Dean my friend, rarely do I find postings that come alive on this site and your's is vibrant giving the reader that quick sand feeling; what an awesome presentation, the gravitating verses, the superb alliteration, the excellent rhyming and above all, the background music that certainly enhances the intended impact. Outstanding! Thanks for the treat.
It is so good reviewing your work again. Unfortunately, I am just here for this weekend. I am taking a break from my caregiving during this weekend. Unfortunately, my time remain quite limited.
As for your poem, if this is your just for the "hell of it" poem, please send your muse my way.
You described such a chilling sail, enhanced with dark alliteration and metaphors. May the Lord hear your plea during this unpredictable sail.
This is a great poem, my friend. Excellent rhyme and alliteration which you are the master of. Great presentation as well. Gave a great Sunday, my friend~Debbie
Cheers, Dean;
-the quality of this work is phenomenal will you combine both sound, words and artistically composed presentation that fulfills all the senses that a reader needs to satisfy oneself.
-Excellent rhyming and rhythm producing enjambment the flows fluidly throughout the writing without any syntactical or grammatical errors.
-The intense void that captures the reader and throws them into such a chasm of indefinite darkness "But yonder lights In harbor wane beyond this rising squall."
-What is really pleasing is the fun of reading your poetry where you introduce alliteration throughout and it adds an upbeat feel and tempo to you reading.
-You handle the tools of poetry in such a way that artistically creates a product as such a sculpture would mold his piece in such a way that it brings awe to the imagination of the reader.
-Thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one my friend especially with all those that love you dearly.
Alex
And chained to a bollard on the dock, a dog as big as a spinosaurus with three aggressive heads...excellent art and rhymes, Dean. Much jollier than just popping up in front of The Man naked, with a video of all my peccadillos playing...
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
Thanks, Red.
I'm glad you think so.
Enjoy the week ahead,
~Dean
Dean, I love it, and the artwork is stunning and compliments your scary and dark poem. Indeed, there seems to be no end to the horror.It's beautifully written. Please do tell me you won't leave this site for good. I'll miss your poems so much. All best. Ulla:)))
WHOA Dean, what a scary horrifying ship ride for this sailor. Seems some untimely demise has befallen him. Your descriptions and music play out mysterious chimes of his voyage through nature's storms and other struggles. WELL DONE. Liberty justice
Comment Written 18-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2018
Thanks for reading, Liberty Justice.
Best wishes,
~Dean
This is quite the morbid little poem. I like how you describe the elements of your subject matter brilliantly. The flow, content, and artwork are superb! Very Nicely Done!
The repetition of 'vapid' makes me think of a story that described the eyes of a marionette that was once a real person. This is a characteristic poem and
it looks pretty good.