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That Same July


July 1996 - Part three

  28 total reviews 
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Alcreator Litt Dear
 
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A great memoir, tragedy of death of two sisters, in the same July; heart ever goes with this burden melted within; well done, well said. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, AlcreatorLittDear: You are so awesome. I truly appreciate your support. Have a great evening.
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Dumbledor
 
 
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I found this to be a very powerful piece of writing, everything about it heightens the sence of tragedy, being experienced by the family.
''even though she is not deceased
Denice would never be the same
this was just more pain more blame''
The tragedy, seemed to tear the family apart. on top of everything else.
I am not adepth enough , to make any suggestions for improvment in the verse, and all I can say is that, it is a piece of writing that reveals more of itself, with each reading.


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much. Your review means so much to me and I truly appreciate the kindness and encouragement. Please have a wonderful evening.
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dragonpoet
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I can see why the beauty of summer and the celebrating of Independence can seem odd to you in this month that had so much sorrow in it. Sorry for your losses. You lost three family members forever that month. You lost Denise as you knew her.
This is a well written free verse poem with use of some internal rhyme.

Keep writing

dragonpoet


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, dragonpoet: I truly appreciate your encouraging review...much love...

reply by dragonpoet on 19-Jan-2018
    No problem.

    dp
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Sis Cat
 
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Wow, Tier, this is a beautifully stark and painful about the month in which your family experienced "more tragedy on top of tragedy." In glittering free verse peppered with sparkling rhymes, you write of the devastation this month wrought on your family:

Their deaths filled our lives with chaos
and it stang
like contractions of labor pain.

The month became so associated with tragedy that you cannot separate the two:

even when I hear the word July,
I only hear the LIE...
because she is disguised as one of the most beautiful things,
though not so.
Her innocence is gone
and she is the significance of terror.

As a resulted, July

is connected to this loss and tragedy forever

This is a raw, honest, and brilliant part three. Thank you for sharing.


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much for the compliment on this piece. I don't know why I waited so long to post these poems. They were so long and I know that sometimes most don't like to read the very long poems so I have started to write shorter poems now. Spoken word poem are usually not very short poems and most of my poetry, to me, is more like spoken word.

    Thank you again, Andre. You are the greatest.
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nomi338
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I learned your name through a dear friend Meia S., You have a very strong poetic voice and your obvious talent reaches very far beyond the printed page. I ache for your family as they struggle to deal with a tragedy that has visited far too many African American families. Our strength and our beauty is that despite our hurt, we remain a beautiful people, we do not become monsters who blame societies ills for our own. Let the writer write on.


 Comment Written 05-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much Nomi. Meia is such a wonderful person. I love her so much. She is like a distant sister to me. I am happy that her poem of me got your attention. Thank you for this review and the encouraging kind words.
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Wabigoon
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Tier--
Some July! You are, of course, free to do whatever you need to do. I could, with immense work, maybe sort through these events of yours-- the curse on your family this July. You have arrived at your own conclusions, feel comfortable in doing so. Go from this point where your feel you need to go.

I like this poem, it is better than some of the others in this series -- it is very hard to rate or criticize these considering what they are.

It's been an adventure fanning you. I hope to see more where you have gone in the future.

Wabigoon/Jeff


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Jeff for your loyal support and encouragement. This six star review is such an honor and a major pat on the back. I truly appreciate your kindness.
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Ken the Carpenter
 
 
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beautiful picture, there are no words to change what happens in our lives, i can only thank you for the courage to post it, that in itself shows your strength and many times a tragedy has changed the world for the better. we all love you.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
    Than you so much, Ken. I truly appreciate this review and rating. Thank you for your support.
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Meia (MESAYERS)
 
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and now...
even when I hear the word July,
I only hear the LIE...
because she is disguised as one of the most beautiful things,
though not so.
Her innocence is gone'
You speak not just for those whom you write about but also you help those like me, really and truly your poetic voice is unique and special. I have written a poem in your honour this poem moved and touched me in a way I had not thought was even possible. much love Meia : Ps: I am just posting the poem I wrote for you. Love and hugs Meia xx


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Meia. You are so special to me and I did see that wonderful poem that you posted in my honor. Dut to your poem others have checked out my worked and one has become a fan. I thank you from the bottom of my heart from all of your support. You were the very first to fan me and review my work. You always held true to everything you ever said about me so I know that you are the most sincere person that I read in a long, long time. Thank you for being you, in my life.
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Mystic Angel 7777
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It is so hard to fathom so many trials within a given timeframe and easy to understand why the month itself would evoke visceral feelings from that point onward. This is beautifully written and quite powerful in both form and content. My prayers go out to you and your family as I know how hard it can be to overcome the shadow such tragedies cast. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.


 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
    Thank you so much, Mystic. I appreciate your encouragement and kind words.
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DR DIP
 
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Wow Tier this is so powerful. Because I am now so familiar with your poetry I know exactly how yo read it to being out that hurt , that emotion the way you would like it to be read. Thanks for sharing

dip



 Comment Written 04-Jan-2018



reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
    Oh, great I see that you have found, Part Three - That same July. Now you just have to read Part Two - At the Funeral.

    Thank you so much for getting around to reading this poem. I totally appreciate your loyal support. I know that you know this very much. Much love...
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