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True Love Is My Rose


Personification/Ode to a rose (audio by the author)

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Joan E.
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I made a short trip to San Francisco and fell way behind, but was pleased to find this recent post of yours as I try to catch up.

I relished the intriguing artwork you selected and your use of the acrostic form as your vehicle for this love ode. Your "drawbridge" metaphor and use of colors are very effective. I hope this entry did well in the Valentine contest- Joan


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2018



reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
    Thank you for going back to this Joan. It did not even get a look in, Joan. I don't think my kind of thing suits the committee I am afraid, but always win in the eyes of you guys. That is the importance. My very best wishes.
    RG.
    Have a great day.

reply by Joan E. on 03-Mar-2018
    Don't worry about contest results--I think they are mostly about statistics and timing. Just keep creating and sharing your splendid work! -Joan

reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
    I honestly never do, Joan. I enter certain competitions each year, like the love poem and Christmas as I love both subjects. I is great reading the other entries and enjoying them with an insigt to diverse thinking. But, as the last review is read, and it is taken down, I am already thinking about my next project, and happy with the reviews, if written well. So all good. My best to to you.

reply by Joan E. on 03-Mar-2018
    I do not enter many contests since I think the results are more based on statistics than merit. I am glad you are philosophical and also looking forward to your next projects. Here's to a productive Sunday- Joan
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Dearest Roy,

This is one of the best romantic poems that I have read in a very long time. It has all the characteristics of well-written love poem - elegance, beauty, romance, and elevated original language.

In addition to the characteristics, you wrote the poem in a challenging poetic form. I strongly believe that a well-written acrostic is one that is so well-crafted that the reader barely notices the actual acrostic because not one word or line was forced for the sake of the form. This acrostic certainly meets the criteria of fine exceptional craftsmanship.

I hope this poem does well in the contest. How can it not?

It is good to review your work again. I may post a poem tomorrow.


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Wow, wow, wow. Six stars are of no consequence considering my joy at seeing your name here, dear author. A smile broke out on my face which even this mediocre day could not prevent.
    Thank you so much. Graced by your presence the biggest reward. I look forward to reading tomorrow. It is needed. Need good work to motivate.

    Best wishes.
    RG
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Hi RG
If you had never highlighted the beginning of each sentence, I would never have been drawn to the fact it was an Acrostic poem, which for me is always a good thing, most Acrostic poems are a little forced, not this, your words run smoothly, flushing the reader with the pure romance of the moment.
Beautifully crafted my friend
Mitchell


 Comment Written 17-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Yes, thank you, Ynwa. Acrostics will expose you if unable to relate to hiding its form. I thank you for that fact.
    My best wishes.
    Thank you for the six stars.
    Have a good day.
    RG
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RG, what a magnificent and romantic Valentine's poem. Accompanied with your audio, this is quite a production. I read as I listened, and then I read it aloud myself where I picked up things that I missed from reading along to your audio. I noticed the musicality of your language using alliteration:

Rustic red, wilting; budding in bloom, or aged,

You also used internal rhymes to great effect:

Enclosed now in sleep--a sight to reap...'my Rose,' forever to keep.

What I learned is that even if the poet provides an audio track, one should still read the poem aloud for him or herself. The language transforms when one reads it aloud. I can feel it on my tongue, in my ears, and in my chest. The poem vibrates within me like a song.

Your acrostic is refined and unforced, serving as the framework for the lover describing the beloved named Rose in rhymed verse:

Sweet though the dream...yet, here, now, are we, as close to forever as could be.

Your poem is delicate, lush, and intimate like the rose itself. I do not think that anyone could write a finer Valentine poem than you did. I am left breathless by your considerable talent. Thank you for sharing. I wish you much success in the contest.


 Comment Written 16-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    My best, my friend. Good to hear from you. You have improved with both knowledge of writing, as well moral and reasoning for the safeguard of the written word. I appreciate that. I call you, author, with good reasoning.
    My best wishes.
    RG
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Oh, what a collection of words in a unique, ah lilting order. You're a poet, Sir! I'll want to keep knowing this and your other work.


Writeling x




 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Thank you, you are my dearest fan.

    Lovely to hear and read from you.
    Thank you for the six stars.
    My best wishes.
    RG
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I think that this is a good entry for the Valintine's Poetry writing prompt.
Well done and well said.Very nicely done.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Thank you, Sharon.
    My very best to you.
    RGstar
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This is truly beautiful-- a true testament to all that love is.
As always the presentation is captivating and flawless as all elements complement the topic perfectly.
A testament to your talent.
More than deserving of six stars... but I have only five to give.
:-) Shirley


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Thank you, Shirley. Good to see you here.
    My very best wishes.
    RGstar
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I liked how love whirled after you had spoken of dancing, fit nicely. The name Rose also goes well after mention of the red dress. The fading of the sound closed your poem in a fitting way.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
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 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Thank you, Brenda for your feedback. Welcome to FS. My very best wishes.
    RGstar
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Like all the best acrostics the reader is not attracted initially to the acrostic but to the poem. This is effectively a first clas piece of free verse that just happens to be an acrostic. That fact might render it not free verse as its line openings are of course locked into the acrostic, but who cares what you call it? A rose by any other name etc. This was beautiful.


 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Well, for me, ginty, it is the only way to write an acrostic, for I am a believer that the form should not interfere with the narrative, as I say for most forms. One has to forget the idea hat one has to put on display the form, and forget the narrative. This is a mistake, and can easy expose the fluidity of one's writing...or lack of it, if not weary or able, so I thank you for that observation.
    My vey best wishes.
    RG
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Pam (respa)
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-Very nice image.
-A very well penned Valentine
Acrostic, RG.
-The descriptions are beautiful
as you honor the special day and the rose.
-Each line is like music that is played effortlessly.
-I can't just pick one line because I like them all, my friend.
-The conclusion shows how important the rose is to you.
-Have a Happy Valentine's Day.




 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018



reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Hope you had a great Valentine Pam. Thank you so much.
    Wishing you a beautiful day. Thank you for the six star.
    RG

reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Feb-2018
    You are very welcome for the stars and the review, RG. Thanks for the Valentine wishes; it was a good one. It was followed up with my little cinquain, called "Cheerful Melodies," if you care to look at it. It made for an amazing day.

reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
    Wow, perfect...will do :)

reply by Pam (respa) on 17-Feb-2018
    Thanks, RG.
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