-Dec-2017



reply by the author on 23-Dec-2017
    Thanks so much, Michael. Normally, I'm not much of a Christmas person, but this contest helps reunite me with my inner non-Grinch. It's fun to be whimsical once in a while. Thanks for the golden review.

    Best wishes for the holidays.

    Peace, Lee
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